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[Phantom_999]

OMG, I haven't even introduced Akira and you're already dogging on him?     Look just wait til I work out the plot some more. Besides I was  imagining Akira to be a more mature and less socially awkward version of Part I Naruto. Just cause you don't ship Yuuki with the guy doesn't mean you should go "Ron the Death Eater" on him. Here's the meaning.

 

http://tvtropes.org/...onTheDeathEater

 

Anyway I'll think up a part 5 finish and part 6 tomorrow. (Tales Of Xillia is coming out)   Oh I've just thought of something, good............. Wait till tomorrow.

Edited by Phantom_999, 05 August 2013 - 07:40 PM.

[Hyuga Sage]

You know, If NS does get a kid; here's an idead:

 

So, we know how Naruto sucks at chakra control, thus he needs 4 hands to use his rasengan [6 for rasenshuriken]. But Sakura is great at chakra control, but she doesn't KNOW Rasengan/Shuriken.

 

So what if the kid learns rasengan jutsus and uses the chakra control to form 5 on each finger? That would be crazy. I mean Rasengan is formed by focusing chakra in the palm, but Naruto showed to be able to do it on his fingers [In KCM using kyuubi arms]. Five Rasenshuriken.... what a nightmare

[Branden]

You know, If NS does get a kid; here's an idead:

 

So, we know how Naruto sucks at chakra control, thus he needs 4 hands to use his rasengan [6 for rasenshuriken]. But Sakura is great at chakra control, but she doesn't KNOW Rasengan/Shuriken.

 

So what if the kid learns rasengan jutsus and uses the chakra control to form 5 on each finger? That would be crazy. I mean Rasengan is formed by focusing chakra in the palm, but Naruto showed to be able to do it on his fingers [In KCM using kyuubi arms]. Five Rasenshuriken.... what a nightmare

what if it's the opposite... what if instead the kid has terrible chakra control and cannot do a rasenshuriken?

[sushi.]

what if it's the opposite... what if instead the kid has terrible chakra control and cannot do a rasenshuriken?

That would be the worst of both worlds.

[Phantom_999]

Actually I think He means what if Wind isn't the kid's element? or even if it was, what if the Rasengan he makes with his wind wasn't rasenshuriken?

[Hyuga Sage]

what if it's the opposite... what if instead the kid has terrible chakra control and cannot do a rasenshuriken?

Why so negative?

[T XD]

what if it's the opposite... what if instead the kid has terrible chakra control and cannot do a rasenshuriken?

He/She means that because Sakura is his/her mother which has good chakra control, the kid can be good at the chakra control too, or at least normal at it. Terrible chakra control can not happen with this kid.

Edited by T XD, 07 August 2013 - 12:30 AM.

[Slextrem]

He/She means that because Sakura is his/her mother which has good chakra control, the kid can be good at the chakra control too, or at least normal at it. Terrible chakra control can not happen with this kid.

I dunno~ It would be Naruto's child as well, don't forget.

 

[T XD]

I dunno~ It would be Naruto's child as well, don't forget.

 

Lol. Yeah, but the kid would also be at least normal with the chakra control. This gene in her is pretty strong it seems XD

[Hanabi]

ppl remember, young Minato was proclaimed as a genius xD

Edited by Hanabi, 07 August 2013 - 09:11 AM.

[Phantom_999]

So here is Part 5!! Enjoy!!  
 
Naruto: Gaara, we're here.
Gaara: Ah, have a seat. So I'd like to here to whole story from your daughter and her Guardian.
Sakura: Eh? Besides what Tsunade-sama told you right?
Gaara: Yes. I want to know the entire thing before deciding the best course of action.
Misato: Very well, Kazekage-sama. I will speak on our behalf.
Naruto: We're all listening Misato. 
Misato: Well to start from the beginning, this occurrence started two years ago ................
 
Back at Meido's Dawn Headquarters.
 
