Garden of Sanctuary [Series] - Discussion Thread
#81
Posted 25 September 2007 - 05:21 AM
This story is so beautiful :shamefulcry0js: I'm not even just saying that coz I wanna be nice, really, actually, beautiful is an understatement. I felt like....revitilized or enlightened or something or rather ... the situational irony is unparalleled by any other fanfic i've ever read...the story actually set a kind of clean, 5-o-clock in the morning, mysterious mood....if that makes any sense....
And the tragedy actually has depth. I basically bawled my eyes out, and trust me, that's a feat! I never cry in reading stories, like, ever! I was even surprised :o
#82
Posted 27 September 2007 - 03:00 AM
The next chapter is actually complete, but due to recent developments in the Naruto manga (the revealing of Pein, Konan, Uchiha Madara, their abilities, etc), I need to wait a few more extra weeks to see just exactly what they can do since Konan, the blue-haired Akatsuki member, plays an important early role in Empyreal Paradox. I pride myself in sticking to canon events as close as possible, and so I will make the necessary changes as new things are revealed in canon, thus the delay. Once the manga goes back to the point where revelations are coming at a much slower pace, then I'll release the chapter.
I apologize for the 3 month delay. :shamefulcry0js:
Blame Kishimoto.
#83
Posted 27 September 2007 - 02:06 PM
#84
Posted 28 September 2007 - 07:14 AM
To put it bluntly, yes.
#85
Posted 02 October 2007 - 01:45 AM
Nice to know that Empyreal Paradox is still alive and kicking.
XD
#86
Posted 25 October 2007 - 08:59 PM
#87
Posted 15 November 2007 - 09:26 AM
Be warned, though, no guarantees.
#88
Posted 15 November 2007 - 11:46 AM
We were larger then, and the whole world was created for our pleasure. We roamed as we would, taking what we wanted.
In those times, humans were tiny creatures, no larger than we are now.
And humans would groom us and feed us and pet us."
#89
Posted 16 November 2007 - 05:43 AM
#91
Posted 17 November 2007 - 06:05 AM
So Jiraiya is reincarnated too? While his other self is there? This is a bit confusing, so I might need some help understanding it...
#92
Posted 17 November 2007 - 06:51 AM
Empyreal Paradox
Dramatis Personae:
(note: Canon characters are characters that are actually introduced in the canon manga storyline. Semi-OC characters are characters indirectly mentioned in the canon storyline but never fully introduced, the blanks filled by the author's imagination. OC characters are characters that are made up entirely by the author’s imagination)
Main Characters
Uzumaki Naruto - Main Character. Jinchuuriki of the Nine-tailed Demon Fox. Imprisoned underneath the Hokage Tower after failing the mission that reunited him with Sakura and Sasuke three years after the timeskip for releasing the Kyuubi chakra. He survives through the loop of time and is freed from the underground dungeon in the restarted world of the past by the reborn Sakura.
Haruno Sakura (Hyuuga Setsuka) - Main Character. Reborn into the world of the past as Hyuuga Setsuka. Member of the Hyuuga Branch House. Daughter of Sen and Masaki, younger sister of Hiashi and Hizashi.
Hyuuga Clan
Hyuuga Sen - Semi-OC. The fifth generation leader of the Hyuuga Clan and the head of the Main House. Husband of Masaki, father of Hiashi, Hizashi, Setsuka.
Hyuuga Masaki - Semi-OC. Former Main House member. Sen’s wife and mother of Hiashi, Hizashi, Setsuka. Died during Setsuka’s childbirth.
Hyuuga Hiashi - Canon. Hidden Leaf Chuunin. The eventual heir of the Hyuuga Clan and Main House member. The older twin brother of Hizashi and older brother of Setsuka. Son of Sen and Masaki. The eventual father of Hinata and Hanabi.
Hyuuga Hizashi - Canon. Hidden Leaf Chuunin. The current head of the Hyuuga Branch House. The younger twin brother of Hiashi and older brother of Setsuka. Son of Sen and Masaki. The eventual father of Neji.
Hyuuga Juubei - OC. Hyuuga Branch House member. Mentioned to have perished during the Hidden Mist invasion that marked the start of the Third Ninja Wars.
Hyuuga Hyouma - OC. Hyuuga Branch House member. Mentioned to have perished during the Hidden Mist invasion that marked the start of the Third Ninja Wars.
Hyuuga Okoi - OC. Hyuuga Branch House member. Mentioned to have perished during the Hidden Mist invasion that marked the start of the Third Ninja Wars. Saemon’s newlywed wife.
Hyuuga Saemon - OC. Hyuuga Branch House member. Mentioned to have perished during the Hidden Mist invasion that marked the start of the Third Ninja Wars. Okoi’s newlywed husband.
