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#21 Toby

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Posted 10 April 2015 - 09:54 PM

If you make Sakura stronger, you should also make Ino stronger and not follow Sakura's medic path.

 

 

Let Sakura learn Kakashi's demonic hell viewing technique? With cherry blossoms...

 

For chapter 1....

 

 

Naruto plans to play a prank on the Uchiha Military Police.

Sakura's sneaking around the Uchiha Compound entrance because she has a crush on Sasuke and wants to see how he lives, etc.

They bump into each other and Sakura scolds Naruto for planning to prank Sasuke but asks him how they're going to get inside.

Naruto teaches Sakura a few of his tricks on evading ANBU and they sneak into the compound and explore.

Sakura and Naruto see Itachi carrying Sasuke home. 

Then they leave. 

 

Sasuke's internally fond of Naruto b/c he's the only boy who doesn't try to suck up to Sasuke as an Uchiha heir or for his skills. 

Sakura simply hangs around Naruto.

 

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later

Naruto fails the graduation exam and Sakura grabs Sasuke's hand and goes to the Hokage Tower, planning to convince the Hokage that Naruto is stronger than half the kids in class and that's why he shouldn't be held back because of 1 E-rank jutsu.

Mizuki gets to Naruto.

Hokage uses his crystal ball to watch Naruto find out about the Kyuubi, and at that moment, Sakura and Sasuke burst in the door and see what happens in the Crystal Ball. 

 

Naturally they find out the truth and (reluctantly) go comfort Naruto over it.

I always felt keeping the Kyuubi secret to himself always bothered him, but he covers it up with fake cheer. Maybe it's better for Naruto's sake, to share his secret a little bit.

 

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Posted 12 April 2015 - 04:34 PM

and I'm keeping the Sexy Jutsu.

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Posted 16 April 2015 - 04:34 AM

Don't. Redoing 700 chapters is way too time consuming, not to mention unnecessary.


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Posted 16 April 2015 - 05:11 AM

Don't. Redoing 700 chapters is way too time consuming, not to mention unnecessary.

chapter 1 is already being worked on. I'm just doing it for the fun of it. And I have to get used to it anyway, when it's time for me to be a Mangaka or DC comic artist.

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Posted 17 April 2015 - 04:50 AM

Hey When you make NS canon... Make Sakura fall in love with Naruto after that POAL. If you're making it. Just try to make it realistic. 


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Posted 17 April 2015 - 04:33 PM

Hey When you make NS canon... Make Sakura fall in love with Naruto after that POAL. If you're making it. Just try to make it realistic. 

 

Seconded, or at least her starting to realize Naruto genuinely loves her.



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Posted 17 April 2015 - 05:55 PM

As ive stated earlier, I do believe she was already falling in love with Naruto before the POAL. But the POAL was almost certainly imho when she actually FELL in love. When the process was complete so to speak.

 

I think that in the wake of Narutos return she felt she couldn't adequately express her feelings for him, and she felt somewhat insignifigant next to him as if she couldn't keep up with him and stand at his side. Sakuras a proud girl, she doesn't back down but seeing how far Naruto had come made her realize just how far she had to go to be able to stand at his side.

 

hence the scene in the hospital where she asks him to wait for her a little bit longer.


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Posted 30 April 2015 - 05:27 PM

I would also have Sakura not follow the same path as Ino with medic ninja but that's me understanding women will think differently than most girls their age and will not chose career paths based on random rivraly. Ino should become a good intargator like her father and move away from her crush on Sasuke for chjoi the only pairing that made sense for her without having to look sideways. (Lol)
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Posted 30 April 2015 - 10:30 PM

I would also have Sakura not follow the same path as Ino with medic ninja but that's me understanding women will think differently than most girls their age and will not chose career paths based on random rivraly. Ino should become a good intargator like her father and move away from her crush on Sasuke for chjoi the only pairing that made sense for her without having to look sideways. (Lol)


I agree, Ino should've been an interrogator or something based on combat. The medic thing seemed only to be out of rivalry with Sakura and honestly didn't suit Ino IMO.

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Posted 30 April 2015 - 10:39 PM

A little medical training actually does fit Ino.

 

The knowledge of medical skills would be a boon in interrogation as she could use it for a number of reasons.

Also if you watched the recent filler they did a decent job explaining Inos choice to study medical Ninjutsu. She wanted to contribute to her team and felt she was incapable of mastering her clans jutsu.

Tsunade helped her overcome her self imposed lack of skill and she learned the basics which helped her via medical ninjutsu to learn and master her family jutsu.

 

So yes Ino can and should learn at least some basic fundamentals of medical Ninjutsu especially since as Sakuras rival she sure as heck wouldn't let Sakura just surpass her.