Goutetsu: Shikage-sama we've returned.
Shikage: Yes So let us hear your report.
* the Members take their seat.*
Goutetsu: To sum everything Up The Uzumaki Naruto and Haruno sakura of this alternate world have not yet reached the potential they have shown here. However they still prove quite the bothersome nuisance. and to top it off They are informing all the countries and ninja villages of our arrival as we speak.
Shikage: So you were only stopped by the girl's powers awakening correct?
Goutetsu: Yes sir.
Shikage: And Misato has informed the other all of the countries and villages of our existence.
Goutetsu: Not eniterly. He merely informed to Hokage apparently, but she has sent already sent out the messangers
Shikage: Hmm that would prove to be a large delay to say the least regarding the *plan*. However they they only would have the basic concept of our powers. They are not completely prepared for us. However to divide our forces right now would prove to be folly We cannot divide our attention from the war. Hmm. It seems I will have to go myself.
Goutetsu: Shikage-sama! surely you do not have to go yourself!
Shikage: Oh yes. I alone can truly stand against that girl's power and, we must seperate her from these alternate selves of her parents soon lest she hastens their growth even more. In order to do that we must break her spirit and deter her from staying with them. Besides I need to get out personally every now and then. Sitting in here all day is boring.
Goutetsu: As you wish My lord.
Shikage: Good. Now then Goutetsu. You are sure your senses were correct when you fought Haruno Yuuki's parents last year, are you not?
Goutetsu: Yes sir. I've confirmed that when we last attacked them, the Haruno Sakura of this world was in the early stages of a pregnancy.

Shikage: And No one else knew about this correct?

Goutetsu: Yes sir. If any, It was likely only the deceased 6th and Medic Master that knew, IF they did know.

Shikage: Hmm then I can use this information. Alright, Goutetsu, I leave you in charge of the organization here. I'm heading off. *leaves* 

Goutetsu: As you wish my lord..........

 

*Back at the Sand Village*

Misato: And that is how we have come here.

Gaara: Hmm......... And Meido's Dawn....... Have you found no method to defeat them?

Misato: No. it is difficult enough to handle them as they have all five chakra natures, but they also have their chakra merging as well, we still have know idea how it works. The jutsu created from it is unlike anything we've ever seen, and we cannot replicate it either and therefor have no knowledge or counter measure yet.

Gaara: Well, thank you for your time. you may go back and rest.

Naruto: Thanks, Gaara. *Leaves*

*out in the hall*

Naruto: Yuuki?

Yuuki: Yes papa?

Naruto: Have I taught you any jutsu before I died in that world?

Yuuki: Mmm, just, Kage bunshin. I learned some basic healing techniques from Mama too, and she helped me work on the academy level jutsu you were bad at. But you did promise to teach me your Rasengan, before you left......why?

Naruto: ......... I see......... 

Yuuki: Papa?

Naruto: Would you still like to learn it now? 

Yuuki: Really!? You'd teach me!?

Naruto: Yes!!!!

Yuuki: YAY!!!!!!! Thank You Papa!!!!! *hugs him*

Naruto: Well we'll start after breakfast tomorrow.

Yuuki. Okay! 

 

To be Continued......... And I'll think Of a Part 6 tomorrow too, since there wasn't much added here    

Edited by Phantom_999, 08 August 2013 - 02:09 PM.

[Phantom_999]

As promised I'll make part 6. 

 

"The Battle against Meido's Dawn Part 6"

 

*Outside of the sand village*

 

Naruto: Ready Yuuki? your training starts today!

Yuuki: Yes papa! But can I ask something?

Naruto: Sure.

Yuuki: Why do you want to teach me Rasengan all of a sudden?

Naruto: Well...... how do I say this..... I guess from what you told me, the other me did not spend too much time with you.

Yuuki: It's okay. You were Hokage after all, and you tried to when you could. But I did resent the Hokage's duties sometimes...... well I understand them but still, I can't say I liked that you didn't spend more time with me.

Naruto: Yeah, so I figure I want to make it up to you.

Yuuki: Okay! 

Naruto: Did I ever tell you anything about Rasengan?

Yuuki: Not much, except that it was one of Grandpa's legacies, and that he took three years to fully make it.

Naruto: So I did then. Well there are other things, but I'll explain them later. This is hard enough on it's own, since it's an A rank technique

Yuuki: Eh? That high? Would I be able to complete it? Well actually Shu-kun's dad taught him Chidori which is also A rank. It'd be good to learn something too.

