Jump to content

Close
Photo

Drabble thread V3.0


  • This topic is locked This topic is locked
286 replies to this topic

#61 Recompense

Recompense

    Shameful Member of the YEAR!!

  • Chakra Water Walker
  • PipPip
  • 360 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:The place between silly and dead

Posted 05 November 2007 - 07:20 AM

nah, Naruto's just dreaming up new and exciting ways to be awesome...

if we're lucky

hmmm, im running out of drabble ideas...

i might do the "Interogation" Scene sometime... yesssssss... that'll do quite nicely i think

a_plotting.gif

:devil:

quite nicely indeed.....

EDIT: Nope, not working out. can't get it from me brain to the paper, and after three mega glompages and two drabble, one of which was fluff, im too tired to even THINK about another drabble
I'm just sitting here. Wondering what it'd be like To be with you.

#62 Jwolf0

Jwolf0

    Gotta catch 'em all!

  • Special Jounin
  • PipPipPip
  • 882 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:Georgia
  • Interests:Seasonal sports fan. Adept at pulling defeat from the jaws of victory. Sadly allows RL to interfere with gaming and anime stuffs.

Posted 05 November 2007 - 09:58 AM

Well, yeah, that last one was pretty vague. Funny, it played out a little better in my head.

Naruto's in a coma. The idea was that he wasn't showing any signs of recovering from it - and judging by the "perfect world" that he's finding himself in, he wasn't going to make his way out of it willingly any time soon. Hadn't decided if there's something/someone keeping him there or not, but I might have to continue it now just 'cause it ended up confusing.

Yeah, I'll have to do something about that. Anyone reading this on FFN won't have this nice explanation above. Thanks for asking about it Rick and Compy-kun!
QUOTE ("Down Goes Brown")
(For the younger readers, "HMV" and "Sam The Record Man" were record stores.)

(For the younger readers, a "record store" was a building that you had to go to when you wanted to buy music.)

(For the younger readers, "buying music" was the way we acquired it, since we couldn't just… you know what, let's just get back to the Bowen song. Stupid kids, you ruin everything.)


Be the Ultimate Ninja! Or Reaper! Or Zombie Killer... or something. Play Billy Vs. SNAKEMAN!

#63 Recompense

Recompense

    Shameful Member of the YEAR!!

  • Chakra Water Walker
  • PipPip
  • 360 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:The place between silly and dead

Posted 06 November 2007 - 04:03 AM

Meh, the word that inspired this was "BOX"

MY MIND WORKS IN WAYS YOU CANNOT FATHOM!!



He was boxed in. He couldn’t get out. He smashed furiously against the glass wall. His cries of mercy unheard, seen only by his two silent observers. He could see Sakura-chan. She was out there, her bloodied body broken, he could see bones breaking through the skin. He needed to help her. He had to help her! Again he slammed his body against the wall. He could feel the Fox. It was rising up, tasting his fury like a delicious appetizer. He let loose a scream beyond sanity, he could feel the shroud around him. His world was anger.

Outside of the box, to Jounin stood, observing the unhinged teen before them. One stood tall, his dirty book sitting comfortably in its holster. His gray hair continued to defy all logic and physics, as he regarded the teen in front of him with a worried eye. He looked side-ways at his comarade.

“Are you sure this is the smartest way to go about it?”

His companion looked at him with a smirk and a cocky grin. His light brown hair as dirty and mangy as always. He turned to face Kakashi, leaning back against the padded wall. He unconsciously adjusted his body so that his sword wouldn’t press against his shoulder-blades in a most irritating manner.

“Kakashi, the boy needs to confront his fear of losing people somehow. Also, I wanted to compare myself to this supposed… ‘Beast’ of his.”

Kakashi looked back at Naruto. The boy was now forming a Rasengan, the three tails behind him coiling mercilessly. Kakashi could see the Fox now. It was trying desperately to escape. He looked back at Takeshi, who was now playing with his sword, tracing designs in the air. The black blade cut through the air, almost noiselessly.

“Don’t you think the Genjutsu was a bit much, though?”

