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#1 Dalton.T.R

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Posted 14 December 2018 - 01:26 AM

I'm currently thinking about re-writing my first book because of the number of plot holes I left from when I first started writing, and I think the opening to the series needs to be changed because it's basically the exact same to Naruto's opening. I would just like to get some opinions on what you guys think of the new opening. 

 

Original Opening

 

 

 

New Opening

 

 

And I should probably point out, I wrote the original when I was still in high school and had just started writing. So, don't be too judgemental with it. 






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