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#1 firegirl

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Posted 26 January 2010 - 11:03 PM

ok this is my first fan fic hehe soo im nerves

first to under stand the story which is part one here are the main and side chracter youll be introduce to the villans later

Naruto and Sakura have three kids:

Uzumaki Haruka. She has red hair and green eyes. In Part 1 she is a jounin along with Shikamaru's son, Shikato. She is very smart, like sakura, but tends to be her own person. She is very protective and would do anything for her comrades. She is average in intelligence, but is very strategic and one of the best jounins in Konoha. She loves tesing people, especially Obito. The Uzumakis are very close to Obito and she was like a big sister to him. When she was young she was always called "big forehead" until Shikato came in and helped her gain confidence. She's in love with him and he's quite oblivious since he likes Inoue, Ino's daughter. Haruka and Inoue are best friends and Inoue doesn't like him like that. Haruka is also very skilled and can get quite emotional.

Uzamaki Minato. He is a very troubled boy. He has Sakura's perfect chakra control, but is a lot like Naruto in his past. He failed an his mission and lost his best friend, Hyuuga Hiroshi. Minato was very shy when he was in the academy, and Hiroshi was like how Ino was to Sakura, and helped him build confidence. Minato is also in love with Inuzuka Hitomi, who is a lot ike sakura, and she hates him for not concentrating at healing Hiroshi who died on their first mission. Minato is now a chuunin and is very serious about saving people. Sakura is actually the boy's life support because everytime he fails he thinks of Hiroshi and how he couldn't save him, much like Tsunada and her loved ones. Hitomi is kind to him now and sees how broken the boy is over Hiroshi's death. Sakura is there for him no matter what.

Uzumaki Ichigo. She is a prankster, much like Naruto, but she doesn't want to be Hokage like her brother. She has part of the Kyuubi inside her, but only four tails. Ichigo has a friendship/rivalry with the ex-hokage's son, Hatake Obito. Kakashi was killed prior to this story. Obito is like Sasuke, but different in many ways. Ichigo is very oblivous to people's maturing feelings, like Naruto, since Obito is in love with her because of how she saved him from darkness, he mentions this when she met Obito at the hospital, after Sakura put Kakashi's eye into the boy's socket. Obito is going to Sasuke, but not for power, to protect the last person he holds dear: Ichigo.

Obito and Ichigo have a very complicated bond. When they'd met at the hospital they became best friends, but by the time they hit eight years old, Ichigo told him that the two of them are the smartest and most skilled in their acadamy, so she broke it off, saying they are now rivals while pulling off the ribbon he gave to her. It had been a gift to her as a way to prevent her from being made fun of because of her big forehead and the Kyuubi inside of her. Other students beat her up a lot because of these things, sadly. The red ribbon is very important to the plot in Part 2.

Sakura is extremely important in this story. She is going though emotional troubles since later in her years as a medic-nin she couldn't save a little girl. It traumatized her to train a lot and not be with her family that much, but Minato changed that. He came to understand why she was like that. Something happens to Minato in Part 2. He fights Sasuke and receives the same treatment Sasuke did from Itachi in his first battle with him. He ends up in a coma. Tsunade is dead in this fic and Sakura still hasn't surpassed her, so this will do it for her. She doesn't want to lose her son as well.

Inuzuka Hitomi. She is very much like Sakura in Part 1 and Part 2. In the story, the development between her and Minato is going to progress like NaruSaku. However, she hates him for "killing" Hiroshi, but learns that he is more broken about it during a misson with Sakura and him. Sakura gets poisoned and Minato gets knocked unconcious, and she ends up playing the part like Sakura in the Oto nin from Part 1. She fights four rogue ninja with okomi. She wants to protect them both at all costs, so she overcomes her fear and thanks Minato and Hiroshi for that.

Shikamaru is going to be the sensei for Team 21, which Ichigo and Obito are in, including Sai's son, Kei. He forges a close bond with these three, especially Kei.