Naruto: Huh? Sasuke taught Shunamori Chidori?

Yuuki: Yeah. I was so jealous when Shu-kun Told me that. I begged Oji-san to teach me too but he said It did not suit me.... "pouts" 

Naruto: hehehehe.....

Yuuki: Are you laughing at me papa?

Naruto: No,no.   that just reminded me that I used to pester Kakashi-sensei to teach it to me too. But he never got around to it.

Yuuki: Kakashi-sensei would not teach it to you either?

Naruto: Yeah, although I understand now that a sharingan is needed to make it effective or it is impractical to use. Anyways I stopped after Jiraiya-shishou taught me Rasengan.

Yuuki: Oh!, He was both your and Grandpa's master right?

Naruto: Yeah, dad taught it to him and shishou passed it on to me. So now I'll pass it on to you. Well let's get started then.

Yuuki: right.

Naruto: Hmm. although.....

Yuuki: Papa?

Naruto: Oh, it's just that when I started learning the basics I needed water balloons. But since water is scarce here..... well we'll just use balloons then.

Yuuki: Okay!

Naruto: Right... so you know the basics of tree and water walking right?

Yuuki: of course!

Naruto: well Rasengan is sort of like that as in you need to constantly keep chakra active in your hands. The first step is to keep releasing chakra,they you must rotate it. See if you can pop this balloon by just rotating your chakra.

Yuuki: Yes sir!

Misato: Oh, there you are Naruto-sama, Oiou-sama. What are you doing here?

Naruto: Hey Misato. I am going to teach Yuuki Rasengan.

Misato: Ah. So what is the balloon for?

Naruto: The first step of the training. It;s supposed to be a water balloon, but there is little water here so I don't want to waste any.

Misato: Well actually I could get you some. I could transport back to the forest and find a stream.

Naruto: you could do that?

Misato: Yes. actually I marked the place where Sakura-sama and I landed after thef fight with Meido's Dawn and it had a stream near it.

Naruto: Great! Thanks Misato: 

*Misato returns with some water Balloons*

Naruto: Okay so this was how I learned Rasengan. First use your chakra to rotate the water in the balloon. You're supposed to make the balloon pop. Just with your chakra.

Yuuki: Yes papa! *starts spinning the chakra in her hand*

 

*Sometime around Noon*

Yuuki: Oh! I't's finally starting to spin!!

Naruto: Great!! But like I said, you need to pop it by just rotating your chakra.

Yuuki: Right!

Naruto: Let's stop for now then. We'll try again after lunch.

Yuuki: Okay papa!! Ow!!

Misato: Ojou-sama!! Are you alright?

Naruto: Oh, it's probably the strain on her chakra circulatory system. It happened to me too, since releasing chakra at a constant rate is not normal for most jutsu.

Misato: don't strain yourself Ojou-sama.

Yuuki: I know, but I'm still happy that I get to spend time with papa now. 

Naruto: Well let's head back.

 

To be continued. 

Edited by Phantom_999, 12 August 2013 - 03:40 PM.

[FoolishYoungling]

As promised I'll make part 6. 

 

"The Battle against Meido's Dawn"

 

*Outside of the sand village*

 

Naruto: Ready Yuuki? your training starts today!

Yuuki: Yes papa! But can I ask something?

Naruto: Sure.

Yuuki: Why do you want to teach me Rasengan all of a sudden?

Naruto: Well...... how do I say this..... I guess from what you told me, the other me did not spend too much time with you.

Yuuki: It's okay. You were Hokage after all, and you tried to when you could. But I did resent the Hokage's duties sometimes...... well I understand them but still, I can't say I liked that you didn't spend more time with me.

Naruto: Yeah, so I figure I want to make it up to you.

Yuuki: Okay! 

Naruto: Did I ever tell you anything about Rasengan?

Yuuki: Not much, except that it was one of Grandpa's legacies, and that he took three years to fully make it.

Naruto: So I did then. Well there are other things, but I'll explain them later. This is hard enough on it's own, since it's an A rank technique

Yuuki: Eh? That high? Would I be able to complete it? Well actually Shu-kun's dad taught him Chidori which is also A rank. It'd be good to learn something too.

