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[starlitestarbrite]

yes lol :)

[starlitestarbrite]

*the butterfly effect*
[author note summary: the chaos theory when a butterfly flaps its wing it creates a ripple through the universe, the smallest change can make a huge difference...and one person can make an impact of MANY people. set during the pain arc. instead of restoring everything nagato gives naruto an ancient scroll that explains the chaos jutsu. an uzumaki secret thats been hidden...but naruto learns that sometimes...somethings are better left alone.]
*naruto had got through talk-no-jutsuing nagato*
naruto: why not restore the clan instead of trying to destroy our village?
nagato: i guess i was to stubborn to think of that. i realise i could have helped people...then my regret turned to doubt, then my doubt turned to anger, then revenge, then hatred
naruto: so, you lived in pain?. we are uzumaki.i believe if we work together someday we'll bring back the namikaze, and uzumaki clan, and restore the old whirlpool village.
nagato: i think you can make that happen...but, i don't know if people can set aside their differences...not yet -holds up a scroll- i have not used this yet. i was going to use it to bring back yahiko but, i don't think he wants to come back
naruto: what is it?
nagato: the chaos jutsu...once forbidden but, then hidden in time. this jutsu's very powerful. it lets you go back in time, and alter the past but, the chaos part of it is the present ends up changing as well
naruto: waw -takes the scroll-
konan: are you sure you should give him that?
nagato: no...but, i believe it is in good hands.
naruto: thanks -walks off- i can go back, and stop sasuke from leaving! -reads the scroll- CHAOS JUTSU!
*timeline one: sasuke leaves*
*naruto goes to the bench where sakura is talking to sasuke, ans trying to get him not to leave*
naruto: sasuke-teme your not going anywhere -ties sasuke up-
sasuke: -uses escape jutsu- i have to go.
sakura: -crying- but, sasuke-kun!
*naruto beats the crap out of sasuke, then ties him up*
naruto: we'll see what granny tsunade says about this!
*naruto drags sasuke to the hokage office*
tsunade: so, you want revenge so, bad you would betray the village?
sasuke: you don't get it. hn. i HAVE to!
naruto: why? why would you give yourself to orochimaru? why is killing your brother so important to you?
sasuke: thats none of your buissness dobe
tsunade: sasuke i'm having you interrogated this is the lowest you have ever gone
naruto: -thinks- my work here is done-
*present konoha 1*
*naruto, and jiraiya are walking around outside*
naruto: pervy sage!. wait where are we?
jiraiya: we have to keep moving. we can't stay in one place for too long...after orochimaru destroyed konoha the akatsuki is after you
naruto: WHAT! is sakura-chan okay?
jiraiya: i heard when we left...the akatsuki took over. sakura, tsunade, everyone's...dead, only a few were able to escape.
naruto: -eyes water- and sasuke?
jiraiya: yes...he's gone to killed by the curse mark
naruto: -tears roll down cheek- -thinks- so, THAT's why he left?...now i get it.
*later naruto's alone in a tent jiraiya was off "researching"*
naruto: i know! i'll go back to the uchiha massacre, and stop itachi instead! CHAOS JUTSU
*timeline two:the uchiha massacre*
*naruto arrives to see orochimaru leave after talking to itachi*
naruto: ITACHI! -runs over-
itachi: do i know you?
naruto: no...but, you can't do it! if you destroy your clan then your brother'll hate you! he'll live a life of anger, and revenge
