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[kabu-chan]

A new funny oneshot - Something for the Grandkids.

[Daniee]

Another amusing oneshot:

Prank

[catsi563]

Just started the prologue for Beauty and The Beast NaruSaku style.

Linky below

Beauty and The Beast: NaruSaku Style

[Bucks]

That was far too short to be considered a one shot or even a snip of it. Length is important as that means there is detail. something like that is bound to be crap.

[catsi563]

Its meant to be a multi chapter fic and the first chapter was just posted

As a side note prologues are almsot never too long. They are used to whet the appetite so to speak, and to provide a lead in to the story

Edited by catsi563, 05 July 2008 - 03:30 AM.

[Illjwamh]

I disagree. A good prologue should be of decent length and establish the state of things in world of the story before the story actually begins, so that the reader can jump right in at chapter one. A short prologue is structurally pointless.

[Anewhope2]

Its meant to be a multi chapter fic and the first chapter was just posted

As a side note prologues are almsot never too long. They are used to whet the appetite so to speak, and to provide a lead in to the story

C'mon guys, i've read the original story and watched the original movie, the prolouge for this certain kind of story is suppose to be short, here i 've found the original prolouge for it, see if it's epic length like;

"Once upon a time, in a faraway land, a young prince lived in a
shining castle. Although he had everything his heart desired,
the prince was spoiled, selfish, and unkind. But then, one
winter's night, an old beggar woman came to the castle and
offered him a single rose in return for shelter from the bitter
cold. Repulsed by her haggard appearance, the prince sneered at
the gift and turned the old woman away, but she warned him not
to be deceived by appearances, for beauty is found within.
And when he dismissed her again, the old woman's ugliness
melted away to reveal a beautiful enchantress. The prince
tried to apologize, but it was too late, for she had seen that
there was no love in his heart, and as punishment, she
transformed him into a hideous beast, and placed a
powerful spell on the castle, and all who lived there.
Ashamed of his monstrous form, the beast concealed himself
inside his castle, with a magic mirror as his only window to
the outside world. The rose she had offered was truly an
enchanted rose, which would bloom until his twenty-first
year. If he could learn to love another, and earn her love in
return by the time the last petal fell, then the spell would
be broken. If not, he would be doomed to remain a beast for
all time. As the years passed, he fell into despair, and lost
all hope, for who could ever learn to love a beast?"

Okay, maybe some of ya never read or seen beauty and the beast, and i understand that, but don't go saying the prolouge is crap only because it's short. I for one do not have a problem with it, great job Catsi!
I'm sorry if i trying to be an ass, no hard feelings?

Edited by Anewhope2, 05 July 2008 - 04:23 PM.

[catsi563]

C'mon guys, i've read the original story and watched the original movie, the prolouge for this certain kind of story is suppose to be short, here i 've found the original prolouge for it, see if it's epic length like;

"Once upon a time, in a faraway land, a young prince lived in a
shining castle. Although he had everything his heart desired,
the prince was spoiled, selfish, and unkind. But then, one
winter's night, an old beggar woman came to the castle and
offered him a single rose in return for shelter from the bitter
cold. Repulsed by her haggard appearance, the prince sneered at
the gift and turned the old woman away, but she warned him not
to be deceived by appearances, for beauty is found within.
And when he dismissed her again, the old woman's ugliness
melted away to reveal a beautiful enchantress. The prince
tried to apologize, but it was too late, for she had seen that
there was no love in his heart, and as punishment, she
transformed him into a hideous beast, and placed a
powerful spell on the castle, and all who lived there.
Ashamed of his monstrous form, the beast concealed himself
inside his castle, with a magic mirror as his only window to
the outside world. The rose she had offered was truly an
enchanted rose, which would bloom until his twenty-first
year. If he could learn to love another, and earn her love in
return by the time the last petal fell, then the spell would
be broken. If not, he would be doomed to remain a beast for
all time. As the years passed, he fell into despair, and lost
all hope, for who could ever learn to love a beast?"

Okay, maybe some of ya never read or seen beauty and the beast, and i understand that, but don't go saying the prolouge is crap only because it's short. I for one do not have a problem with it, great job Catsi!
I'm sorry if i trying to be an ass, no hard feelings?

=^__^= not at all, in fact thank you because you illustrated my point in its entirety.

[Illjwamh]

You've got me there. I concede your point.

However, if this discussion is about what I assume it's about, putting something that small up on ff.net without putting anything after it is ridiculous. It doesn't even need its own chapter.

[catsi563]

=^__^= chapter 1 of Beauty and the Beast is posted and thanks to a wonderful fan who gave me soem greta suggestions I was able to clean it up a lot.

[AchikaMiyu]

Just started the prologue for Beauty and The Beast NaruSaku style.

Linky below

Beauty and The Beast: NaruSaku Style

I have no issue with the length of the prologue, but the material does seem too familiar. Anyone who has seen the Disney version of Beauty and the Beast knows these lines and if your story ends up following the movie closely (which after reading Chapter 1, it seems to), then it sort of turns me off on wanting to read it.

To me, that doesn't seem like much of an interesting story so much as inserting characters into a different animation or story. You're not giving the characters a chance to be themselves, but instead or fitting them into a mold of a previous character. Personally, I don't care for that. I'm sure there are others out there who will disagree with me, but reading something where it's pretty obvious what will happen and exactly how based on having seen the movie just doesn't work.

And only because I never like to post here without at least putting a link up to a story, here's one titled The Ice Queen. It's like the Pied-piper meets one of those mythical snow women in famous folklore.

[catsi563]

Id persoanlly disagree as have several reviewers but meh oo each his own.

The idea was for me found after watching the movie, and seeing how close the story actually paralelled several of the characters in naruto as well as the Story itself. The diea grew and now Im putting it in story form.

for those who like the idea great. if you dont well Ive got other stories as well.

=^__^=

[Cloud]

Kindly move this to writing discussion, and please... do something about the punctuation in your posts.

I cant read half of what is written. @_@

[AchikaMiyu]

The next chapter to The Final Steps was added.

I also recommend a cute AU story titled Pretense.

[Destiny]

Shade of Leaf has been updated. Great Narusaku chapter

Shade of Leaf Chapter 6

[GoNeKr@zY]

OoO That chapter was amazing. I LOVE this story now lol. Hadn't read past the 3rd chapter before. Caught up now though :3 Other than a few grammatical errors the story is intriguing indeed.

[Shadow Legend]

This is a great tragedy story

It's my fault

[catsi563]

Travis finished Sakura Season as well.

[Illjwamh]

Oh? It's finished? I'll have to read that.


My story's been updated too, if anyone's interested. I don't generally like to pimp my own work, but it seemed silly to post in this thread and not mention it.

[roninmedia]

http://www.fanfictio...653/1/Ourselves

Great romantic drama one-shot without the angst. Slight AU though.

Edited by roninmedia, 15 July 2008 - 04:57 PM.