Kei is a quiet boy who can't express emotions like his two comrades, but he wants to be there for them, no matter what. He is not interested in romance, but wants to be accepted as one of them. He helps ichigo a lot when it comes to Obito and is able to keep her calm when she wants to hurt him.

obito and ichigo have a very complicated bond, as i said they met at the hospital and became best friends but during the time they hit 8 years old ichigo told him they are the smartes and most skilled in their acadamy so she broke it off saying they r now rivels pulling off her ribbon he gave her as an way to make her not get made fun og because of her big forehead and the kyubi in her. they beat her up alot because of it sadly.the red ribbon is very important to plot for part 2

these r the huyugas

Hyuuga Hikari. She looks like her mother, but has father's hair. Neji and Hinata were arranged to be married. Hikari is exactly like Hinata and guess who she has a crush on? He has blond hair with green eyes. However, she's a bit bolder than her mother, but still faints sometimes in front of him. She was the replacement on Minato and Hitomi's team, but they're not very close. I'm going to show everyone, even NaruHina fans who read this fic, that it wouldn't work. She also has Byakugan and can do rotation since Neji taught her.

Hyuuga Hiroshi. He's more like Neji, but moreso when Neji was younger. He's the one who pulled Minato out of his shell and died on his first misson protecting everyone. He was a genius in Minato's class. He and Minato had a strong bond, but he also had one with Hitomi. Kiba is friends with Hinata and their children played together a lot, so that's why Hitomi was in love with him and was heavily affected by his death.

Edited by firegirl, 27 January 2010 - 03:02 AM.


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Posted 26 January 2010 - 11:06 PM

once u read that u can read the first chapter here it is^^


The Uzumaki Legacy

Chapter 1, "Pink Hair with Whiskers"

It's a bright, sunny day in Konoha. Today was the day that the new genins would be assigned their new squad team and jounin leaders. Our protagonist was late when she arrived at the academy. She may be an idiot sometimes, but she is a genius underneath as she had passed the genin exams with flying colors. Blue forehead protector in her pink locks, going all over the place as the wind picked it up, orange jacket open revealing a red chinese style battle dress, which goes over long, white shorts. The young 12 year old looked up with her green eyes to see the academy. Smiling, she picked up her speed.

As she got there the first thing she heard was “UZUMAKI ICHIGO WHERE THE HELL WERE YOU?!”

The girl twitched when Iruka-sensei yelled her name. Oh kitten, she was in trouble, “Umm I was saving a cat from a tree, sir. Cha!”

Iruka didn’t buy it. He never did buy her excuses. Sighing he said, ”Just take your seat, Uzumaki, jeez you may look like your mother but you are definitely your father's kid."

Ichigo didn’t say anything else to iruka and ran up to her seat which happened to, sadly, be next to her rival. Ichigo scowled, looking at him. He used to be her best friend, but after she announced to him that they were rivals, well Ichigo and him haven’t talked since then.

‘This is annoying, he just had to make me sit next to the idiot,’ Ichigo thought as she was bored to death, until she heard her name: "Uzumaki Ichigo, Kei.” Of course, the next name almost made Ichigo have a fit: "Hatake Obito." 'Damnit...' the girl sighed, putting her head on the desk while the boy next to her didn’t say anything.

After class, Ichigo could hear some of the girls talking about her. “Alright what the hell do you guys want?”

One of them glared at the pink-haired girl, her name was Kyoko, “We want you to not be on the same team as Obito-kun, Uzumaki.”

Ichigo just blinked, ‘Damn teme, why do you have to have these crazy fangirls? They're annoying.’ "I’m on his team because I was assigned, and I’m not going to change because I like seeing you all pissed," she said with a smirk.

Once the pinkette said that all hell broke loose.
“Uzumaki you're so dead, you monster." That one word struck the pinkette. She didn’t do anything until she was punched to the wall. There was going to be another punch until somebody stopped Kyoko next punch.