itachi: how would you know?, and how did-
naruto: i don't have time to explain just don't do it!
itachi: -eyes water- but, i don't have a choice
naruto: yes you do! your only joining orochimaru to get more power. but, he's just using you to do his dirty work.
itachi: ok...i wont do it. but, what'll i tell orochimaru?
naruto: tell him to die off, and that your not destroying your clan
*present konoha 2*
*naruto's at ichiraku with sakura*
naruto: great everythings normal again...wheres sasuke?
sakura: i guess on a mission. he's training to be an anbu like his brother wanted to be...he's hoping to avenge his clan...he has this obsession with hunting, and killing orochimaru for the uchiha massacre.
naruto: -thinks- crap. so, in this timeline orochimaru did it himself i could try to go back, and stop orochimaru...but, i think we'll all be fine.-
sakura: -daydreams- i just hope someday...i'm sakura uchiha
naruto: -sweatdrop- CHAOS JUTSU
*timeline three-the bench scene*
naruto: this time i WONT pose as sasuke! -walks and sits by sakura- hi sakura-chan
sakura: what do you want naruto?
naruto: to let you know that i know all you want is for sasuke to accept you, and i think you should let him know how you really feel
sakura: -blinks- really!?
naruto: yeah, i understand how it feels not being accepted for who you are
sakura: -smiles- thanks naruto. but, why are you telling me this?
naruto: because i just want you to be happy. i really like you sakura-chan, and i hope someday you accept me for who i am to. well, here comes sasuke -gets up- see you around, and good luck -walks off-
sasuke: -sits down- what was that about?
sakura: -still surprised- i don't know...-hangs head- i've been so busy trying to get you to accept me i never noticed naruto
sasuke: hn. do you like naruto?
sakura: i'm not sure how i feel. i never really thought about it.
sasuke: yeah...you don't think much...your annoying most of the time.
sakura: -eyes water-
*present konoha 3*
*naruto sees sakura training with hinata*
naruto: when did they become friends? -walks over- hey hinata, and sakura-chan
sakura: now just remember...relax, and tell him how you feel
hinata: -blush- hi n-naruto-kun
sakura: hi naruto. i'll leave you two alone -walks off-
hinata: well...back in the genin days i admired you...i still do. but, do you believe admiration can turn into love?
naruto: i guess it can over time.
hinata: your my idol naruto-kun
naruto: thank you -blush-
hinata: i was so, shy...i'm trying to break out of my shell. sakura-san said i could start by talking to you.
naruto: that's nice of her.
hinata: yeah. do you like her?
naruto: yes, i love sakura-chan, and want to see her happy.
hinata: i think she feels the same way about you.
naruto: -sadly- i think we'll stay best friends. she likes sasuke
hinata: the uchiha guy? she never talks about him. she said ever since he left the village she realised she has feelings for you
naruto: -smiles- really?
hinata: i think she wants you to be happy to.
*later naruto, and sakura are on minato's head on the hokage monuement looking at the stars*
naruto: the stars are really beautiful tonight...like you sakura-chan
sakura: -smiles- yes, they really are
*a future naruto with shorter hair, and wearing an orange jump suit appears, and rips up the chaos scroll*
naruto/sakura: WAW
naruto: why did you-
future naruto: you will thank me for that later -poofs back to the future-
naruto: i welcome?
*naruto and sakura kiss*
THE END

