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#1 Paul Blowfish

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Posted 08 November 2014 - 05:24 PM

I swear if I keep making these things at this rate I'll just clog up the forum with my small stories. I should make a blog where I post all my fanfics, cause they're pretty short. Back to the story now, it's after 700, in a sorta third person/Sakura POV, and is extremely short. Also, excuse how bad this is. I hope you enjoy and let me know what you think!

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Something felt absent in her life.

It wasn't a subtle change. It was as if a part of her left.

Something.... Missing. Something she always had. It was gone.

As she exited her tiny (rather run-down) apartment to head to the hospital, she noticed Naruto's children playing in the streets, while Hinata and Naruto watched their children on a bench, every now and then yelling to watch out for other people or 'Don't run into the cabbage stand again!'. Hinata's head rested on his shoulder, while Naruto adorned small, sweet kisses on her forehead.

That could have been her forehead, their children playing in the streets, and she could of been his partner in life.

But he didn't love her like before.

And it left a shadow in her heart where his love used to be.
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Posted 08 November 2014 - 05:27 PM

:cry: So many feels.....



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Posted 08 November 2014 - 05:30 PM

:cry: So many feels.....


Haha sorry!
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Posted 08 November 2014 - 05:59 PM

Haha sorry!

No, no, it's OK... I just realized how much the ending irks me so much



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Posted 08 November 2014 - 06:23 PM

THANKS for making me Cry T______T .

 

Nice Writing tho :D


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Posted 08 November 2014 - 08:40 PM

THANKS for making me Cry T______T .
 
Nice Writing tho :D



Lol sorry! And thank you! :D
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Posted 08 November 2014 - 09:06 PM

I was not prepared.


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Posted 08 November 2014 - 10:41 PM

I swear if I keep making these things at this rate I'll just clog up the forum with my small stories. I should make a blog where I post all my fanfics, cause they're pretty short. Back to the story now, it's after 700, in a sorta third person/Sakura POV, and is extremely short. Also, excuse how bad this is. I hope you enjoy and let me know what you think!

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Something felt absent in her life.

It wasn't a subtle change. It was as if a part of her left.

Something.... Missing. Something she always had. It was gone.

As she exited her tiny (rather run-down) apartment to head to the hospital, she noticed Naruto's children playing in the streets, while Hinata and Naruto watched their children on a bench, every now and then yelling to watch out for other people or 'Don't run into the cabbage stand again!'. Hinata's head rested on his shoulder, while Naruto adorned small, sweet kisses on her forehead.

That could have been her forehead, their children playing in the streets, and she could of been his partner in life.

But he didn't love her like before.

And it left a shadow in her heart where his love used to be.

Shut up! NO ONE SAID YOU COULD WRITE SOMETHING LIKE THAT! PERM BANNED!!! :cry: :cry: :cry:


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Posted 09 November 2014 - 12:12 AM

wow im in very deep sorrow crying right now


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#10 Bryon_Konoha_Ninja

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Posted 09 November 2014 - 01:03 AM

wow im in very deep sorrow crying right now

Do you need a hug?



#11 Paul Blowfish

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Posted 09 November 2014 - 02:35 AM

I was not prepared.


Lol sorry! I feel like the last sentence really catches you.

Shut up! NO ONE SAID YOU COULD WRITE SOMETHING LIKE THAT! PERM BANNED!!! :cry: :cry: :cry:


NOOOOOOOO, lol. This really hits the feel doesnt it?

wow im in very deep sorrow crying right now


Actually crying? Sorry! :sweat: Didn't think this would cause so much grief
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Posted 09 November 2014 - 02:58 AM

Actually crying? Sorry! :sweat: Didn't think this would cause so much grief

Could mean tears of joy and sorrow.



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Posted 09 November 2014 - 03:39 AM

Could mean tears of joy and sorrow.


Hmm, maybe.
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Posted 09 November 2014 - 04:32 AM

Do you need a hug?

i think i do lol this whole Manga New Naruto series really has stressed me out...


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Posted 09 November 2014 - 04:34 AM

its just that im a sensative Teenager (i just turned 15 so im frikin immature lol) and ive been touchy because of the Manga Incident So Dont take it personally i admit though its written good


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Posted 09 November 2014 - 04:36 AM

i think i do lol this whole Manga New Naruto series really has stressed me out...

And it's OK, you're young, so letting out some tears is OK :) :hug:



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Posted 09 November 2014 - 01:09 PM

its just that im a sensative Teenager (i just turned 15 so im frikin immature lol) and ive been touchy because of the Manga Incident So Dont take it personally i admit though its written good


Alrighty! The whole ending has taken its toll on us. And thank you!
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Posted 09 November 2014 - 03:31 PM

Alrighty! The whole ending has taken its toll on us. And thank you!

Seriously, and it's nice when a lot of us are trying to do alternate endings that keep everyone in character.






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