Ichigo looked up to see longish, silver hair all over the place and a forehead protector slanted at an angle so that it covered one of his eyes, his hair also covered a bit of his violet eyes. He was wearing his usual clothing; a green vest over a black t-shirt with blue shorts that went up to his ankles.

Kyoko was the first to speak, "Obito-kun, what are you doing?"

The boy was silent at first. "Don’t touch her. What has she done? Nothing. She was just speaking her mind, telling you that I was assigned to her team.”

Kyoko got angry, “The b*tch wants to see me pissed off. That’s why I want to beat the hell out of her.”

Obito just rolled his eyes, "That is a pitiful excuse you’re lucky you didn’t make her angry." The silver-haired boy stated before letting go of the hand slowly walked away.

Ichigo just watched him leave, holding her bruise-covered cheek. 'That jerk always saves me. Damnit, I don’t want him to save me anymore...'

Uzumaki Household

"I’m home!" Ichigo shouted as she slipped her sandals off and walked into the house. She was greeted by an 18 year-old woman with red hair and green eyes. The woman was wearing a jounin outfit, but instead wore tight, black shorts and not the long shorts most of them wore.

Her green eyes twinkled while looking at the pink haired girl, “SOOO, imouto, how was school? What’s with the bruise? Another fight with Hatake?"

Ichigo could sense that Haruka, the eldest of the Uzumaki children, was teasing her. Ichigo hated being teased, “Shut up, nee-san, I’m not in the mood. Where is everybody?"

Haruka looked at her, “Okaasan and Minato are at the hospital and want you to meet them there, Otousan is in a meeting with Gaara-sama, and I have a mission with Shikato and Temari-san soon.”

Ichigo was confused, Haruka could tell, "Okaasan wants to hear who you're assigned to and who your teamed up with. You know her, she likes to know what’s going on for all of us, we all know she’s the man of the house,” Haruka said with an smirk.

Ichigo laughed. Yup, the one who is in charge of the house is their Okaasan, poor Otousan never had a chance. Ichigo smiled, but before leaving she said, “Arigato, nee-san you made me feel way better,” as she ran out the door.

Haruka smiled, packing the rest of her belongings for the big A Rank mission.

Konoha Hospital

A pink-haired woman was looking at her charts for the day. She sighed, 'Another day, another life on the line. Kami I hope I don’t screw up again...' she thought to herself.

The woman didn’t watch where she was going and bumped into a flustered, blond-haired, green-eyed, sixteen year-old. "Minato, gomen," The woman said automatically.

The chuunin looked up and gave her one his smiles that was almost identicle to his father's, “Ahh it's okay, okaasan. It was my fault.”

The woman looked at him. Minato, her little man, the poor boy went through so much and she was his life support when something bad happens. She loves her son so much that she would die for him, he was so much like Naruto, but had her abilities. He was wearing a red jacket with the Haruno symbol and a black shirt underneath it. He also wore long, blue shorts and black fingerless gloves for his super enhanced strength. Minato looks so much like his father except for his green eyes, those came from her.

While they were picking up the papers someone yelled, “OI, UZUMAKI MINATO. YOU PROMISED ME A SPAR!” The voice belonged to a reddish brown-haired girl with two triangle marks on each side of her cheeks. She was wearing a short black jacket and black shorts with black gloves covering her arms up to her fingers. She had canine-like eyes and there was a dog next to her that could rival Akamaru.

Minato blushed. “Hitomi-chan.”

His mother next to him just smiled. “Hello, Hitomi,” she greeted.

The girl smiled, “Yo Sakura-san, Mi-na-to,” she said with a cute tone. Her forehead protector was on her arm as she reached down to pull the blond boy up. Then Inuzuka noticed something. “Ehh you’re taller than me, I just noticed. Oh man, I’m up to your nose.”

Minato just smiled at her. He’s glad after that mission two years ago that she forgave him and they became good friends again.

Minato was about say something until another interruption. “OKAASAN, NII-SAN, WHY DID YOU WANT ME TO COME OVER HERE?!”