Takeshi looked back at the Copy-nin. His hands working separately from his brain as they absently twirled the sword around his body, before coming to rest, with the blade inside its sheath.

“Would you rather we torture Sakura-san to the edge of death, and leave her here for Naruto to look at? Didn’t think so.”

“I think we should end this, and seal him up.”

“Meh”

Kakashi sent a one-eyed glare at the swordsman before releasing the Genjutsu. Naruto was visibly shaken at the loss of his Sakura-chan, and began screaming even louder. The glass cage was lifted, and Kakashi could see eager tendrils of Kyuubi’s power seeping through the opening. Suddenly, Naruto was in front of him, and suddenly, Kakashi realized that padded walls CAN hurt, if thrown into them hard enough.

Naruto turned, there was another man. He was standing RIGHT where Sakura-chan had been! He growled, he was going to hurt this man until answers came out! He lunged.

Takeshi wasn’t there anymore. He was behind the Fox, his sword leaving a crimson trail of blood in its wake. He turned, the cut had been two inches deep, and it was already healing. The Fox was fast at everything. It had beaten Kakashi faster than expected, and it had healed faster than expected. Takeshi suddenly experienced a burning sensation in his shoulder. A feeling he hadn’t felt in a long time. He looked, there was a crimson tail of chakra, piercing his shoulder. The tail ripped out, pulling chunks of flesh and bone with it.

Naruto grinned at the man before him, who looked oddly familiar. The man was on the ground, shivering. Naruto leaned in, he was gonna hurt this man for hurting Sakura-chan. He was gonna make him BLEED! He leaned close, and heard the mans mutterings

“Notnownotnownotnownotnownotnow…”

Naruto leaned back, confused at the word’s meaning. He leaned raised a hand, ready to swipe the strangely familiar man’s head off.

“NOW!”

Where once there was a man, there was now a Beast.


it was gonna be even LONGER, but i decided y'all didnt want to see more of my crappy action-scenes
I'm just sitting here. Wondering what it'd be like To be with you.

#64 Tohno Shiki

Tohno Shiki

    Shota of Mistress

  • Academy Teacher
  • PipPipPip
  • 600 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:Auckland
  • Interests:I am the bone of my Anime<br /><br />Marathoning is my body, and coffee is my blood<br /><br />I have watched over a thousand series<br /><br />Unknown to sleep<br /><br />Nor known to society<br /><br />Have withstood migraines to watch many episodes<br /><br />Waiting for the new season's arrival<br /><br />I have no regrets, this is the only path<br /><br />My whole life was Unlimited Anime Works

Posted 06 November 2007 - 06:40 AM

Compy~!

You now have the title of EBIL NARUTO ABUSER DX

Stop torturing the poor guy!

Anyway, rather interesting. Though I don't like OC's, this one was probably for the best. But seriously, excessive much?

#65 Rick (Bonta-kun)

Rick (Bonta-kun)

    FUMOFFU!

  • Summoning Master
  • PipPipPip
  • 1,374 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:Melbourne, Australia

Posted 06 November 2007 - 08:53 AM

Very nice drabble recomp. Even though you like torturing Naruto so much, your still an awesome writer.


#66 Jwolf0

Jwolf0

    Gotta catch 'em all!

  • Special Jounin
  • PipPipPip
  • 882 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:Georgia
  • Interests:Seasonal sports fan. Adept at pulling defeat from the jaws of victory. Sadly allows RL to interfere with gaming and anime stuffs.

Posted 09 November 2007 - 04:49 AM

As I said Compy, I'd rather you write something dark/angsty if it means you write better. Nicely done, although I'd think that someone like Takeshi would know about the 'beast' already. Silly boy....

Okay, so I was pondering over how to explain what happened in my last drabble, and this is what popped up.

First, the prequel to the prequel to Utopia. tongue.gif

Red. Naruto and red make a bad combination. Just ask Akatsuki.


That was Akatsuki’s final mistake. Sakura, folded over by Samehada, lay motionless under a tree.

