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#41 Codus N

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Posted 02 January 2010 - 08:51 AM

Hi, PJ I have a little request if you're willing to fulfill. I'd like to see a chapter dedicated to KakaRin (or at least half of it) because I'm really interested in their interactions. I know you've been building them up little by little. But I'd like a huge part of just ONE chapter focusing on them because I wanna see what's TRULY on their mnds (especially Rin) or how about in the time skip later you have Kakashi stuck in a love triangle during his rule as 6th Hokage. It'd be interesting if Shizune fell for Kakashi (I support both KakaShizu & KakaRin) that way, it'll force Rin to act & think about her TRUE feelings.

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Posted 02 January 2010 - 12:55 PM

They were already going to have a scene within the next chapter or so. It wouldn't be very long, but they were going to get some attention.

Kakashi just isn't the type to really 'open up', and Rin is going to have to overcome her own inner demons regarding Kakashi.

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Posted 02 January 2010 - 05:21 PM

hehe thats what NaruSaku interaction is for
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#44 Paradox Jast

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Posted 30 January 2010 - 08:42 PM

So... Chapter 24 is done... but Fanfiction.net's upload system is down. This blows.


Edit... luckily I managed to find a way around it.

Edited by Paradox Jast, 30 January 2010 - 10:43 PM.


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Posted 31 January 2010 - 01:39 PM

Thx for the update... although if a N/H shipper read this chapter they are SOOOOO gonna bash you.... rolleyes.gif tongue.gif

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#46 Paradox Jast

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Posted 31 January 2010 - 02:10 PM

Well there was one review I got where I couldn't tell if the person was being sarcastic or not, though since they left it anonymously, they probably were. Something about Sakura not giving more than hugs and kisses. But if they remembered a few chapters ago, they'd know that's not true. lol

Plus, if any NaruHina shipper were to read this story, they should already know that I labeled it NaruSaku in the summary. So it's not my fault. tongue.gif

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Posted 31 January 2010 - 03:59 PM

Thanks for the update Paradox I love your story so much I already left you a review. wink.gif a_thumbs.gif
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Posted 31 January 2010 - 05:07 PM

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Well there was one review I got where I couldn't tell if the person was being sarcastic or not, though since they left it anonymously, they probably were. Something about Sakura not giving more than hugs and kisses. But if they remembered a few chapters ago, they'd know that's not true. lol


Oh, I read that. I was laughing and wondering if that person was serious when I did.

By the way, fantastic story, Paradox. It is one of the best Naruto stories I have read. You should be proud.

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#49 Paradox Jast

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Posted 01 February 2010 - 12:32 PM

Thanks for the compliments. smile.gif I'm doing my best.

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Posted 01 February 2010 - 07:06 PM

So I heard rumors about your story... IT ROCKS!!!!!
I spent the whole afternoon reading it, yesterday. The reason I hadn't read it earlier was because of my lazy bum XD But I overcame that and... read it. Really, it's good biggrin.gif I'm SO staying tuned in.

Edited by Cupcake-chan, 02 February 2010 - 01:43 AM.


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Posted 01 February 2010 - 08:13 PM

by the by PJ there was a review that after thinking about it while I dont necessarily agree with the tone I do agree a little with the content. it involves the use of Suffixes and after reading through WPC a couple times i kinda agree it really doesnt become Sakura to call Naruto Naruto-kun.

its jsut feels off or odd for some reason. I think they would have mvoed beyiond the need for them by now, and the only suffix used would be Naruto calling Sakura chan.

Shed be used to it by now almost like a pet name for her from him. But I can see her actually making a point to him that he no longer needs to call her that at all. that the two of them have grown beyond the need for childish nicknames.

just a thought things are getting good in WPC so im looking forward to the next chapter
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Posted 01 February 2010 - 08:25 PM

I have been reading the fic and I have to say that the story it's very well done. It rocks!!!!

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Pairings:
Naruto: NaruSaku, (Fem)NaruSaku, NaruSasu (as brothers, rivals, best friends), ShikaTema, NaruInoSaku, NaruHarem (excluding Hinata), MinaKushi, ChouIno, YahiKona
Fairy Tail: NatsuLucy, NatsuErza :D
Bleach: IchiRukia

Characters:
Naruto: Naruto, Sakura, Shikamaru, Konan, Gaara, Kushina, Kakashi, Ino
Fairy Tail: Erza, Happy, Natsu, Grey, Lucy, Gajeel
Bleach: Ichigo, Nell, Kenpachi, Rukia, Karin, Kon

Misc.: Linkin Park, Green Day


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Pairings:
Naruto: NaruSakuHina, SakuHina, NaruTayu, KibaHina, SakuKarin
Bleach: IchiHime

Characters:
Naruto: Hinata, Tayuya, Karin, Itachi
Bleach: Orihime, Chad

Misc.: Yuri :D



Pairings:
Naruto: SasuSaku, NaruHina, NaruSasu (as gay lovers), KakaSaku, SasuAnyone, ShikaIno

Characters:
Naruto: Sasuke, Madara, "fanon" Hinata (not to be confused with canon Hinata), Kabuto
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Misc.:Twilight, Yaoi, Fillers, Sakura bashing

#53 Paradox Jast

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Posted 02 February 2010 - 12:53 AM

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So I heard rumors about your story... IT ROCKS!!!!!
I spent the whole afternoon reading it, yesterday. The reason I hadn't read it earlier was because of my lay bum XD But I overcame that and... read it. Really, it's good biggrin.gif I'm SO staying tuned in.