Naruto: Huh? Sasuke taught Shunamori Chidori?

Yuuki: Yeah. I was so jealous when Shu-kun Told me that. I begged Oji-san to teach me too but he said It did not suit me.... "pouts" 

Naruto: hehehehe.....

Yuuki: Are you laughing at me papa?

Naruto: No,no.   that just reminded me that I used to pester Kakashi-sensei to teach it to me too. But he never got around to it.

Yuuki: Kakashi-sensei would not teach it to you either?

Naruto: Yeah, although I understand now that a sharingan is needed to make it effective or it is impractical to use. Anyways I stopped after Jiraiya-shishou taught me Rasengan.

Yuuki: Oh!, He was both your and Grandpa's master right?

Naruto: Yeah, dad taught it to him and shishou passed it on to me. So now I'll pass it on to you. Well let's get started then.

Yuuki: right.

Naruto: Hmm. although.....

Yuuki: Papa?

Naruto: Oh, it's just that when I started learning the basics I needed water balloons. But since water is scarce here..... well we'll just use balloons then.

Yuuki: Okay!

Naruto: Right... so you know the basics of tree and water walking right?

Yuuki: of course!

Naruto: well Rasengan is sort of like that as in you need to constantly keep chakra active in your hands and feet. The first step is to keep releasing chakra,they you mush rotate it. See if you can pop this balloon by just rotating your chakra.

Yuuki: Yes sir!

 

I'll come up with the rest in a little bit...... let me reread the Tsunade retrieval arc to refresh my memory and make Yuuki;'s training more believable. 

 

Shunamori learned the chidori to impress Yuuki.

 

Anyway, good chapter. I wonder if her power that awakened will make her Rasengan... overpowered.

[Phantom_999]

He COULD BE,   but that doesn't necessarily mean that he's in love with her.   And I'm thinking of a concept for Yuuki's rasengan now but yeah it may be op due to the chakra of chaos. 

Edited by Phantom_999, 09 August 2013 - 11:40 PM.

[FoolishYoungling]

He COULD BE,   but that doesn't necessarily mean that he's in love with her.   And I'm thinking of a concept for Yuuki's rasengan now but yeah it may be op due to the chakra of chaos. 

 

So you admit Shunamori learned an A-rank move for Yuuki? Dang dude. I'm gonna go ahead and start arranging the wedding.

[Phantom_999]

you misinterpreted the COULD BE with "He is".......

 

Well any way here is part 7

 

"Battle against Meido's Dawn Part 7"

 

*Returning to the Inn*

 

Sakura: Ah, Naruto, Yuuki-Chan, where were you?

Naruto : Oh I was spending with some time with Yuuki.

Shunamori: What were you doing then, Yuu-chan?

Yuuki: Papa was was teaching me Rasengan!! 

Sakura: You were?

Shunamori: Ah, That's good Yuu-chan. I'll show you my Chidori later when you've finished it.

Yuuki: Okay!!

Shunamori: *whispers* But Yuu-chan, I thought you did not want to be strong cause you think Akira doesn't like strong girls......

Yuuki: Eep! *whispers back* Y-yeah I forgot about that......   Oh well it's fine if I don't show him.....I think......

Shunamori: Well, if you ask me if he's actually like that he isn't worth your time...... but if that's what you want I won't say any more.

Yuuki: Thank you, Shu-kun. You're my best friend ever. 

Shunamori: Yeah of course. We're practically family.

Naruto: Are you whispering to yourselves again? 

Both: No, We're not.

Sakura: Yuuki-chan, If you're whispering personally like that with a boy, someone might mis-understand something. 

Shunamori: Really? I think it's normal for us. Right Yuu-chan?

Yuuki: Mmm Hmm. 

Sakura: Riiiight....... Just some advice. don't do that if front of Akira-kun, or he'll think you two are a couple.

Yuuki: EEK!! I-I don't want that!! 

Shunamori: Well anyway we'll be heading off to the cafeteria. Are you coming Oji-san, Oba-san?

Sakura: Just now,  go ahead you must be starving.

Yuuki: Okay mama.