Sakura-chan… the bastards… they KILLED SAKURA-CHAN!

And Naruto saw red.

Akatsuki suffered the Kyuubi’s full power that day. If the very earth trembled before its might what chance did mere men have?
He shredded that lesson into them. Slowly. Painfully. The brilliant scarlet of Kyuubi’s chakra was matched only by the crimson blood sprayed across the countryside.

Naruto howled once, a sound full of grief and despair, and then toppled over into unconsciousness.

He awoke before a familiar set of bars.

Hello, boy. Well done.


This one's in between 'Red' and 'Utopia.' I tried something a little different here.

Kyuubi. Once you let it in....

Well done. That carnage you wreaked on Akatsuki, truly magnificent!

I will do this for you, boy. While you heal I will show you the life you should have had, one with family and respect.

Why would I do this? Boredom, why else? Fine, you have my word that as long as you are unconscious I will only provide visions of what I promised.

So we are agreed! Sleep well, Naruto. Dream your better life where your Sakura-chan is alive and well.


A malicious grin, visible through the gloom.

Sleep well… forever. We will have such fun, you and I.
~~~~
Yes, Kyuubi's side of the conversation. Why would Kyuubi do that? Like I said, bored. Now it has something fun/malicious to do: keep Naruto from waking to the real world (where BTW Sakura is NOT dead). The tagline refers to the superstition that you are powerless against a vampire if you invite it into your house.

Note: I'm making the supposition here (in this set of drabbles anyway) that Naruto's will is a big part of him regaining consciousness. If he doesn't want to leave, he doesn't wake up and you get the 'Utopia' drabble.

QUOTE ("Down Goes Brown")
(For the younger readers, "HMV" and "Sam The Record Man" were record stores.)

(For the younger readers, a "record store" was a building that you had to go to when you wanted to buy music.)

(For the younger readers, "buying music" was the way we acquired it, since we couldn't just… you know what, let's just get back to the Bowen song. Stupid kids, you ruin everything.)


Be the Ultimate Ninja! Or Reaper! Or Zombie Killer... or something. Play Billy Vs. SNAKEMAN!

#67 Recompense

Recompense

    Shameful Member of the YEAR!!

  • Chakra Water Walker
  • PipPip
  • 360 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:The place between silly and dead

Posted 11 November 2007 - 06:54 AM

Definitely not for Kids

LOVERS OF NARUTO ABUSE BEWARE!!

:3

squiggles, this one's for you




It was a beautiful ceremony.

It really was.

But in Takeshi’s world, the best part of weddings, was the after-party!!

And the after-party… was wonderful

First, he’d been loaded up with enough booze to make even his sword-hand feel numb

Then, he’d made out with many beautiful Kunoichis

Then, he’d beat up their jealous boyfriends….

And then he’d had more booze!!

However, despite this shockingly detailed memory, he could never quite recall seeing the bride and the groom laying on bench moaning eachother’s names.

He staggered drunkenly at them, as all drunks lose their ability to walk, but their swaggering achieves new levels of existence. He looked at them for awhile, feeling particularly annoyed at their ignoring him.

He tapped the blond on the shoulder.

No response

Again! We must try again!!

No response.

Eventually, he just smacked the boy over the head, right around the time Naruto started growling, too. Boy, that could’ve been awkward.

Naruto let out a yelp, rolled off his bride, thumped onto the ground, and looked up at his sensei, who merely looked down before prodding his student with a toe, to make sure he had the boy’s attention.

He cleared his throat theatrically

“Aherm, Now I dun wanna bee a boorden, boot it would seem ta me, that that that that…”

He forgot what he was saying, what was he saying, something about sex? Oh yeah

“SEX IS ONLY FOR PRAVITE PLECAS!!”

he accentuated this with a drunken stomp, resulting in his slipping and falling.


-At the Uzumaki Household-