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Posted 30 April 2015 - 10:39 PM

I agree that it never suited Ino to become a medic like Sakura an interrogator like her father would have suited her far better than a medic due to her skills he had given her to make what is the ShikaChoIno team a better version of the first generation. I was somewhat surprised when she became a medic since her father was an interrogator and not the medic it just seemed out of place and a way to show rivraly with Sakura even when they had mended their friendship.
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Posted 30 April 2015 - 10:45 PM

A little medical training actually does fit Ino.
 
The knowledge of medical skills would be a boon in interrogation as she could use it for a number of reasons.

Also if you watched the recent filler they did a decent job explaining Inos choice to study medical Ninjutsu. She wanted to contribute to her team and felt she was incapable of mastering her clans jutsu.

Tsunade helped her overcome her self imposed lack of skill and she learned the basics which helped her via medical ninjutsu to learn and master her family jutsu.
 
So yes Ino can and should learn at least some basic fundamentals of medical Ninjutsu especially since as Sakuras rival she sure as heck wouldn't let Sakura just surpass her.


However, it's didn't fit with the storyline since she does master her clans justu and even was shown using said Justu on one of the Askstui members in the manga and anime. She could have easily used her rivraly to get better at the family justu to out do her father in his skills as a interrogator.
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Posted 30 April 2015 - 10:52 PM

A little medical training actually does fit Ino.
 
The knowledge of medical skills would be a boon in interrogation as she could use it for a number of reasons.
Also if you watched the recent filler they did a decent job explaining Inos choice to study medical Ninjutsu. She wanted to contribute to her team and felt she was incapable of mastering her clans jutsu.
Tsunade helped her overcome her self imposed lack of skill and she learned the basics which helped her via medical ninjutsu to learn and master her family jutsu.
 
So yes Ino can and should learn at least some basic fundamentals of medical Ninjutsu especially since as Sakuras rival she sure as heck wouldn't let Sakura just surpass her.

Ino's not even that good a medic, I agree that she should be versed in it to help her interrogation skills & team but making her SOLELY a medic was lazy writing. Sakura is also the blunt forces brawns of her team in addition to being a medic. Ino's mind control jutsu is awesome but it was rarely used. I dunno, I just expected Ino, with her strong loud personality, to have more combat skills to her. But that's probably just Kishimoto's sexism.

Edited by Aizen-Sama, 30 April 2015 - 10:54 PM.


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Posted 01 May 2015 - 12:15 AM

Ino shouldn't be a master ,medic No I agree with that. Even the anime filler follows this path with tsunade only training her in the basics and fundamentals with the intention of helping her get better at her clans jutsu. .

 

As for her combat skills I think ino was under estimated in that regard she should have been a fundamentally sound martial artist, solid basics with the 3 basic ninjutsu. And intelligent and tactical enough to support Shikamarus more strategic over view of things.


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Posted 01 May 2015 - 12:25 AM

Ino shouldn't be a master ,medic No I agree with that. Even the anime filler follows this path with tsunade only training her in the basics and fundamentals with the intention of helping her get better at her clans jutsu. .
 
As for her combat skills I think ino was under estimated in that regard she should have been a fundamentally sound martial artist, solid basics with the 3 basic ninjutsu. And intelligent and tactical enough to support Shikamarus more strategic over view of things.


Ino got the best grades in the Ninja Academy along with Sasuke so yes she should've been seen more on par with Shikamaru's intellect & helped him with his strategies. That would've been interesting to see.

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Posted 01 May 2015 - 12:30 AM

Ino got the best grades in the Ninja Academy along with Sasuke so yes she should've been seen more on par with Shikamaru's intellect & helped him with his strategies. That would've been interesting to see.

Shikamaru is too smart, so I don't think ino is on par with him. Not even sasuke on par with shikamaru in term of intelligent.

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Posted 01 May 2015 - 12:41 AM

Shikamaru is too smart, so I don't think ino is on par with him. Not even sasuke on par with shikamaru in term of intelligent.


Well, not as smart as Shikamaru... Just more helpful to him like giving suggestions etc.

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Posted 01 May 2015 - 12:53 AM

Well, not as smart as Shikamaru... Just more helpful to him like giving suggestions etc.

I think the smartest girl in this manga is sakura.
I mean sakura doesn't rely on cheating in the chunin test.

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Posted 01 May 2015 - 01:15 AM

No Sakuras clearly smarter then anyone save Shikamaru who was shown to be holding back his scores because he was basically lazy.

 

Ino though is no slouch shes clearly intelligent, book learned, and has a tactical mind as shown during her fight with Sakura in the chunin exams.

 

that's why she makes a great compliment to Shikamaru planning wise, shes able to see on a smaller scale to supplement Shikamarus big picture strategies.


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Posted 01 May 2015 - 01:46 AM

Another reason why she should learn elemental ninjutsu and genjutsu.




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