Misato: I'll come with you Ojou-sama.

*They leave*

Sakura: Naruto.... are you sure you want to teach her that?

Naruto: I'm sure, but it's up to Yuuki if she wants to finish. It's just that I want to spend some time with her. To make up for abandoning her over there. I know too well what it's like to not have parents.

Sakura: Yes, you're right....... *smiles sadly* Well if there's anything I can do to help, let me know okay?

Naruto: Sakura-chan? Are you worried about-

Sakura: Of course I'm worried about Yuuki-chan!! She's our daughter after all. *laughs*

Naruto: Ah, right...... 

Sakura: Well let's go for lunch then then. It takes a lot of energy to learn an A rank jutsu!!

Naruto: Yeah, I'm starving.......

*After lunch*

 

Naruto: Alright, Let's continue!!

Yuuki: Yes papa!!

Naruto: So anyway Let's see you try again with the water balloon.

Yuuki: Okay!! *starts spinning her chakra*

Naruto: Okay , that's really good, you;re learning faster than me but it's not about spinning the chakra in one diretion. You have to rotate it completely. Here' I'll show you.... *Pops his own water balloon* 

Yuuki: Oh! I didn't know you had to use two hands!

Naruto: Oh, this is just my way of rotating it. I have poor chakra control, but let's see if you can complete it with one hand.

Yuuki: Okay!!

Naruto: the trick is to completely rotate it in all directions.

Yuuki: Right!! *tries a few more times*

*Finally, sometime during the afternoon*

Yuuki: I did it, Idid it!! *holding a small piece of her water balloon*

Naruto: That's great Yuuki!! You finished it way quicker than me!!   Atta girl!!

Yuuki: Thank you papa!! *hugs him*

Naruto: Okay we'll take a break before we start step 2.

Yuuki: I'm fine papa!! Really!!

Naruto: Oh, it's not that it's just that step 2 was the most exhausting for me I reaally had to push it with step 2.

Yuuki: Really?

Naruto Yeah, when I finished I had to recover for a full day, and that was only with Kyuubi's help. Plus I'm sure that your chakra circulation is hurting right?

Yuuki: Ow!! Y-yeah, it is.....

Naruto: so it's settled, we'll take a break first. Let's go see Sakura-chan and have her take a look at you hands.

 

To be continued............. 

 

*notes* Yeah it seems a little quick that Yuuki already finished step one but the reasoning is that she has much better chakra control than Naruto. I'll make step 2 have a more realistic time frame, I promise.

Edited by Phantom_999, 27 September 2013 - 01:13 PM.

[FoolishYoungling]

Sure.... close now Shunamori. But when you hit puberty. You won't want her as a just a friend anymore....

 

"Shunamori: Well, if you ask me if he's actually like that he isn't worth your time...... but if that's what you want I won't say any more"

 

What is this line about?

[Phantom_999]

Not a ship sinking if that was what you were hoping for. He meant that he did not know if Akira didn't like strong girls either but he'll support Yuuki whatever she does. like a best friend would.

[FoolishYoungling]

Not a ship sinking if that was what you were hoping for. He meant that he did not know if Akira didn't like strong girls either but he'll support Yuuki whatever she does. like a best friend would.

 

best friend *mumble mumble* puberty *mumble mumble* future friendzone *mumble mumble* cares about more *mumble mumble*

[Phantom_999]

*Ahem* You realize of course that Naruto and Sakura are not childhood friends either by definition of length. They are childhood friends only because they spent their late childhood together but not long enough to be considered true childhood friends. point is, just because Yuuki and Shunamori grew up together is not an automatic chance to be a couple. The only reason that it happens so much in Japanese manga love plots is to pump the crap out of the *cuteness* department that will make people go "AAWWW how sweet". That's my impression of it anyway and not that it's a bad thing, but there is something called westermarck effect. Anyway looking it up, basically it states that two individuals who grew up together may see themselves as brother and sister or brother brother/ sister sister, so may not actually be romantically or sexually attracted to each other. I've thought of this concept for the two of them. If you want to punch me you'll have to find where I am. 

Edited by Phantom_999, 13 August 2013 - 03:48 PM.