Edited by starlitestarbrite, 14 December 2016 - 01:38 AM.

[ns.Believe.It]

The use of that cliffhanger at the end was very clever. Nobody knows what lies in the future.

 

I love the complexity in this omake. It also gives a message- 'Don't look back at the past, live the present'.

[*- ZerΩ -*]

the ending was so hilarious!

Bravo! Bravo!

[starlitestarbrite]

*road to somewhere*
[author note summary: takes place in an alternate 693.after sakura's outburtst of loving sasuke naruto decides maybe it's time to question a few things]
*naruto's on the hokage monuement on his dads head*
naruto: some birthday...i KNEW sakura-chan was lying...why do the people i love the most end up breaking my heart -eyes water- guess i still am "dead last" after all.
*hinata hops up on the monuement next to naruto with a box*
hinata: hi naruto-kun...-hands him a gift- happy birthday-
naruto: -sniffs- thanks hinata -opens it and pulls out an black hoodie with orange flames on the back, and the hood on the front say's in orange letters' "it's going to be hot this winter because i was cool all summer"- -laughs- this is awsome
hinata: -smiles- i knew you liked orange so, i wanted to buy you something to keep you warm during the winter, and something to wish you a happy birthday
naruto: -blushes- thats really sweet of you.
hinata: -blushes-
naruto: i never told you this but, i really appriciate how you've idolised me, and accepted who i am.
hinata: -blushes- i'm glad...i wish i wasn't so shy back during the genin days...i've always been like a wallflower...but, your the reason i broke out of my shell.
naruto: -smiles- a girls mind changes like the autumn leaves...apparently they change really fast -hangs head-
hinata: yeah, they do...i also know if you truley love someone sometimes all you can do is let them go...and accept they may never feel the way you feel about them but, it don't mean you can't be the best friend to them you can be. i hope you, and i can be best friends'
naruto: we can.i would ask you out but, i know how it feels to be second best.
hinata: aren't you dating sakura?
naruto: apparently she still loves sasuke...but, i guess i need to let her go...-eyes water- i really thought we were going to be together, and my mother did say find a girl like her...i thought i did.
hinata: i'm sure sakura didn't mean to hurt you
naruto: i know she didn't, and i still consider her a best friend, and she'll always have a special place in my heart -tears roll down cheek-
hinata: have you ever told her how you felt?
naruto: i was going to after the war, and everything...but, i see its too late now.
hinata: -eyes water- thats so sad.
naruto: yeah.
*hinata gives naruto a hug*
naruto: i needed that.-thinks- what if since in menma's universe my counterpart menma, and sakura are dating...what if in THIS one we just stay best friends?- have you ever thought of wearing your hair up in a poneytale?
hinata: no...but, i will if you want
naruto: you don't have to...i was just thinking of something -grins-
hinata: oh.
THE END
[side note: i wasn't sure how to end it:
NH: if he started dating hinata she would be rebound girl/second best, and it just feels like it would be for the wrong reason.
NI: if he dated ino then she would just be second choice, and he would be...third choice i guess? since she likes sasuke, AND sai
NK: i was going to see if i could get something going with naruto, and karin but, again even if she did fall for naruto for his warm chakra he would still be second choice just like with sakura. though naruto namikaze, karin uzumaki...i think it could be done who does that reminde you of [minato namikaze/ kushina uzumaki]
NS:i was going to have sakura have some kind of wake up call but, things are so messed up in the manga now i don't think ANYTHING can fix this ship now.
also i don't feel that naruto would be able to let anyone get too close to him after what sakura has done.]

Edited by starlitestarbrite, 28 September 2014 - 06:58 PM.

[*- ZerΩ -*]

really liked it.. 

Try to end it with NH pairing.. to give us a taste how it would be if NH was to happen and change the feels a bit (you know alway NS.. lets try something different :3 )

Well... and to tell you the truth... i liked hinata here :)

 

Btw.. i think you will come up with an idea.. to make hinata look that she isnt the 2nd best...

I believe in you!!

[starlitestarbrite]