Haruno Mikoto - Canon. Heir to the now-extinct Haruno Clan. Currently works for the Hyuuga Clan as a servant (junior attendant). Strives to become a ninja in order to rebuild her clan and accepts Sen’s offer of sponsorship. The eventual wife of Fugaku, and the eventual mother of Itachi and Sasuke.
(Mikoto’s sister) - Semi-OC. The younger sister of Mikoto. The eventual adoptive mother of Sakura. Her name is never introduced in the storyline.
Uchiha Clan
Uchiha Kazuki - Semi-OC. The seventh generation leader of the Uchiha Clan. Husband of Kokone, father of Fugaku and Madara. Kazuki and Sen were formerly best friends, but went their separate ways after a certain incident that tore their friendship apart.
Uchiha Kokone - Canon. Wife of Kazuki, mother of Fugaku and Madara. A commoner that married into the Uchiha Clan, she runs a weapon shop for the Uchiha’s in the outskirt ruins of Fire Country. Known now as the mistress of cats, later will become known as neko-baa, the master of nin-cats Denka and Hina.
Uchiha Fugaku - Canon. The eventual heir of the Uchiha Clan. Son of Kazuki and Kokone, younger brother of Madara. The eventual husband of Mikoto, and the eventual father of Itachi and Sasuke.
Uchiha Madara - Semi-OC. Daughter of Kazuki and Kokone, older sister of Fugaku.
Hidden Leaf
Kazama Masashi - Canon. The former First Hokage of the Hidden Leaf. Sworn blood-brother of Seishi and grandfather of Tsunade and Nawaki. Assassinated by a Hidden Waterfall nin that triggered the start of the Second Ninja Wars.
Kazama Seishi - Canon. The former Second Hokage of the Hidden Leaf. Sworn blood-brother of Masashi and great-uncle of Tsunade and Nawaki. Former teacher of Sarutobi. Lover of bento boxes and food of all kinds. Retains his youthful appearance through a cosmetic jutsu (the one Tsunade and Sakura used). Although retired as Hokage, he still insists to be in active duty. A water ninjutsu specialist and known commonly as ‘the Hidden Mist’s greatest traitor’. His true identity is...
Sarutobi Sasuke - Canon. The Third and current Hokage of the Hidden Leaf.
Tsunade - Canon. Member of the legendary ‘Sannin’. Medical specialist. Granddaughter of the First Hokage and the older sister of Nawaki. Eventual lover of Dan.
Jiraiya - Canon. Member of the legendary ‘Sannin’. Frontal-assault specialist. Mega-Pervert.
Orochimaru - Canon. Member of the legendary ‘Sannin’. Ninjutsu specialist. A weirdo with a genius mind. The eventual guardian of Anko.
Hatake Sakumo - Canon. Member and captain of the lengendary ANBU squad ‘Yotsuba’. Known as ‘Konoha’s White Fang’. Chakra blade specialist. Husband of Midori, the eventual father of Kakashi.
Hatake Midori - Semi-OC. Member of the legendary ANBU squad ‘Yotsuba’. Known as ‘Konoha’s Unseen’. Information specialist. Wife of Sakumo, the eventual mother of Kakashi.
Hasegawa Kaede - OC. Member and vice captain of the legendary ANBU squad ‘Yotsuba’. Known as ‘Konoha’s Silent Lily’. Assassination specialist. Lover of Nagi (of sorts). Former servant of the Hyuuga Clan, and continues to remain loyal to the clan in secret.
Kurazaka Nagi - OC. Member of the legendary ANBU squad ‘Yotsuba’. Known as ‘Konoha’s Cyclops Fist’. Demolition specialist. Lover of Kaede (of sorts).
Tsuburaya Dan - Canon. Former Genin teammate of Sakumo and Midori, and the more-recent former Genin teammate of Hiashi and Hizashi. Currently a Chuunin, his dream is to become Hokage. Older brother of Hatsune. The eventual lover of Tsunade.
Tsuburaya Hatsune - Semi-OC. Dan’s younger sister.
Hidden Mist
Mizouchi Rukyou - OC. Missing nin from the Hidden Grass, hired by the Hidden Mist as a mercenary to test Seishi’s strength. Killed by Seishi.
Mitarashi Miwako - OC. Hidden Mist Chuunin and heir of the Mitarashi clan. Wife of Takagi and the eventual true mother of Anko. Former Gennin teammates of Takagi and Kagerou. Rendered comatose by Sakumo.
Mitarashi Takagi - OC. Hidden Mist Chuunin. Husband of Miwako and the eventual true father of Anko. Former Gennin teammates of Miwako and Kagerou. Killed by Sakumo.
