That's a very good one, Compy. So we finally see some reason (?) behind Takeshi's madness. Interesting, and truly presentable crap.
This, on the other hand, I fear might just be crap. I could use some feedback on this one, you'll see why in a bit.
"
Be not afraid of greatness; some are born great, some achieve greatness, and others have greatness thrust upon them."
-Shakespeare,
Twelfth NightGreatness: Team Seven (Part 4 of 4)
Surveying the remains of Konohagakure, Sakura thought about Team Seven’s many impressive feats and its tragic end.
She touched her eye patch; a wound without to mirror the wound within, both incurred during her last fight. ‘Crimson Tigress,’ people now admiringly called her. Such useless, pretty words.
Naruto was a shell of himself, his spirit broken by his supposed failure to protect everyone in Konoha. To protect her. To redeem him.
Him… his path to glory led to this destruction. Sakura couldn’t forgive, not now.
Team Seven achieved greatness… but at what price?
She smiled bitterly. Shakespeare got it backwards.
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Yeah, not a happy drabble. I knew going into this keyword that this arc wouldn't be WAFFy, but I didn't quite expect it to get to this level of well, 'not happily ever after.' Anyway, yes I skipped over Sakura and Sasuke's fight, it just can't be written well in 100 words. Yes, she won.
So... besides any C&C (on a 100-word drabble. Sad, I know), my question is this: Is this last one so much of a downer that it would be better to rewrite Sakura's drabble to try and emphasize her winning there and just leave this one out? Should I leave it as is, or should I do both, like a "Director's Cut" with alternative endings?
Well, if you read the first one... I offer this to balance things out. This is something I wrote on a whim* for a thread somewhere else. The premise was basically "What if Naruto was given a stack of WWE videotapes to watch and decided to emulate the different wrestlers?"
Yes, it's pure crack. Crack: It's what's for dinner.
Yes, it won't make much sense to you if you don't follow wrestling. Sorry.
So, I
proudly present Ric Flair!Naruto.
Trembling, Sakura raised her hand to bow out of the tenth question when -
“Wooooo!†Naruto stood up slowly. When he raised his head, Ibiki was surprised to see a calm expression on his face instead of the panicked or hostile glare the proctor was expecting.
Elsewhere in the room Chouji sighed happily and opened up another bag of chips, settling in to enjoy the show. He had no idea what was coming next, but when Naruto got ‘special’ loud like this it was always entertaining.
“You think that you can scare us like that? Scare me? I’ve been in this business long enough to know that I can’t give up on anything. I won’t! Do you know who I am? Do you? I’m the ‘Nature Boy’ Uzumaki Naruto! 16-time Ichiraku’s Customer of the Month! You expect me to run and hide from a piddly little statement like that? Me, the dirtiest player in the game? Wooooo!â€Â
Naruto grinned as the gathered chuunin looked around wildly at his declaration of being ‘The Dirtiest Player in the Game.’ If he’d known that cheating was the point before the exam he could’ve set something up sooner to back up his claim, but just bluffing it to make the examiners sweat was fun too. He started to talk faster now, becoming more and more animated as he continued.
"All of you here," Naruto looked around at the crowd of genin, "All of you here want to make chuunin. All of you here want to be the best. All of you here want to be... the man! Wooo! Well, right now, you're LOOKING at the man. And I'm... not... going... ANYWHERE! If you want to be the man, you have to beat the man! Wooo!"
“So bring on your tenth question! Wooo! Hell, bring on a hundred more! Wooo! I'll never give up, not for ten, a hundred, a million questions! Wooo!
"You’re not- Wooo!- going to beat me like that! Wooo! If you want me to quit this exam, you can pull my hitai-ate – Wooo!- from my cold, dead corpse because that is the ONLY WAY –Wooo!- that you will EVER –Wooo!- get me to stop going forward and becoming Hokage! Wooooooo!â€Â
“Wooooo!†Heads turned to look at the source of the echo. Blushing until her face matched her hair, Sakura sat back down grinning sheepishly. But that is pretty damn catchy!
D-darn it, Sakura-san, thought a miffed Hinata, th-that should’ve been me backing up my Nature, er, N-Naruto-kun!
“So ‘Nature Boy,’ are you done yet?†asked an irritated Ibiki. Looking around the room, he sensed that no one else would raise their hand. Seventy-eight genin. Seventy-eight! Mitarashi’s gonna have a field day with this.
“Very well,†he roared, “the rest of you here… PASS!†Ibiki started to explain the purpose of the tenth question to the assembled genin, but they were too busy watching Naruto bounce off the wall and strut in an orange feathered robe -the hell? Was he wearing that when he came in?- right up to an examiner. Naruto shouted, “Woooooo!†right in the flinching man’s face and this time more than a few of the assembled shinobi took up the cry.
Scowling, Morino Ibiki rubbed his scarred and pitted head. He felt one hell of a headache coming on. He respected the Hokage greatly….
… but if Sarutobi ever asked him to proctor another exam Ibiki would stab his eyes out with a red-hot poker first.
And so far we've also covered The Rock, 'Stone Cold' Steve Austin, Degeneration-X, Randy Orton, and Carlito 'Carribean Cool.' Sanity is overrated.
*in other words, I woke up at 4:15AM New Year's Day for no reason whatsoever. So, mise well produce crack, amirite?
QUOTE ("Down Goes Brown")
(For the younger readers, "HMV" and "Sam The Record Man" were record stores.)
(For the younger readers, a "record store" was a building that you had to go to when you wanted to buy music.)
(For the younger readers, "buying music" was the way we acquired it, since we couldn't just… you know what, let's just get back to the Bowen song. Stupid kids, you ruin everything.)
Be the Ultimate Ninja! Or Reaper! Or Zombie Killer... or something. Play Billy Vs. SNAKEMAN!
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