He looked between them, they were standing in the front door now,looking at eachother with longing, and then an awkward look from Naruto at his sensei.

Takeshi, meanwhile, was preoccupied with the fact that their house was far bigger than his!

The outrage!

The indignity!

As he ranted and raved, he was suddenly smacked in the face by Sakura…

It hurt.

A lot.

He looked up, and saw them looking imploringly at him. Or at least, Naruto was, Sakura looked ready to skin him… with a cheese grater. Followed by the neutering. Which would most definitely not be pleasant.

“Ohhhhhh, I gets it.”

He stood up, brushing dirt from his clothes.

“Ya wantsta have secksssssss???”

he almost lost his balance, drawing the s out like a oxygen tank about to explode.

He stumbled toward Naruto, who graciously caught him, before turning Takeshi away.

“Good night, Sensei.”

Takeshi stumbled away into the street with a smile on his face.

“Anna gud nite ta you! Student…”

As he rounded the corner, he tossed the condoms he had stolen from Naruto up in the air, while singing.

“Gonna get lucky, tonight, tonight, gonna get lucky, tonight.”

Naruto never did notice the missing condoms.

THE END!!


See?

i can be nice
I'm just sitting here. Wondering what it'd be like To be with you.

#68 Wilson

Wilson

    My burden...my life.....

  • Jounin
  • PipPipPipPip
  • 1,646 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:Auckland, New Zealand
  • Interests:Lol, er, Manga, Anime, games and stuff. <br /><br />Also, writer in fanfiction.net. Go by the name weixuan18.

Posted 11 November 2007 - 08:58 AM

Compy, tell me you weren't going for fluff in this one...

And yeah, if it's humour, you pulled it off. Though this one is a different kind of evil. XD
You try to know everything , yet in the end, you truly understand nothing ....
Wilson's fanfic account : weixuan18

Witness teh awesomness that is Deidara Lover!!! <3

#69 Tohno Shiki

Tohno Shiki

    Shota of Mistress

  • Academy Teacher
  • PipPipPip
  • 600 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:Auckland
  • Interests:I am the bone of my Anime<br /><br />Marathoning is my body, and coffee is my blood<br /><br />I have watched over a thousand series<br /><br />Unknown to sleep<br /><br />Nor known to society<br /><br />Have withstood migraines to watch many episodes<br /><br />Waiting for the new season's arrival<br /><br />I have no regrets, this is the only path<br /><br />My whole life was Unlimited Anime Works

Posted 11 November 2007 - 09:13 AM

...XD

Yummy piece. Mmmm, that perverted old man cracks me up.

Great one Recomp, glad to see that you can write something not involving Naruto torture!

#70 CrashLanded

CrashLanded

    One Cat To Rule Them All And In The Darkness Bind Them.

  • Chakra Tree Climber
  • PipPip
  • 285 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:The land of the Monsoon and the Tiger and the Elephant.

Posted 11 November 2007 - 09:14 AM

In the middle of all youthfullness, you really did that? I thought you were the evil one but you are not, or are you? It's still cruel on Naruto in a different way.

All hail the pervy Compy!!
QUOTE (The Dream Cat @ "A Dream Of A Thousand Cats")
"Many, many seasons ago, cats truly ruled the world.
We were larger then, and the whole world was created for our pleasure. We roamed as we would, taking what we wanted.
In those times, humans were tiny creatures, no larger than we are now.
And humans would groom us and feed us and pet us.
"

#71 Rick (Bonta-kun)

Rick (Bonta-kun)

    FUMOFFU!

  • Summoning Master
  • PipPipPip
  • 1,374 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:Melbourne, Australia

Posted 11 November 2007 - 10:32 AM

lol that was awesome recomp, i hope to see more in this style in the future biggrin.gif


#72 Vyse

Vyse

    Team F.U.T.A. Viking King

  • Missing Nin
  • PipPipPipPip
  • 2,017 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:Norway
