

Striker`s and NaruSaku4Life`s dialog corner
#41
Posted 13 March 2013 - 05:28 AM

#42
Posted 13 March 2013 - 05:48 AM

Thank you. But the updates wont be as regular as they used to be. I made 16 dialoges in 4 days.
OTP: NaruSaku; Favorite crack pairing: NaruIno
Runner-ups:AstridxHiccup (How to train your dragon),SusanxReed, WallyxKuki (Kids next door); AshxMisty; ThorxSif
#43
Posted 13 March 2013 - 05:51 AM
It's not easy to think up all the time. Keep it up.

#44
Posted 13 March 2013 - 02:57 PM

Well Im getting my tethanus shot at the doctors today. Im freaking scared of neadles. So i figured id make someones day if im gonna suffer. NEW STUFF^^. For those of you who wander what sakura was doing.
OTP: NaruSaku; Favorite crack pairing: NaruIno
Runner-ups:AstridxHiccup (How to train your dragon),SusanxReed, WallyxKuki (Kids next door); AshxMisty; ThorxSif
#45
Posted 13 March 2013 - 03:26 PM
#46
Posted 13 March 2013 - 04:28 PM
Why were? Im still making them

EDIT:
WE HIT 1000 views.Thank you for the support.














Edited by StrikerTheNoble, 13 March 2013 - 06:08 PM.
OTP: NaruSaku; Favorite crack pairing: NaruIno
Runner-ups:AstridxHiccup (How to train your dragon),SusanxReed, WallyxKuki (Kids next door); AshxMisty; ThorxSif
#47
Posted 13 March 2013 - 08:52 PM

#48
Posted 14 March 2013 - 04:13 PM

Tnx. I did a double release this time. Hope they are ok.
OTP: NaruSaku; Favorite crack pairing: NaruIno
Runner-ups:AstridxHiccup (How to train your dragon),SusanxReed, WallyxKuki (Kids next door); AshxMisty; ThorxSif
#49
Posted 15 March 2013 - 07:14 PM
OTP: NaruSaku; Favorite crack pairing: NaruIno
Runner-ups:AstridxHiccup (How to train your dragon),SusanxReed, WallyxKuki (Kids next door); AshxMisty; ThorxSif
#51
Posted 15 March 2013 - 10:34 PM


#52
Posted 15 March 2013 - 11:13 PM
OTP: NaruSaku; Favorite crack pairing: NaruIno
Runner-ups:AstridxHiccup (How to train your dragon),SusanxReed, WallyxKuki (Kids next door); AshxMisty; ThorxSif
#53
Posted 16 March 2013 - 10:36 PM
OTP: NaruSaku; Favorite crack pairing: NaruIno
Runner-ups:AstridxHiccup (How to train your dragon),SusanxReed, WallyxKuki (Kids next door); AshxMisty; ThorxSif
#54
Posted 17 March 2013 - 04:50 PM
OTP: NaruSaku; Favorite crack pairing: NaruIno
Runner-ups:AstridxHiccup (How to train your dragon),SusanxReed, WallyxKuki (Kids next door); AshxMisty; ThorxSif
#55
Posted 17 March 2013 - 09:12 PM
OTP: NaruSaku; Favorite crack pairing: NaruIno
Runner-ups:AstridxHiccup (How to train your dragon),SusanxReed, WallyxKuki (Kids next door); AshxMisty; ThorxSif
#56
Posted 18 March 2013 - 05:29 AM
OTP: NaruSaku; Favorite crack pairing: NaruIno
Runner-ups:AstridxHiccup (How to train your dragon),SusanxReed, WallyxKuki (Kids next door); AshxMisty; ThorxSif
#57
Posted 18 March 2013 - 06:22 AM
If I had to give some constructive criticism, I would say this-
I think it's better if you end your dialogues on a punchline, for example:
Kakashi: Ok. I chalenge you to a race.
Guy: Where to?
Kakashi: The baseball courth
Guy: You are on.
Kakashi: Get ready, get set, Go
*Guy runs as fast as he can in a random direction.*
Kakashi: Idiot, there is not baseball courth in Konoha.
*Later that day guys returns*
Guy: I win Kakashi.
Kakashi: But there is no baseball courth.
Guy: Wrong! I figured you would try something like that eventually. So i built a secret baseball courth in the forrests.
Kakashi: You did what?
Guy: I win (does his signiature pose)
Kakashi: OK you win. But for the record thats retarded.
Guy: And expencive. But it was worth it.
Kakashi: Whatever im out of here. Naruto and Sakura have been waiting for me for 2 hours. Who knows what they are doing by now.
Guy: See ya next time, Kakashi.
Kakashi: Yea yea whatever.
I would personally leave thing like the bolded endings out, so that the last line ("But it was worth it") is something that ends the dialogue a humorous tone.
#58
Posted 18 March 2013 - 06:31 AM
If I had to give some constructive criticism, I would say this-
I think it's better if you end your dialogues on a punchline, for example:
I would personally leave thing like the bolded endings out, so that the last line ("But it was worth it") is something that ends the dialogue a humorous tone.
Yea you are probably right. I actually find the ending the most difficult part to do. The TV dialoge was originaly about 6 lines longer but i changed it because it was dragged and boring. I was gonna end it there but i figured i could squezee some NS in there.(the challenge dialoge). I dont know I will see what the next one will be about and how i can work the endings in.
EDIT: Tnx for replying. It was getting kinda pathetic to have to bump the topic myself.
Edited by StrikerTheNoble, 18 March 2013 - 06:32 AM.
OTP: NaruSaku; Favorite crack pairing: NaruIno
Runner-ups:AstridxHiccup (How to train your dragon),SusanxReed, WallyxKuki (Kids next door); AshxMisty; ThorxSif
#60
Posted 18 March 2013 - 11:32 AM

True. But if the topic falls to low on the list people might miss it. I also like to hear the opinions. At the end of the day im doing this to make you guys laugh so it nice to hear what you think

OTP: NaruSaku; Favorite crack pairing: NaruIno
Runner-ups:AstridxHiccup (How to train your dragon),SusanxReed, WallyxKuki (Kids next door); AshxMisty; ThorxSif
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