pretty good, i just dont like the 'people do crazy thigs when theyre in love' line, i think someone saying that is really corny unless its the PERFECT timing
ohhhh lol well it didnt seem
THAT corny at the time
That was good, I liked it! That was pretty good for making that right on the spot ^^ . Im not even good at thinking of things on the spot, only the summary of the story will pop in m mind xD
Thanks!!! ^0^ lol yea but i have the problem with summarizing everything lol wat u can do is wat i cant do lol how odd is that??
Ok guys, read this. It's an extract I'm making up right about... now. Comments, constructive criticism would be great.
Sakura awoke with a jolt. Her vision was blurry, but she knew the surroundings around her were dark. She attempted to rub her eyes, but realised that her hands were bound. Her eyes went wide in shock. She tried to stand up but failed, as she discovered her ankles were bound too. Sakura closed her eyes.
'What happened...'
Flashes of her memory returned to her, as she concentrated harder.
"ALLLL-RIIIGHT!" yelled Naruto, as he leaped a meter into the air, elated.
"Sakura's going on a date with me... Saku-"... he chanted as he led the way to Ichiraku's. Sakura blushed a little, and tried to avert gazes that people shot at her and Naruto.
"Naruto, keep it down, you're embarrassing us..." Sakura said quietly and sharply, keeping pace with the hyperactive ninja.
"Ok, Sakura. Sorry." Naruto went back to walking quietly, his head hung down.
Ichiraku was in sight. Same as always, it looked like a normal stall. But even the Hokages know, it is known for the best ramen in the world. Naruto's favourite. Naruto stepped into the stall, and suddenly...
Her memory failed her. 'Damn it, not now...' she thought. Footsteps echoed somewhere in front of her.
"Heh-heh-heh-heh..." A deep, low voice chuckled. It sure didn't sound friendly. "So you have awakened... girl."
Sakura struggled, and something clattered. She looked down desperately. It was a slightly circular metal object, and it had a picture of yin-yang on it. She tried to apply chakra throughout her body, and she got a sharp zap in return. She screamed in pain, her body shuddering as the electricity passed through her.
"I was going to inform you about the device, but it seems you already know what it does. If you attempt to use chakra, it gives you a sharp electric shock. Quite impressive, no?" The dark voice laughed. Oh, and if you were wondering about that boy...
Sakura gasped. She completely forgot about Naruto during this ordeal. "Wh-Where is he...?"
The voice chuckled again. "That's for you to find out, little girl." Sakura sensed movement in the dark area. Something clattered next to her, and she flinched.
"Farewell now, I have larger matters to attend to..." The mysterious figure drawled as he disappeared in a puff of smoke.
Sakura sniffed the air using her sharp nose. A unique smell passed through her nostrils, and she knew what the metallic object was immediately.
It was Naruto Uzumaki's ninja headband.
Well, that's just a little trailer for the whole fanfic, and I SUUURE hope you like it. Comments please!
HOW DARE YOU STOP IT THERE!!! lol it was getting good too!!!!