  • Interests:My interests? Well, I do enjoy most manga and anime, but I think that's a given. I also enjoy comic books and videogames, so I guess I'm kinda geeky there. But hey, I do other stuff. I like to go out and party, but I do not like drinks served in a femvase (damn fruity stuff... ew), so good ol' beer is my mate. So yeah, I'm also a psychology student, so your mind interests me.

Posted 12 November 2007 - 03:46 AM

That was a very youthful drabble recomp! I see your youthful fires burns as bright as ever!

#73 SakuNaruLover

SakuNaruLover

    Don't fear the darkness

  • S-Class Missing Nin
  • PipPipPipPipPip
  • 2,702 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:The Hague
  • Interests:Hobbies: Gaming, reading manga, watching anime, playing games, reading fanfics, writing fanfics and my own stories, talking with my friends.<br /><br />Manga: <br />-naruto <br />-bleach<br />-clannad<br />-fullmetal alchemist<br /><br />Anime: <br />-naruto<br />-naruto shippuden<br />-bleach <br />-shakugan no shana<br />-shakugan no shana second<br />-clannad<br />-kanon<br />-air<br />-zero no tsukaima<br />-fullmetal alchemist<br />-code geass<br />-code geass r2<br />-gundam wing<br />-gundam 00<br />-melancholy of suzumiya haruhi<br />-hayate no gotoku

Posted 12 November 2007 - 04:35 PM

Nice drabbles Rec and Wolf happy.gif
I am neither good nor evil, I am awake yet I dream

#74 Recompense

Recompense

    Shameful Member of the YEAR!!

  • Chakra Water Walker
  • PipPip
  • 360 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:The place between silly and dead

Posted 13 November 2007 - 04:18 AM

I have a new drabble series

takeshi's misadventures...

:3

Not for kiddies






He was laying in his bed, all snuggled up. He had his sword next to him, laying in the place his lost love one filled. He stared at the ceiling, it was wood. Wood burned real easy, especially with the bamboo coverings builders seemed so strangely fond of. Perhaps builders secretly wanted their buildings to burn?

Takeshi would never find the answers to these deeply philosophical thoughts, as he suddenly heard panting. Panting, grunting, and growling. They were coming from the enxt room over. That was Naruto’s room!!

He leapt out of his bed, grasping his blade in hand, unsheathing it in one brilliant stroke, accidentally cutting the bed-posts in half. It was their fault for being so tall anyway.

Damn bedposts.

He rushed out of the room, his bare feet padding on the ground, there was no stealth in his movements, only a rushed sense of urgency. Naruto could already be dead!!

He burst through the door, sending splinters cascading to the floor, hinges were cast off like shrapnel, as he turned to the door not five inches from his own. He raised his foot up to kick the door in when he heard a voice.

“Oh, my god, Naruto-kun!”

They had Sakura-san too! Those bastards! He must do something!!

He raised his foot, and smashed the door open with the fury of a vengeful sensei. He dove into the room, his sword flashing through the air. He landed, his eyes filled with terrible fury…

And then he saw Naruto…

And then Sakura poked her head out from beneath Naruto, asking why Naruto had stopped…

“Erm… Takeshi-sensei…”

Naruto was always polite to his sensei, even after interrupted sex.

Takeshi looked between Naruto, and then Sakura. Naruto… Sakura… Sex?

Naruto… Sakura… Sex

NARUTO-SAKURA-SEX!!!???!?!?

His mind was exploding from the inside.

-Two weeks later-

Tsunade looked disappointedly up at team Takeshi. She crossed her fingers as she always did when she was either thinking, or serious.

“So… why did you fail your mission?”

Takeshi had assumed the thousand yard stare already, looking past Tsunade and into the window behind her. It took a whack on his head from Sakura to bring him to his senses.

“Oh! Uh, Psychological trauma.”

Tsunade looked between his terrified face, and the overtly cheerful faces of Naruto and Sakura.

“I… see. What did you see or hear that has troubled you so?”

Takeshi looked her in the eyes for the first time, and Tsunade found herself looking into the eyes of a deeply disturbed man.

“Terrible… Terrible things, ma’am.”