*realization*
[author note summary: so, a girls mind changes like the autumn leaves...but, how about a girl whoes heart shines like the summer sun? set after chapter 693...side note: i don't think i'll ever get over sakura's stunt she pulled lol.]
*naruto's sitting in his old swing from back in the genin days*
naruto: -smiles sadly remembering team 7-
*hinata walks up*
hinata: hi naruto-kun.
naruto: hi hinata-hime
hinata: -blushes- well, i'm head of the main branch but, i'm not a princess or queen
naruto: you are in my eyes. i see you as a princess. you've always been the one who liked me for who i was.
hinata: yeah, i still do.
naruto: am i the only person you've ever loved, and looked up to?
hinata: yes...you just seem like no matter how much people walk all over you, and hurt you you still always smile, like you want to share your happiness, and energy with everyone.
naruto: -eyes water- i just don;t want anyone to ever feel the pain i've lived through.
*at kurenai's*
kurenai: now, i'm going to a sensei convention...long weird story, i need you to babysit him all weekend
shikamaru: -whines- all week? man will i get a break?
kurenai: you can invite ino to assist you if you need a girl around.
shikamaru: -sweatdrop- yes kurenai-sensei
*knock knock*
kurenai: -opens door- yes?
temari: i was told by shika's mom he would be here
shikamaru: oh god -sweatdrop-
*later. i'm not sure what kurenai, and asuma's kid's name is so i'll call him Isamu it means courage in japanese*
temari: -holds isamu, and gives him a bottle- so, shika-kun ever think this could be us someday?
shikamaru: -sweatdrop- no.
temari: well, i think so, hmmm...what would you name your kid if you had one?
shikamaru: i don't know i'm not a girl so, i don't think about things like that.
temari: well, i'm not a boy so, i do -sticks tounge out playfully- if its a girl...shikamari. if its aboy...how about shikaharu...with an h instead of an m?
shikamaru: i'm unsure about marriage now...i mean what if one of us dies, or both of us dies? then our kid would be without both, or one parent
temari: -blushes- i thought you didn't think about things like that?
shikamaru: -blushes- your not letting that go are you?
temari: nope i'm gonna tease you about it all weekend -giggles-
shikamaru: -thinks- i need to choose my words more carefully next time-
*back to naruto, and hinata*
naruto: hey? want to go to ichiraku? i'll buy us both ramen!
hinata: sure.
*at ichiraku*
naruto: one mega bowls of pork flavored ramen for two! ramen!
hinata: i'll have zenzai if you have a bowl?
teuchi: alright one super bowl of pork raman, and one bowl of red bean soup comming up!
naruto: i'll share some of my ramen with you
hinata: -blushes- and i'll share some of my soup with you.
naruto: -blushes-
teuchi: -brings them their food- hey? didn't you used to come with sakura?
naruto: yeah...-slurps noodles- but, i'm here with hinata-hime today.
*they feed eachother a free sample of eachothers food*
naruto: mmm thats good!
hinata: yeah, i liked the ramen to.
naruto: kind of remindes me of "the curry of life" waaay back on a mission with team gai
*hinata, and naruto then lowered their head...a moment of silence remembering neji. whom was apart of team gai*
hinata/naruto: time to eat
*at yamanaka's flowershop*
ino: -finishes with a customer- thank you have a nice day
sakura: -comes in from the garden- every things taken care of in the garden.
ino: good...now go restock the empty flower pots, and replant the ones that are new.
sakura: -sweatdrop- you work here to ya know. we need more workers here
ino: oh i know! why dont you ask sasuke, and confess THAT YOUR USELESS WITHOUT HIS ASSISTANCE FOREHEAD!
sakura: HEY! DON'T START THAT I THOUGHT YOU WERE OVER SASUKE
ino: i thought you were to.
sakura: -blinks- huh?
ino: go restock the flowerpots
sakura: -rolls eyes and goes to restock the flowerpots they're getting ready for the season change. by preparing autumn plants-
-sai comes in-
ino: HI SAI-KUN! -smiles with dreamy eyes-
sai: hello beautiful
ino: i never get over that!
sai: do you not think your beautiful?...usually girls who need to be constantly told they're beautiful don't see themselves as such.
ino: -sweatdrop- -thinks- he can read me so well!- -blushes- well,...um...how can i help you today?
sai: i'm just visiting places i feel can help inspire me. i read in a book that sometimes being around nature helps to clear your mind, and relax you.
-sakura walks out-
sakura: like it or not i'm taking a break. hi sai.
sai: hello...confused
sakura: -blinks- maybe you shouldn't do nicknames
sai: well, i was going to call you shallow but, i thought that sounded a bit rude
sakura: -sweatdrop-
*back to naruto, and hinata they're eating cinneman buns*
hinata: i'm having alot of fun with you naruto-kun
naruto: i'm having fun with you to. to be honest i like being around you your just so nice. it gives me a warm, fuzzy feeling -blushes- noone's ever been able to do that.
hinata: what about sakura?
naruto: well,...i'm happy when she's happy. but, this feeling is different...i don't know what it is.
hinata: it might -blush- it might be love because thats how i feel around you to.
*hinata and naruto hug*
*hinata and naruto kiss*
THE END

Edited by starlitestarbrite, 29 September 2014 - 09:25 AM.

[starlitestarbrite]

know what I noticed?:

it seems the anime fillers are more NS than the manga canon[anime canon] lol...I guess SP in the end became better than kishi when it comes to romantic parings lol

[ns.Believe.It]

Noooooooo  You started writing NH stories instead? I can't believe this 

[*- ZerΩ -*]

