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[Nick Soapdish]

Ohhhhhhhhh. Wow, yeah, I didn't even think about that. Silly me. I'll consider posting it, though at first I'll probably only upload the edited chapters. That means I'd only post up to chapter 13 right now.

Hmm...

That'd make sense. And it makes it slightly less of a chore to do all at once.

[Paradox Jast]

Quick yet serious question for those of you who check this thread, and even you lurkers out there. I would have put this as a poll on ff, but I need concrete replies before I even consider it.

To lemon or not to lemon, that is the main question. Not so much opinion as if they are necessary in a story or not, but I'm curious if folks think I should bother putting on in WPC. Or, rather, if everyone thinks I'd be capable of writing a decent one. I'm kinda torn on the subject, a lot of folks have seemed to hint at me writing one in. However, I think lemons can make or break a fic. Which is why I'm wary.

[KungFuTruffle]

WC has been rather tame so far, even on the violence front. I think adding a lemon at this point wouldn't make much sense. I mean, your characters barely mention their sexual activity, and all of a sudden, GRAPHIC SEX. It's a little jarring.

If you have an itch to write a lemon, why not just write a standalone lemon?

[jim1982]

yea that is a question, but seriously, I would suggest it as a "side" story to WPC. Cause as Truffle said, You've been pretty tame sexual wise. so to place lemon would be like placing a random sex scene in a violent video game(oh wait EA already done that)

But I would say, maybe a lime or so but keep the lemons separate if you want to try.

[Paradox Jast]

Things are going to be getting quite a bit more intense starting in a few chapters (Chapter 29, according to my outline) so by the time I got around to putting in a lemon, it would be more appropriate. I could do it as a side story, that is something I had considered. Maybe I'll wait until a few of the more intense chapters have been posted (well, they are more intense by what I have planned, anyway) so perhaps I'll ask again later.

Thanks for the insight, regardless.

[Codus N]

Being honest, it doesn't really need lemon maybe a little lime (tongue-playing for example) since your story's attracting points are the plot you don't really have to put in lemon since the plot is already THAT good. If I were you, I'd rate this story a T rating. But it's your call. If you want to put in lemon that's just fine but I would lean towards the others' opinion into making it a side story. BTW, what about your hindsight foresight story?

Edited by Newkerz, 08 February 2010 - 09:41 AM.

[Shadow-kun]

I'd say it's better if you write it as a side story.

[catsi563]

for my own opinion a love scene along the lines of bedroom eyes that leads into a waking up naked in bed together situation would be perfect for the pacing of the story thus far.

read some fo the later chapters of In your eyes for some inspiration if you want to.

A side story with the more detailed lemon wouldnt be a bad thing but isnt necessary.

[Paradox Jast]

That's actually a pretty good idea. The waking up after thing, I mean. Then doing a side story with just the lemon, if I can manage to make it that detailed. As for the T rating of WPC - hopefully you'll understand soon why I chose to make it M rated. I argued with myself a lot in the beginning about that very thing, to make it T or M, but I chose to err on the side of caution. When it's done, I'll contemplate if it was worth making it M or T.

As for Hindsight::Foresight, I'll probably do another chapter of that next, since I owe it to that story to continue it.

My next story that I mentioned before is called Experiments in Empathy, but I'll have that story done (or mostly done) before I post even one chapter of it.

[Hak]

Good update, and it really came the right day...(thinking about the spoilers of chapter 482)

Keep up the good work!

[Paradox Jast]

Yeah, I was thinking about that too. Maybe a chapter of WPC could brighten everyone's not-so-hopeful outlook heading into this next arc of the series.

I'm also thinking about uploading my next story into the library (what's done, anyway) before up upload it to fanfiction.net as a sort of thanks to those who post here and deal with me. It isn't a NaruSaku fic, though, so it probably wouldn't have garnered as big a following anyway, but we can still have crack pairings, right?

[Hak]

Yeah, I was thinking about that too. Maybe a chapter of WPC could brighten everyone's not-so-hopeful outlook heading into this next arc of the series.

I'm also thinking about uploading my next story into the library (what's done, anyway) before up upload it to fanfiction.net as a sort of thanks to those who post here and deal with me. It isn't a NaruSaku fic, though, so it probably wouldn't have garnered as big a following anyway, but we can still have crack pairings, right?

Easily, I really dont mind (actually many of crack pairing fics tend to be better than a big majority of the popular 2 pairing fics!) a crack as long as it isn't NaruHina! So at least I will try to read it through! (there are some topics/plot twists in fics that make me abandon fics, BUT I'm not going to list them because I really want to read what the writer wants to write!)

[Paradox Jast]

Chapters 14 and 15 of WPC have been edited. Chapter 26 is about 2/3rds finished.

I'll be posting the promo chapter of Experiments in Empathy in the library shortly, for any interested parties.

Edited by Paradox Jast, 27 February 2010 - 06:51 AM.

[crazyefra]

Damn and I thought you updated the story, oh well more waiting then

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[Paradox Jast]

Chapter 26 will be posted tomorrow, after Denim gets a chance to look it over and send me edits.

Here's a nice small teaser to hold folks over until then.

