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#1 Illnevergiveup3

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Posted 09 April 2015 - 07:49 PM

As I said before im taking on the responsibility of rebooting all 700 chapters of Naruto on my own. Any idea how I should go about doing chapter 1? Any changes I should make?

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Posted 09 April 2015 - 08:18 PM

I'd say you shouldn't redo the whole thing. Part 1 was great, and it'll take forever to do it all. You could pretend that Kaguya never existed, and recreate what happened after the war.


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Posted 09 April 2015 - 08:28 PM

I'd say you shouldn't redo the whole thing. Part 1 was great, and it'll take forever to do it all. You could pretend that Kaguya never existed, and recreate what happened after the war.

 

Also don't make naruto the reincarnation of asura who was destined to end the conflict of the reincarnation of sasuke. Make the newer generation actually surprise the older generation. 



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Posted 09 April 2015 - 08:41 PM

Well, you can start over part 1, if you like, but I think it's fine the way it is. However, you can make it better, just that it's not that much of a problem. Part 2, well perhaps starting over is ok. Personally, I would do it from scratch but if I have to choose a destination, it would be after Pain Arc. After that arc, that's when the series never recovered.

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Posted 09 April 2015 - 09:53 PM

Make Sakura not hate Naruto as much but still keep her personality.

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Posted 09 April 2015 - 10:20 PM

Make canon kid Naruto flash backs of the anime.


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Posted 09 April 2015 - 10:24 PM

Make canon kid Naruto flash backs of the anime.

what you mean?

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Posted 09 April 2015 - 10:34 PM

Have Sakura find out about the Kyuubi earlier.

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Posted 10 April 2015 - 12:28 AM

A hint

 

Dont put too much romance in the beginning, make a slow burn

It's the best kind there is


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Posted 10 April 2015 - 12:49 AM

A hint
 
Dont put too much romance in the beginning, make a slow burn
It's the best kind there is

lol, that's how I like it anyways. Slow and patient.

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Posted 10 April 2015 - 01:20 AM

Id personaly say the only change needed to be made in part 1 is the following

 

Sasuke needs more of a bond to team 7, this makes the inevitable break away from them more poignant and gives more reason for Naruto to bring Sasuke back Beyond the Promise of a lifetime.

 

Sakura needs to move closer to Naruto or more precisely further from Sasuke romatically.

 

to explain I have always envisioned the team 7 relationship as 3 lines moving parallel with each other.

 

At the start they look like this

 

naruto -------------

 

Sakura ------------

Sasuke------------

 

Sakura closer to Sasuke thanks to her crush and her rivalry with ino

 

Naruto on his own as the outsider and third wheel.

 

by the chunin exams Sakura starts to move away from Sasuke as she grows closer to naruto--What is this feeling? this is Naruto?

 

by the preliminaries and Forest of death they look more like this

 

Naruto ------------

..................-----

Sakura-----/

 

Sasuke-----------\

..........................------

 

Sasuke moving away from the others--curse mark, orochimaru, vengeance--and Sakura moving close to naruto, while Naruto stays solidly on his path.

 

by the promise of a lifetime they look like this

 

Naruto-----------------

Sakura-----------------

 

Sasuke\----

..................\------

...........................\-----------

 

Naruto and Sakura are step by step side by side Sakura has crossed the middle line and though she doesn't quite realize it her feelings have shifted to falling in love with Naruto thanks to his promise--I know I trust you completely--

 

Sasuke though has moved away from them hes fully an avenger fully and willingly given himself to darkness

 

 

the part 1 story ends with Naruto going off to train with jiraiya

 

Sakura making her own promise of a lifetime to Naruto--Im sorry, you may have to wait for me Naruto, but next time we will be together.

 

Sakura makes a promise to Naruto she cant quite be with him romantically yet not until she is strong enough to stand by his side and be there with him next time they face Sasuke.

 

part 1 is about growth of the characters mainly through team 7. their bonds , the love Naruto has for Sakura and the sacrafices he makes for her, Sakuras desire to outshine and outgrow her rival Ino and to keep team 7 together.

 

And finally Sasukes slow fall into darkness which becomes a full on tumble thanks to the curse Mark but also by his own decisions. His own choices.

 

The curse mark is not ane xcuse nor does it control Sasuke, it just lets out whats already in there. The darkness and Pain that he suppresses thanks to team 7 and the bonds they form. the curse mark in a way causes Sasuke to take a step backwards development wise and lets him not so much fall to darkness but jump into the abyss willingly.

 

the Curse mark is a willing excuse that Sasuke uses to renew his vows of vengeance.


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Posted 10 April 2015 - 02:02 AM

I woudn't Change Part 1 all that much except:

 

- Give Sakura a meaningful backstory that can help more fans connect to her character

- Introduce her Parents earlier

- More Team 7 development (I think they needed more missions like the land of waves arc so we could truly see the bond between them)

- A few missions of the other teams before Chunin exams (but not lengthy arcs)

 

that's it for part 1 imo


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Posted 10 April 2015 - 02:06 AM

After the invansion of suna arc, don't make itachi face sasuke.
Make one or two mission for team 7 to develop them more.

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Posted 10 April 2015 - 04:58 AM

what you mean?

SP made many fillers about Naruto's childhood include some of them  as canon.


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Posted 10 April 2015 - 05:34 AM

I'm also thinking of letting Jairaya live. But if I let him get with Tsunade, will it mess up the new generation surpassing the last?

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Posted 10 April 2015 - 05:47 AM

I'm also thinking of letting Jairaya live. But if I let him get with Tsunade, will it mess up the new generation surpassing the last?

Why not kill jiraiya and tsunade to give development to naruto and sakura.

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Posted 10 April 2015 - 06:25 AM

Why not kill jiraiya and tsunade to give development to naruto and sakura.

yeah, maybe.

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Posted 10 April 2015 - 09:24 AM

No it wouldn't emss up the theme of the younger surpassing the olde rif Jiraiya lives.

 

Jiraiyas death was meant to touch on a more personal level for Naruto. Namely the desire for vengeance, and how close Naruto came to walking Sasukes path.but in the end  his friends and family pulled him back where Sasuke disregarded such things.

 

Tsunade doesn't need to die to give Sakura the lesson of not making the same mistake with naruto that she made with jiraiya


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Posted 10 April 2015 - 04:20 PM

No it wouldn't emss up the theme of the younger surpassing the olde rif Jiraiya lives.
 
Jiraiyas death was meant to touch on a more personal level for Naruto. Namely the desire for vengeance, and how close Naruto came to walking Sasukes path.but in the end  his friends and family pulled him back where Sasuke disregarded such things.
 
Tsunade doesn't need to die to give Sakura the lesson of not making the same mistake with naruto that she made with jiraiya

I mean Jairaya and Tsunade bring together...

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Posted 10 April 2015 - 05:27 PM

No them being together wouldn't necessarily mess up the theme either.

 

In a way it could be seen as a moment of Sakuras own maturity as after tsunade tells Sakura not to make her mistakes, she tells Tsunade that if Naruto proves anything second chances can be had to those who take them. Tsunade then goes and gets together with Jiraiya.

 

We already know that if Jiraiya had survived he and tsunade would have been together since Tsunade implied it rather heavily that she was interested and available when he returned.


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