It was the first time he walked in on Naruto and Sakura.

It would not be the last.

THE END!


:3
I'm just sitting here. Wondering what it'd be like To be with you.

#75 CrashLanded

CrashLanded

    One Cat To Rule Them All And In The Darkness Bind Them.

  • Chakra Tree Climber
  • PipPip
  • 285 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:The land of the Monsoon and the Tiger and the Elephant.

Posted 13 November 2007 - 04:29 AM

Compy ROX for this one.... Luckily my *youthfulness* died away years ago, or he would have comrade by his side.
QUOTE (The Dream Cat @ "A Dream Of A Thousand Cats")
"Many, many seasons ago, cats truly ruled the world.
We were larger then, and the whole world was created for our pleasure. We roamed as we would, taking what we wanted.
In those times, humans were tiny creatures, no larger than we are now.
And humans would groom us and feed us and pet us.
"

#76 Rick (Bonta-kun)

Rick (Bonta-kun)

    FUMOFFU!

  • Summoning Master
  • PipPipPip
  • 1,374 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:Melbourne, Australia

Posted 13 November 2007 - 04:47 AM

Awesome stuff Recomp, keep up the good work biggrin.gif


#77 Jwolf0

Jwolf0

    Gotta catch 'em all!

  • Special Jounin
  • PipPipPip
  • 882 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:Georgia
  • Interests:Seasonal sports fan. Adept at pulling defeat from the jaws of victory. Sadly allows RL to interfere with gaming and anime stuffs.

Posted 14 November 2007 - 03:24 AM

Nice drabbles, Compy-kun! Stupid tall bedposts... heh. biggrin.gif

This is actually the first one I ever wrote, just cleaned up slightly. Oh, slight limey warning here.

Lady in red. Red quickly became one of his favorite colors.


Naruto thought the red lingerie looked gorgeous on Sakura.

Of course, Naruto swore his orange jumpsuit was stylish and thought Sakura would be hot in a potato sack, so his opinion was a bit skewed. But as she stepped through their bedroom door in flimsy lace hugging her slender curves, Naruto beheld a sight that would make any man’s nose explode in a fountain of blood.

It certainly made his nose tingle – and other parts too.

Then Sakura removed that little bit of nothing, wearing only a full body blush and a smile.

Yes, Naruto definitely liked red on her.

QUOTE ("Down Goes Brown")
(For the younger readers, "HMV" and "Sam The Record Man" were record stores.)

(For the younger readers, a "record store" was a building that you had to go to when you wanted to buy music.)

(For the younger readers, "buying music" was the way we acquired it, since we couldn't just… you know what, let's just get back to the Bowen song. Stupid kids, you ruin everything.)


Be the Ultimate Ninja! Or Reaper! Or Zombie Killer... or something. Play Billy Vs. SNAKEMAN!

#78 Rick (Bonta-kun)

Rick (Bonta-kun)

    FUMOFFU!

  • Summoning Master
  • PipPipPip
  • 1,374 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:Melbourne, Australia

Posted 14 November 2007 - 06:34 AM

lol Nice drabble Wolf biggrin.gif

Naruto is a lucky bastard tongue.gif


#79 Derock

Derock

    H&E Interpol Agent

  • Kage
  • 8,889 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:From Brick City to Lone Star, USA
  • Interests:Video games (fighting), NaruSaku, Naruto, Sonic, Street Fighter, DOA, Darkstalkers, Tekken, computers, MHA

Posted 14 November 2007 - 07:19 AM

I love the drabble!!! :thumbs: Excellent job!

latest?cb=20140126021943

What's Happening with the Naruto series as of now!


#80 Wilson

Wilson

    My burden...my life.....

  • Jounin
  • PipPipPipPip
  • 1,646 posts
  • Gender:Male
  • Location:Auckland, New Zealand
  • Interests:Lol, er, Manga, Anime, games and stuff. <br /><br />Also, writer in fanfiction.net. Go by the name weixuan18.

Posted 14 November 2007 - 07:50 AM

LOL, NICE! XD GO Wolf! biggrin.gif
You try to know everything , yet in the end, you truly understand nothing ....
Wilson's fanfic account : weixuan18

Witness teh awesomness that is Deidara Lover!!! <3




1 user(s) are reading this topic

0 members, 1 guests, 0 anonymous users