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[Uzumaki Naruto Knight of Konoha]

Okay, I had a brillant idea to do a story that took place after Shippuuden. A longer time skip than what the anime and manga used in the original series, approximately five years. It is going to be a two, maybe three arc story. I have the ideas for the second but the first arc is where I need help. I have created a brand new character that is a lone survivor of a village that was massacred. All he has left is his knowledge of taijutsu, a family heirloom, the family katana, with a big secret. Four corrupted enemies given chakra based on the four guardian beasts, Genbu, Suzaku, Seiryu, and Byakko. The entire cast will be there except for a couple of people. Sasuke for one and Jiraiya, who died.

What I need advice for:

1. possible ideas for henchmen for the enemies, living or undead? (the whole undead thing was mine.)
2. Should I use flames for my survivor's taijutsu and sword skills?
3. I decided to put a dragon-like spirit in the sword. I thought it to be the secret on the sword's mystery. Got anything better?


If you have any more advice for me, let me know.

Thank you.

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1. Living.
2. Maybe chakra... but not flames.
3. No, bad, bad, the Kyuubi is enough to handle.

I do have some more advice for you. Get a new story plot I think I've read ten fics already where Naruto is either delayed or doesn't come back from his training trip with Jyraiya... and the only good ones were none of them. Me? Naruto dies in the one I'm writing. Don't worry it's not a bleach crossover, and he stays dead for about 8 weeks.

Oh the anxiety!

[Uzumaki Naruto Knight of Konoha]

Well, Naruto is back in the village and never leaves the village in the five years. Maybe you are right with the whole dragon spirit in the sword. I agree. It was a suggestion of mine.

Any more advice?

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Umm... more advice... yeah... I really think you should drop the whole OC thing, I mean most OC's just aren't cut out as many people think them to be in the beginning, sure having the last survivor of a clan/village sounds really cool but... its not really original to begin with. There are many fanfics with the last survivor thing, and even Mitarashi himself created Sasuke,Itachi, and Madara to be the last three living Uchiha's and Haku, and oh hell if I know who else.

I personally do like the idea of OC characters, but readers just aren't given enough information to bond with the new character. Just like Sai, we all probably hated Sai when we first read about him, but then we started to learn about his past and why he was such a emotionless bastard all the time... although granted I still don't like him for various reasons, mainly because of the 'revealing' clothes he chooses to wear... all the time... and the incredibly insulting nicknames.

Edited by Saint Michael, 22 August 2008 - 01:45 AM.

[Uzumaki Naruto Knight of Konoha]

Well, I will thnk about it. Yeah, I read a few fanfics from Fanfiction.net and the library here. Some long term stories really don't use OCs. To me, I like to expand the cast of characters and not limit it to the current that we have seen in the anime and read in the manga. That is just me though. Thank you for the ideas, Saint Michael.

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Well, children are usually the best OC's to start with.

A. You can just start them off with unless you're going to give them a very detailed story from when they were a baby, which I doubt most readers would want to read.
B. It's really a fun complication when you try and figure out how you're going to make Naruto and Sakura 'get together' when theres a little kid running around.
C. If Naruto left Konoha without becoming a missing nin or being banished I think it gives him a good reason to come back and settle down.
D. Because that's my OC, Tsukiko-chan, and I'm finding it to be a real blast!

[Uzumaki Naruto Knight of Konoha]

I have plans for both Naruto and Sakura in the story. Speaking of Naruto, he was never banished or sent away. He is promoted to Chuunin (finally) and strives to work hard to realize his dream. Ryouga will only have a small backstory, that is it. A brief explanation of his past and current choice of his destiny. The OC is wet behind the ears in learning mixed skills with taijutsu and his swordsmanship. Wtith the dragon idea trashed, I thought of making the sword a conduit for his chakra.

Better? (not to be angry, but it is my first najor Naruto fanfic.)

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Just be sure not to concentrate on the OC more than Naruto and Sakura, and personally I find Naruto leaving the village gold spots for major anxiety since I am an anxiety fan. BUT! I do not plan on making the whole story angst, just some really juicy spots, the rest will probably be romance/general. Also I'd make the Ryouga younger than Naruto if Naruto is going to be a 'sensai', most of the time teachers are older than the students.

Tsukiko means moon child, what does Ryouga mean?

Edited by Saint Michael, 22 August 2008 - 02:23 AM.

[Uzumaki Naruto Knight of Konoha]

I haven't found that out yet. Mostly in description to a dragon. The name went along with the dragon spirit idea. That is me. I guess another name is needed?

Edited by Uzumaki Naruto Knight of Konoha, 22 August 2008 - 02:33 AM.

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Well, I think it's important you at least know the meaning of the name of the character that YOU created.

Oooh and just because Naruto has it doesn't mean all the other characters need it to... say like he has the Kyuubi it doesn't mean that all the other characters need a demon inside them to. Like say for Sakura, people OFTEN put a demon inside HER. But Even stranger still most Jynchuuriki OCs end up being the same age as Naruto himself. Which is... unthoughtful as well as uneventful. In most logical cases it would be a rare event for a Jynchuuriki to be the same age as another Jycnhuuriki.

Edited by Saint Michael, 22 August 2008 - 03:07 AM.

[Uzumaki Naruto Knight of Konoha]

Okay, name change is in need then. Thanks Anyone else?
Besides, I wasn't going to make him stronger than Naruto anyway.

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Yeah... last bit of advice, you should only write fics that you yourself are comfortable with, if killing Sasuke numerous of times flips your boat, do it! But if you don't feel like you're comfortable writing your fic, change it so that you are.