Yup, Minato sighed, it was his idiot-genius sister. “Oi, don’t yell, imouto, you're in a hospital.” ‘Hell, imouto, don’t be so loud. We need a muzzle for her sometimes!’ Inner Minato yelled, causing the boy to sigh at his inner self. Although he had gotten rid of it since his genin years, it still pops up once in awhile.

Hitomi smirked, Minato was getting upset and she knew it. ‘This boy can’t take stress, can he?’

Just then a smack was heard. “itaaaii! Okaasan, what did you do that for?” Ichigo whined.

“Minato is right. Don’t yell in a hospital and you know why you’re here.” Uzumaki Sakura stated in an accusing tone towards her daughter.

“Heheh yup, Cha. Well, Okasan I got assigned to Nara Shikamaru-sensei. I heard he’s legendary and Otousan is best friends with him, Cha. But I also got assigned to HATAKE OBITO, my rival. Why him? Kami, he's such a pain.”

Sakura didn’t say anything. ‘I thought they were best friends when they were young? They were inseparable when they were five...‘ The older woman thought to herself. “We’ll talk about it more at dinner, and go to sleep early okay?”

Ichigo nodded, “Hai, okaasan, but umm.. What’s for dinner, Cha?”

Sakura lit up, “My specialty, of course.”

This caused both Minato and Ichigo to freeze and feel sick. Usually it’s their Otousan who cooks, because even though their mom is a great kunochi and medic-nin, she’s the worst cook ever. Both Ichigo and Minato thought the same thing, 'Oh kami-sama, I hope I don’t die tonight...’

“OI! What’s wrong with you two? My cooking isn’t that bad." As Sakura said this in a threatening tone she noticed the color change on her son's face. “Minato? You look green." The Uzumaki children finally snapped out of their nightmare.

“Uhh Okaasan, gomenasai, I’m going to go hang out with Hitomi-chan tonight and uhh get some ramen. Right, Hitomi-chan?" Minato finally said out loud in a pleading tone.

Hitomi saw that the blond boy was desperate. 'kami-sama knows that Sakura-san is not the best cook. I almost died from eating something made by her once so, Minato, you owe me so much after this...' “Hai, gomenasai, Sakura-san, but we are. Let’s go, Minato. Ja!” She said, dragging him by the wrist.

Sakura watched them leave the hospital. She then smiled and looked at her complete replica, but with whiskers. “Well, I guess it’s just you and me for dinner, eh? Your father is in a meeting, Haruka is in a mission and Minato seems to be on a date.”

Ichigo smirked, her mother said the last part with amusement. ‘Okaasan is going to tease the hell out of nii-san tomorrow, and I’m so going to help, but first I have to survive tonight. But it’s fun when it’s just me and Okaasan sometimes, even though she’s much closer with nii-san.’ “Hai. It’s just you and me, Okaasan."

umm let me know what u think please i like feedback :amuse:

Edited by firegirl, 27 January 2010 - 12:14 AM.


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Posted 27 January 2010 - 03:15 AM

Excellent start, firegirl. You've made an interesting plot and a round set of characters that are very fun to read about. I probably like Ichigo, Minato and Obito the most right now. I like how you made Sakura still play an integral part in a second generation fic, so many writers seem to dial down the role of the mothers and focus on the fathers in these types of fics, so I'm thankful for that. I have to say, I like the relationship between Obito and Ichigo the best right now, they have a deeper connection, imho. I await your next update.

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Posted 27 January 2010 - 04:11 AM

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Posted 27 January 2010 - 04:19 AM

QUOTE (Muffins? @ Jan 26 2010, 11:11 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
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uhhh sorry i didnt know if i could fit everything in one page

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Posted 27 January 2010 - 04:42 AM

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Posted 27 January 2010 - 04:49 AM

QUOTE (Muffins? @ Jan 26 2010, 11:42 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
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right thanks for the info and help^^




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