Raptor

Well last time i posted (like 4 months ago or so ) I said i was gonna start a fic of Naruto and a journey to become stronger. well i just started it, however I would appreciate a bit of help. I have already all the essay of it, and this is about the 15% of chapter 1. Most of the thigs written now (it's just a beta tough) right now make no sense but as the chapter continues to grow it'll all come clear.

I have a fetish to leave lose ends everywere. This is intentional, and all of them will have a resolution. (at least most of them :devil:) I plan to keep writting this story in at least 32 eps, 30 or so pages each. But I won't if it isn't good. I really have a lot of time in my hands since I work at home, I'm graduated and my daughter is all day in skool, so...

Unfinished and Unbetaed Ep 1

It's a bit long, that's why the link. For anyone who can help. thanks even a comment would be awesome.

Edit: it wasn't 4 months... it was ever since Octuber last year.