Kuro no Hei - OC turned Canon. Hidden Mist Jounin and strongest member among the Mist’s Seven Swordsmen. Master of Kagerou. His real identity is…
Akatsuki
Utono Kagerou (Konan) - OC turned Canon. Hidden Mist Chuunin. Hei’s apprentice. Former Gennin teammates of Miwako and Takagi. Later known as Konan, the blue-haired female member of the Akatsuki. Will carry the ring of ‘Haku’.
Zetsu - Canon. A mysterious ‘thing’ with two personalities that looks awfully like a venus flytrap. Shows up in the midst of the Hidden Mist invasion for a certain task. Carries the ring of ‘Kai’.
Miscellaneous facts about Empyreal Paradox characters and their names:
Hyuuga Setsuka - Sakura’s Hyuuga name has two meanings: it can either mean ‘winter flower’ or ‘petrifaction’ depending on which correct Japanese kanji alphabet is used. For more details on why this is significant, read Medusa Javelin.
Hyuuga Sen - Did anyone notice that Sen’s name is actually Nes spelled backwards? Despite this, he is not a self-insert in any way. His character model is based off Ulquiorra, a character from a manga/anime called Bleach. Please keep in mind that when I say I base someone after a character model, I only base his or her appearance and personality traits. In no way they are the same person.
Hyuuga Masaki - Although she never really got a real part in the story, Masaki’s character is based off Inoue Orihime, another character from Bleach. Incidentally, her name comes from the same source. Masaki is the name of Kurosaki Ichigo’s mother, the main character in Bleach.
Hyuuga Juubei, Hyouma, Okoi, Saemon - The names of the poor Branch House members that were killed before they even got a scene in the story are taken from a manga known as Basilisk. If you have a chance and can stomach a little gore, I suggest you read it because it has ninjas in it and they kick major ass. As a sidenote, Okoi and Saemon in Basilisk are actually brother and sister. They are not brother and sister in Empyreal Paradox, but are newlyweds instead in order to magnify the tragedy aspect.
Haruno Mikoto - Mikoto’s family name and her relation to Sakura as an aunt is non-canon. I just thought it would be more interesting to have her as a Haruno than a woman from a no-name clan or, god forbid, another Uchiha. I decided to leave the inter-clan marriages to the Hyuuga only.
(Mikoto’s sister) - The experimental name I came up for Mikoto’s sister was ‘Kareha’, which translates to ‘dead leaves’ in Japanese in an indirect reference to her infertility. I eventually decided to scrap the whole thing and refer her as ‘Mikoto’s sister’ throughout the story since otherwise that was going to be one more name for the readers to remember in a story where many original names already run rampant.
Uchiha Kazuki - Like Sen and Masaki, Kazuki’s character is based off of another character from Bleach - Grimmjow - which to a degree explains their dynamic relationship. His name is based off the word ‘ikusa’, a rather old-fashioned word for ‘war’ in Japanese, spelled backwards and modified a little.
Uchiha Kokone - Originally I had planned to base Kokone’s character off of another character in Bleach as well, this one being based off of Tatsuki, Orihime’s best friend. In the end I scrapped that idea because I figured Tatsuki won’t look anything like the old weapon shop granny neko-baa that was introduced recently in the canon storyline. Kokone’s name is based off the word ‘koneko’ which translates to ‘kitten’ in Japanese with its letters switched around a little.
Kazama Masashi and Kazama Seishi - The names for the First and Second Hokages are non-canon, but are based on the theory that their models are based on Kishimoto Masashi himself and his real-life twin brother Kishimoto Seishi (author of 666 Satan). Their last names are fandom created but, eh, what the hell. I like them.
Sarutobi Sasuke - Since canon never introduced an actual name for the Third Hokage, I took the liberty of adding one. The name ‘Sarutobi Sasuke’ is actually a name of a real ninja that is said to have existed in feudal Japan. Not to be confused with Uchiha Sasuke. To avoid this, I will usually refer him as the Third Hokage rather by name.
Hatake Midori - Before coming up with Midori’s name I had already figured out what her ability was going to be, so I decided to give her a name that was sort of based off of her image projection ability. Since she borders on being cybernetic, and ever since watching ‘The Matrix’ and getting the stereotypical idea that cybernetic messages are green, I simply then translated the word ‘green’ into Japanese, thus the name ‘Midori’. I actually regret giving her this name because I later realized that she shares the same name as a different OC character written in a fanfic by an author I respect.
