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[Ryriena]

Let's see to much focus on the Uchia's in my rewrite I plan on having Naruto learn more during his training session with Jaryira other than just a bigger one of his main Justu's. And his stupid obsession over Sasuke would've moved out of his mind. Although once he realized that Sasuke lost it midway in have him kittening grow up to become the Hokage and put his needs aside and take care of him himself. You know promise of a lifetime means little if he's insane. Also don't destroy bonds in the process of getting a certain parings. Team Taka wasn't even needed in the storyline even if I liked Karin as a character. I could've had her just be a girl Sasuke met once he moved on from the village. And decided this life was better than the one he led as a Ninja. This would've been all done in part one and a few flash backs in part two. See that would've been a lot more palatable for a storyline than what we got for part two.

He wouldn't have gone too Ochimaru; he would've just left the village to become stronger. I would've had Itichi attack the village he was staying at instead of the Sasuke retrieval arc and have Naruto come help him. That would've been a little bit near the end of part one in my plot line. Then have them come home and fully welcome Karin into the Village of the Leef in part two. Then have Sakura show her Skills as a ninja. Karin becomes a apprentice to The fifth hogake's friend in my story. The big bad would actually be Mandra.

[TouKen4Life3g]

Whatever happened to Orochimaru getting more understanding to his character? That plot hole...

[Ryriena]

Whatever happened to Orochimaru getting more understanding to his character? That plot hole...

m I would've had his teammates take him down that would be his understanding.

[TouKen4Life3g]

m I would've had his teammates take him down that would be his understanding.

Remember what Sasuke asked Orochimaru? So...where's the follow up?

[katiejean7155]

Wasn't Sakura supposed to be genjutsu centered? She would've surpassed Tsunade if she was but instead she was a barely lived up to being Tsunade copy.

Anyway: 1) Sasuke/Uchiha centric even though it's called "Naruto" for a reason

2) Hinata. God i thought she was supposed to rebuild her clan and get rid of the two branches/caged bird cursed seal for Neji's sake. Plus let's not forget how she pretty much takes over after Naruhina was confirmed

3) Everything after Pein's arc. Kaguya was an asspull.

4) ALL THE PLOTHOLES EVERYWHERE. We seriously have more plotholes than answers.

5) I wish we could've learned more about Kiba, Shino, Lee, and Tenten. And more of Choji although we got more backstory from him than the others. Like are Lee and Tenten orphans or....? Why do Kiba and Shino always have to be ignored?

and most importantly

6) Barely any character development

[Narufan85]

Wasn't Sakura supposed to be genjutsu centered? She would've surpassed Tsunade if she was but instead she was a barely lived up to being Tsunade copy.

 

 

Yeah that was definitely a dropped thread. In fact, the rich world of different types of jutsus that Kishi developed through the exam arc really disappeared in favor of OP energy attacks. 

[Tiller]

Whatever happened to Orochimaru getting more understanding to his character? That plot hole...

Jiraya makes a big deal about how he should have killed Orochimaru, and that it was one of his biggest failures as a man, allowing such a monster to unleash such horror on the world because of his own feelings.

 

So what happens in the end? Orochimaru is immortal and isn't punished for anything he did.

 

Good story telling.

[Catra]

Jiraya makes a big deal about how he should have killed Orochimaru, and that it was one of his biggest failures as a man, allowing such a monster to unleash such horror on the world because of his own feelings.

 

So what happens in the end? Orochimaru is immortal and isn't punished for anything he did.

 

Good story telling.

reason enough alone to shove into the pro enders faces why this ending sucks monkey fudge where they can't pull the "salty ns shipper" card

[HalfDemonInuyasha]

Jiraya makes a big deal about how he should have killed Orochimaru, and that it was one of his biggest failures as a man, allowing such a monster to unleash such horror on the world because of his own feelings.

 

So what happens in the end? Orochimaru is immortal and isn't punished for anything he did.

 

Good story telling.

What makes it worse is that, as far as I can tell, Jiraiya went to try to kill Orochimaru because Hiruzen failed to do so for the exact same reason, even though Hiruzen had Orochimaru cornered in his hideout from what I recall.

[rocci]

 
Yeah that was definitely a dropped thread. In fact, the rich world of different types of jutsus that Kishi developed through the exam arc really disappeared in favor of OP energy attacks. 

While kishi is not that creative to utilize the elemental ninjutsu, kishi doesn't substitute it with op energy attack. Since anyone who can do that energy attack is naruto or anyone who has access to juubi.

[Suigetsu]

Where should I start?

Obito becoming a martyr after doing all the awful crap that he did.

 

Kumogakures centerspot, seriously what was so important about them? I liked Killerbee and Omoi tought but the Raikage and Darui where insufferable. They are the kind of characters that get beaten or killed in a shounen manga - they would had in one peace.

 

Suigetsu's quest and mission and plot dropped.

 

Mei Terumi Mizukage becoming a joke and making her look weak.

 

Using televisions instead of magic artifacts such as the crystal ball from the 3rd hokage.

 

Madara and the war arc.

 

Sakura pinning for saskay.

 

Naruto's new catalogue of transformations. I really digged his bubble cloak form, it was original and awesome tbh. I had never seen anything like that but the new one it's just a plain copy of the super saiyan.

 

Sasuke obtaining the power to fight in a gundam.

Kaguya.

Edited by Suigetsu, 12 October 2015 - 02:44 AM.