YOSH!

Or, well, yay! Glad ya like it. How long does it take to read everything posted so far in one sitting? A few hours?

Oh, and rumors? Hopefully they were all good ones. I think my writing was kinda iffy at the beginning, personally, but I've tried to go back and edit, fixing up what I could. As a result the story is a bit disjointed right now, because I've still got a handful of unedited chapters, but I've been posting reminders now and then that edited chapters have chapter titles, unedited chapters do not.


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by the by PJ there was a review that after thinking about it while I dont necessarily agree with the tone I do agree a little with the content. it involves the use of Suffixes and after reading through WPC a couple times i kinda agree it really doesnt become Sakura to call Naruto Naruto-kun.

its jsut feels off or odd for some reason. I think they would have mvoed beyiond the need for them by now, and the only suffix used would be Naruto calling Sakura chan.

Shed be used to it by now almost like a pet name for her from him. But I can see her actually making a point to him that he no longer needs to call her that at all. that the two of them have grown beyond the need for childish nicknames.

just a thought things are getting good in WPC so im looking forward to the next chapter


I think I'm going to stick with Sakura only using 'Naruto-kun' when she wants him to know she's serious about something pertaining to their relationship. Along the lines of "Oh Naruto-kun, is there something you need to tell me about?" I can imagine her voice dripping with some kind of serious sarcasm, and giving him a malicious smile. But those instances will be very rare, and I can think of only two times (off the top of my head) when I'd be using it. So coming from Sakura, you'll likely never see it. I already edited the odd one out in Chapter 9 (Highs and Lows). After re-reading that chapter, I decided that I didn't want to use the 'Naruto-kun' crutch. The only users of Naruto-kun will likely be Shizune, Ino, Ayame, and very occasionally Kushina.

As for where things are going, I'm glad to see that you picked up on the forward progress. The Sound Shinobi were introduced for two reasons, which you all will soon find out. Mist will be the next boost, and then as a teaser:
Be ready for Wind Country to help spearhead a new operation.


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I have been reading the fic and I have to say that the story it's very well done. It rocks!!!!


Thanks biggrin.gif



I'm currently working on Chapter 25, I have the first scene done. Chapters 11, 12, and 13, have all been edited and I'm just waiting for revisions from Denim before I update them online.

I've also got another new story in the works (I know, I know) that I actually have had the outline written for. It's a NarutoxKyuubi fic, a crack pairing of mine, but I'm not going to post the first chapter until I've finished a large majority of the entire thing. So consider this the announcement, I've gotten 3 chapters written so far of a planned 10. We'll see if it ends up that way, though. With me, it usually never does.

Edited by Paradox Jast, 02 February 2010 - 12:54 AM.


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Posted 02 February 2010 - 06:30 AM

QUOTE (Paradox Jast @ Jan 31 2010, 09:10 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
Well there was one review I got where I couldn't tell if the person was being sarcastic or not, though since they left it anonymously, they probably were. Something about Sakura not giving more than hugs and kisses. But if they remembered a few chapters ago, they'd know that's not true. lol

Plus, if any NaruHina shipper were to read this story, they should already know that I labeled it NaruSaku in the summary. So it's not my fault. tongue.gif

But what about yer DevArt account? tongue.gif

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#55 Paradox Jast

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Posted 02 February 2010 - 12:47 PM

Haven't posted it there yet actually. Sort of forgot to, I will later.

I haven't gotten anything other than NaruSaku supporters there so far.

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Posted 03 February 2010 - 11:17 PM

PJ, I'm going to be following your story more often. Right now, your story has better than Canon status.
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Posted 04 February 2010 - 11:17 AM

Why Dont you post your story on here?
I'm making perfect sense your just not keeping up

#58 Paradox Jast

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Posted 04 February 2010 - 01:39 PM

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PJ, I'm going to be following your story more often. Right now, your story has better than Canon status.


That's high praise indeed. Thanks. smile.gif

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Why Dont you post your story on here?


On here? You mean in the forum? *confused*

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Posted 04 February 2010 - 01:51 PM

QUOTE (Paradox Jast @ Feb 4 2010, 01:39 PM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}>
On here? You mean in the forum? *confused*


No No

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I read the Fanfics whilest in work - well on breaks mostly but the Fanfiction websire is blocked.

I think ive read every story in the library lol
I'm making perfect sense your just not keeping up

#60 Paradox Jast

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Posted 04 February 2010 - 03:23 PM

Ohhhhhhhhh. Wow, yeah, I didn't even think about that. Silly me. I'll consider posting it, though at first I'll probably only upload the edited chapters. That means I'd only post up to chapter 13 right now.

Hmm...




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