Hasegawa Kaede and Kurazaka Nagi - At first I considered them to be candidates for Gekkou Hayate’s parents, but I came to the eventual realization that there were simply too many ‘parents of this and this character’ characters already introduced so I thought might as well add some who have no relation to the cast in order to add diversity. Their names and models are based off characters from the manga/anime series Mahou Sensei Negima. Kaede’s family name Hasegawa comes from Hasegawa Chisame (the hacker), and her name and model is based off of Nagase Kaede (the ninja). For Nagi, the family name Kurazaka is a modified version of the family name taken from Kagurazaka Asuna (the swordswoman) and his name and model is based off Nagi Springfield (the main character’s father).
Tsuburaya Dan - I took the liberty of adding a family name for Dan for the purpose of reminding the readers that Dan and Hatsune (who will have a rather significant part in the story later) are brother and sister (which I later realized was unnecessary, but by that time it was already too late). The family name Tsuburaya is taken from Detective Conan/Case Closed, from the character Tsuburaya Mitsuhiko, Conan’s elementary school classmate.
Tsuburaya Hatsune - Hatsune’s name and model is actually borrowed from a ‘create-your-own-original-character’ contest held by Kishimoto Masashi himself. If anyone is in possession of volume 23 of the Japanese Nartuo Manga, between the chapters you can see the contest results submitted by the readers, and in one of the contests Hatsune was awarded as the winner and had her character design redrawn by Kishimoto as a reward. She’s the one leaning on a large wooden paddle-looking thing she uses as a weapon.
Mizouchi Rukyou - The origin of his name is actually rather simple. I mashed the keyboard, and the screen came up with something along the lines of ‘mziovci rkou’ and after a quit edit to make it look Japanese, the name Mizouchi Rukyou was born. He was a throwaway character from the start, so I never really gave it some serious thought.
Mitarashi Miwako and Mitarashi Takagi - Characters models and names also taken from Detective Conan/Case Closed, from the Japanese police detectives Miwako and Takagi. It’s really too bad they didn’t get much of a part in the actual story…
Kuro no Hei - Character model and his given name comes from a character codenamed Hei in the anime series Darker than Black (Kuro no Keiyakusha). Incidentally, his title ‘Kuro no Hei’ translates to ‘black of the black’, with Kuro being the Japanese word for ‘black’ and Hei being the Chinese (I think) word for ‘black’, which, as a whole, gives the overall title of ‘darker than black’.
Utono Kagerou (Konan) - I noticed that most people don’t go in-depth or outright ignore the existence of the blue-haired female in fanfictions involving the Akatsuki, so I decided be different and introduce her right off the bat in my story from Chapter One. I did this quite differently by introducing her as an OC at first but later revealed her to be a blue-haired female that will eventually become the woman named Konan. I also gave her an ability (her shadow possession) that will allow me to alter her character in the event she is finally introduced in the canon storyline by allowing her to change abilities at will just by controlling a different someone, which is a good way of explaining how she will come to possess her paper controlling ability she has in canon. Kagerou’s name before she becomes Konan is taken from the manga/anime series known as Flame of Recca, from the name of the main character’s true mother. Her family name Utono is something I came up randomly which I thought suited her name for some weird reason I can’t really explain.
Hopefully this will help for the people who are confused on who is what and what's going on.
Edited by Nes Mikel, 17 February 2008 - 02:38 PM.
#93
Posted 19 November 2007 - 01:11 AM
#94
Posted 19 November 2007 - 01:51 AM
You got that right!!
We were larger then, and the whole world was created for our pleasure. We roamed as we would, taking what we wanted.
In those times, humans were tiny creatures, no larger than we are now.
And humans would groom us and feed us and pet us."
#95
Posted 19 November 2007 - 02:27 AM
#96
Posted 19 November 2007 - 03:03 AM
I'm seriously not the type of person to read this genre.
#97
Posted 20 November 2007 - 05:56 PM
Keep up the good work!
#98
Posted 21 November 2007 - 03:27 AM
#99
Posted 21 November 2007 - 12:26 PM
Yes, this is correct.
Not sure what this means, but in my story the Empyreal Virtue is essentially god, creator of the universe, the author of this fanfi... *cough* ahem, in any case, he/she/it is basically what makes the Naruto world go around. Since the Empyreal Virtue is an omnipotent existence, it doesn't really play an important role other than the fact that it's there.
Well, to be fair Jiraiya didn't know he was going to be Tsunade's great uncle.
For the record, however, Tsunade and reincarnated Jiraiya (Seishi) are not related by blood. Details to come in later chapters.
I'm seriously not the type of person to read this genre.
I actually get this a lot. Yes, this story is not for everyone. I try to make it simple as possible but apparently I lose a lot of people in the process of introducing the twists and turns I incorporate in my story. Hopefully I'll be able to sum everything up in a few more chapters so plot can (finally!) advance to the next stage.
Keep up the good work!
I will do my best!
Spoiler Alert!
#100
Posted 09 December 2007 - 10:46 PM
I will recommend it to my friends as well.
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