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[pharix]

there's not anything descriptive beyond kissing and hugs, just saying that's what it means

[Paradox Jast]

I've been reading Time Braid as well. It is Sakura-centric, and after the first couple of chapters she gets the hots for Naruto.

Then it screws with your mind, up, down, left, right, diagonally and even in different dimensions.

Long story short, she does a lot of things that make her seem superhuman, but Naruto is always stronger. She gets the hots for Hinata somewhere along the way, and drags her into a 3 way relationship.

Oh, and Sasuke is still a kitten.

[pharix]

btw if anyone is wondering where the whole demon/angel business came from: http://en.wikipedia....i/Oh_My_Goddess!

[ciardha]

There's this fic called Time Braid, it has a way of mindf****g you. The story is Sakura centric and the pairing is NaruSakuHina, is one of the best fics I've read and it got updated.

It's written by a guy who is a Hinata fanboy, bashes Sakura and makes her obsessively shallow about her physical appearance (at the Chunin exams) and view her sexy no jutsu body the way a guy would describe a woman's body, not the way women see their bodies, and turns every female friendship into a yuri sex fest, no thanks.

A big reason I like Kishimoto's writing of female characters- unlike most shonen manga he doesn't sexualize female friendships, female characters friendships have as much depth as male characters friendships, if not more, fan service of female characters is far less than the usual, and even when done tends toward far more subtle than the norm. This almost certainly comes from what Kishimoto admits- he consults his wife about how female characters should be like. The results certainly show, with female characters having as much depth of personality as the males, and the dramatically lower than typical female character fan service, and he gives equal time to male character fan service.

You want read a good Sakura centric fanfic- try "Fool Me Once, Shame on Me". Sakura is very believable as are most the characters- only Naruto doesn't quite ring true with his choices when it comes to how he hurts Sakura, his actions when he realizes it was an extremely powerful genjutsu from a revenge crazed Sasuke (not because Sasuke had any feelings for Sakura- just his canon hate for everyone ramped up even more...) does seem believable.

Hinata gets off a bit too easily as well, when she knew her actions were emotionally devastating to Sakura. I can see Sakura being forgiving under the circumstances, but Sai should have and still should in story present time outright loathed Hinata- considering how deep his emotional bond is to both Naruto and Sakura. We've seen from chapters 458-489 how fiercely protective Sai is of both Naruto and Sakura- wanting neither one to suffer emotionally, even when thinks (458-Sakura to Naruto) or sees (469-70 Naruto to Sakura ) one inflict emotional pain on the other. Shikamaru should be acting rather distant to Hinata as well, considering he found out about the whole story.

Hinata making that choice is a bit off too, although nowhere near as much as Naruto- even under a genjutsu it's just not fully believable that he would come to hate and want to hurt in the worst way a Sakura who openly is deeply in love with him and gives herself to him in every way. In manga canon it's true if it's not Naruto or Kiba suffering Hinata doesn't show any empathy, but there's a difference between being oblivious to the sufferings of most people and consciously participating in something it's obvious is maliciously emotionally crushing another person. The writer has Hinata do this but no one addresses it, it's glossed over, she gets a free pass for an action almost as evil as Sasuke's.

I bring those things up because they are the only things that bug me about "Fool Me Once, Shame on Me". Overall it's about the best of the long continuing narusaku fanfics on the web.

[Greed-Sama]

I bring those things up because they are the only things that bug me about "Fool Me Once, Shame on Me". Overall it's about the best of the long continuing narusaku fanfics on the web.

Debatable.

[crazyefra]

@ciardha
Okay... I understand what you mean and even though it has the negative things you said is still a good story that eats away the manga cannon personalities of the characters. Hinata fanboy or not the guy has been doing a good job. I have read "Fool Me Once, Shame on Me" and all I gotta say is that if Naruto ever had a part 3, It should look similar to this story (heh, maybe that's just me).


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[Blazing CobaltX]

there's not anything descriptive beyond kissing and hugs, just saying that's what it means

I won't read Shoujo-ai either.
I may try "Fool Me Once, Shame on Me".

[Torxe]

I've read Fool me once, shame on me a little while ago (It was one of the first fics I've read) and might be in need of reading it again to be able to continue to follow the story because lately I've been reading to much fanfics to keep telling them appart so I think I will steer clear of most ongoing fanfics and read them when they're completed.

I don't recall exactly anymore what Hinata did so Sakura and Naruto would break up.

But I love the story does someone know on what base it's updated?

[Hak]

it was always you by luvtoshi is now completed with chapter 8.

[Gravenimage]

Although the story was short it was awesome this chapter was beautiful and the lemon was very romantic.

[Blazing CobaltX]

it was always you by luvtoshi is now completed with chapter 8.

That was a late update, but I'm going to read it now.

[tricksie]

A voice in the wind by tricksie has been updated with chapter 22 http://www.fanfictio...t/s/5827210/22/

ty, graven-chan!

And in the next chapter is a reference to the Heaven & Earth board. tee-hee-hee It's not completely bang-over-the-head obvious — in fact, any other reader will just read right past it — but my hope is that if you're on here, and you read my story, then you'll catch it! Just a little thanks for the kind support!

[Miraomoi Akawarai]

Henka no Kaze's 'first' chapter is up! http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6795411/2/

[ciardha]

I've read Fool me once, shame on me a little while ago (It was one of the first fics I've read) and might be in need of reading it again to be able to continue to follow the story because lately I've been reading to much fanfics to keep telling them appart so I think I will steer clear of most ongoing fanfics and read them when they're completed.

I don't recall exactly anymore what Hinata did so Sakura and Naruto would break up.

But I love the story does someone know on what base it's updated?

Hinata didn't cause the breakup, but she was a willing participant in hurting Sakura.

It's here. The writer isn't a quick updater but when a chapter comes out it doesn't make the wait seem so bad, there's always a lot that happens in a chapter.
http://www.fanfictio...nce_Shame_On_Me

Edited by ciardha, 07 March 2011 - 06:56 AM.

[Blazing CobaltX]

Hinata didn't cause the breakup, but she was a willing participant in hurting Sakura.

It's here. The writer isn't a quick updater but when a chapter comes out it doesn't make the wait seem so bad, there's always that happens in a chapter.
http://www.fanfictio...nce_Shame_On_Me

I love the story and I just begun.

[ciardha]

it was always you by luvtoshi is now completed with chapter 8.

Now, that's the kind of story ending I enjoy- passionate lovemaking between Naruto and Sakura, lots humor about romance and passionate bonds, and acknowledgment of the other more subtle manga canon romances amongst their age peers.

There were lots of marriages and families started amongst their parents close in time to each other during the later part of Third Ninja World War, it's only to be expected they'll repeat that pattern. I fully expect to see that when Kishimoto writes the manga epilogue with the usual time skip you see in both shonen and shoujo manga, most of them will be married and have at least one child.

[catsi563]

basically what i tried to do in in your arms/eyes/heart. Follow up the aftermath of the main conflict and how people finally come together in the wake of war.

[Nick Soapdish]

Not an ANBU Yet by vanicent has been updated with Chapter 3.

[Torxe]

basically what i tried to do in in your arms/eyes/heart. Follow up the aftermath of the main conflict and how people finally come together in the wake of war.

I noticed this

another fanfic that's taking long to update is Mizukage or did I miss smthng?

[Miraomoi Akawarai]

Mizukage is a monthly updated fanfic. It is like once every month or so. -shrug-