WPC 26 teaser --Click here to view--

With a quick motion, Naruto hooked his thumbs under his open jounin vest, rubbing them against concealed storage seals he had placed on the waistband of his pants. The kinetic friction triggered the release function on the simple seals, and his two arm blades immediately appeared in his hands with a small puff of smoke. It didn't take long for shouts of panic to break out, and he heard many of the men start shifting to grab their weapons, but he proved too fast for them. In one smooth motion, he flickered out of existence then immediately appeared in front of the mercenaries' boss, the front ends of his blades crossed up against the man's neck.

"I'm sorry about this. You should have taken my offer."

Chapter 26 also includes an Omake at the end.

[Codus N]

Great chapter as always!!! you are after all the king of kings when it comes to Naruto fics..... I also liked the omake!!! you should add some more of those.... you have a great sense of humor & understanding of the characters that helps you make it funny.....

Edited by Newkerz, 08 March 2010 - 03:23 AM.

[ciardha]

Quick yet serious question for those of you who check this thread, and even you lurkers out there. I would have put this as a poll on ff, but I need concrete replies before I even consider it.

To lemon or not to lemon, that is the main question. Not so much opinion as if they are necessary in a story or not, but I'm curious if folks think I should bother putting on in WPC. Or, rather, if everyone thinks I'd be capable of writing a decent one. I'm kinda torn on the subject, a lot of folks have seemed to hint at me writing one in. However, I think lemons can make or break a fic. Which is why I'm wary.

What might work is to go the shoujo manga lovemaking scene route- focus on the emotional intensity of the moment, remember how important bonds are in Naruto's world? Not much more intensely good for an emotional bond between two people in love than making love- it's a becoming one, if you are that in love it's not just a physical joining but a spiritual joining. Keep the physical actions in a soft romantic light- the warmth of skin to skin contact, clasping of hands with intertwined fingers, the feelings of being something beyond yourself- two becomes one, but a one greater than you were apart, etc... I would stay away from descriptions of sexual organs, and body fluids- including saliva, or explicit descriptions of sexual acts, the tone you've set for your fic would be jarring with a typical lemon, but the fairly typical shoujo manga lovemaking type scene (such as Yuu Watase's Fushigi Yuugi) I think would fit the tone just fine. You have built things up enough with Naruto and Sakura that I can say such a scene certainly wouldn't be jarring. Obviously you feel that some kind of scene is needed, so I'd say give a shoujo manga type lovemaking scene a whirl.

[catsi563]

What might work is to go the shoujo manga lovemaking scene route- focus on the emotional intensity of the moment, remember how important bonds are in Naruto's world? Not much more intensely good for an emotional bond between two people in love than making love- it's a becoming one, if you are that in love it's not just a physical joining but a spiritual joining. Keep the physical actions in a soft romantic light- the warmth of skin to skin contact, clasping of hands with intertwined fingers, the feelings of being something beyond yourself- two becomes one, but a one greater than you were apart, etc... I would stay away from descriptions of sexual organs, and body fluids- including saliva, or explicit descriptions of sexual acts, the tone you've set for your fic would be jarring with a typical lemon, but the fairly typical shoujo manga lovemaking type scene (such as Yuu Watase's Fushigi Yuugi) I think would fit the tone just fine. You have built things up enough with Naruto and Sakura that I can say such a scene certainly wouldn't be jarring. Obviously you feel that some kind of scene is needed, so I'd say give a shoujo manga type lovemaking scene a whirl.

QFt and agreed whole heartedly.

I took much the same approach with In your eyes love scene in chapter 4. trying to focus on the powerful emotional bond the two had and how it showed through as they made love. it was both what drove the act and something driven by the act itself.

[Paradox Jast]

Whoooo... good idea, though I don't know how good I'm gonna be at shoujo writing. I'll probably have to fiddle with several rough drafts before I'm content with what I'm actually going to do. On one hand, I don't want to disappoint people, and on the other hand, no matter what I do, it will never make -everyone- happy. That's the hardest part to get over.

I do have a feeling that everyone wants to read 'something', though. I can see people reading the chapter where it happens, smiles on their faces and nodded, thinking "Yeah... they did it."

Great chapter as always!!! you are after all the king of kings when it comes to Naruto fics..... I also liked the omake!!! you should add some more of those.... you have a great sense of humor & understanding of the characters that helps you make it funny.....

Haha, I think I'm pretty far from the greatest, though it's nice to know that people are at least content and enjoy what I write. It's all I really wanted to know from my little... uh... rant. One part of me still feels like crap for leaving that long A/N. But I was genuinely curious, and it actually prodded a lot of people to give me their thoughts and ideas that they had been too lazy or indifferent to posting previously. So another part of me feels somewhat vindicated as a result. I can't complain, and since I know, I never have to ask again. Which works out well for everyone in the long run.

As for the Omake, I have to give credit to Denim for the idea. I just fleshed it out and made it work within the already established story. If we get to talk like we did the other day on IM before I post chapters again in the future, there will likely be more Omakes incoming.

[Gravenimage]

Chapter 26 was just awesome I already send you a review.