*realization*
[author note summary: so, a girls mind changes like the autumn leaves...but, how about a girl whoes heart shines like the summer sun? set after chapter 693...side note: i don't think i'll ever get over sakura's stunt she pulled lol.]
*naruto's sitting in his old swing from back in the genin days*
naruto: -smiles sadly remembering team 7-
*hinata walks up*
hinata: hi naruto-kun.
naruto: hi hinata-hime
hinata: -blushes- well, i'm head of the main branch but, i'm not a princess or queen
naruto: you are in my eyes. i see you as a princess. you've always been the one who liked me for who i was.
hinata: yeah, i still do.
naruto: am i the only person you've ever loved, and looked up to?
hinata: yes...you just seem like no matter how much people walk all over you, and hurt you you still always smile, like you want to share your happiness, and energy with everyone.
naruto: -eyes water- i just don;t want anyone to ever feel the pain i've lived through.
*at kurenai's*
kurenai: now, i'm going to a sensei convention...long weird story, i need you to babysit him all weekend
shikamaru: -whines- all week? man will i get a break?
kurenai: you can invite ino to assist you if you need a girl around.
shikamaru: -sweatdrop- yes kurenai-sensei
*knock knock*
kurenai: -opens door- yes?
temari: i was told by shika's mom he would be here
shikamaru: oh god -sweatdrop-
*later. i'm not sure what kurenai, and asuma's kid's name is so i'll call him Isamu it means courage in japanese*
temari: -holds isamu, and gives him a bottle- so, shika-kun ever think this could be us someday?
shikamaru: -sweatdrop- no.
temari: well, i think so, hmmm...what would you name your kid if you had one?
shikamaru: i don't know i'm not a girl so, i don't think about things like that.
temari: well, i'm not a boy so, i do -sticks tounge out playfully- if its a girl...shikamari. if its aboy...how about shikaharu...with an h instead of an m?
shikamaru: i'm unsure about marriage now...i mean what if one of us dies, or both of us dies? then our kid would be without both, or one parent
temari: -blushes- i thought you didn't think about things like that?
shikamaru: -blushes- your not letting that go are you?
temari: nope i'm gonna tease you about it all weekend -giggles-
shikamaru: -thinks- i need to choose my words more carefully next time-
*back to naruto, and hinata*
naruto: hey? want to go to ichiraku? i'll buy us both ramen!
hinata: sure.
*at ichiraku*
naruto: one mega bowls of pork flavored ramen for two! ramen!
hinata: i'll have zenzai if you have a bowl?
teuchi: alright one super bowl of pork raman, and one bowl of red bean soup comming up!
naruto: i'll share some of my ramen with you
hinata: -blushes- and i'll share some of my soup with you.
naruto: -blushes-
teuchi: -brings them their food- hey? didn't you used to come with sakura?
naruto: yeah...-slurps noodles- but, i'm here with hinata-hime today.
*they feed eachother a free sample of eachothers food*
naruto: mmm thats good!
hinata: yeah, i liked the ramen to.
naruto: kind of remindes me of "the curry of life" waaay back on a mission with team gai
*hinata, and naruto then lowered their head...a moment of silence remembering neji. whom was apart of team gai*
hinata/naruto: time to eat
*at yamanaka's flowershop*
ino: -finishes with a customer- thank you have a nice day
sakura: -comes in from the garden- every things taken care of in the garden.
ino: good...now go restock the empty flower pots, and replant the ones that are new.
sakura: -sweatdrop- you work here to ya know. we need more workers here
ino: oh i know! why dont you ask sasuke, and confess THAT YOUR USELESS WITHOUT HIS ASSISTANCE FOREHEAD!
sakura: HEY! DON'T START THAT I THOUGHT YOU WERE OVER SASUKE
ino: i thought you were to.
sakura: -blinks- huh?
ino: go restock the flowerpots
sakura: -rolls eyes and goes to restock the flowerpots they're getting ready for the season change. by preparing autumn plants-
-sai comes in-
ino: HI SAI-KUN! -smiles with dreamy eyes-
sai: hello beautiful
ino: i never get over that!
sai: do you not think your beautiful?...usually girls who need to be constantly told they're beautiful don't see themselves as such.
ino: -sweatdrop- -thinks- he can read me so well!- -blushes- well,...um...how can i help you today?
sai: i'm just visiting places i feel can help inspire me. i read in a book that sometimes being around nature helps to clear your mind, and relax you.
-sakura walks out-
sakura: like it or not i'm taking a break. hi sai.
sai: hello...confused
sakura: -blinks- maybe you shouldn't do nicknames
sai: well, i was going to call you shallow but, i thought that sounded a bit rude
sakura: -sweatdrop-
*back to naruto, and hinata they're eating cinneman buns*
hinata: i'm having alot of fun with you naruto-kun
naruto: i'm having fun with you to. to be honest i like being around you your just so nice. it gives me a warm, fuzzy feeling -blushes- noone's ever been able to do that.
hinata: what about sakura?
naruto: well,...i'm happy when she's happy. but, this feeling is different...i don't know what it is.
hinata: it might -blush- it might be love because thats how i feel around you to.
*hinata and naruto hug*
*hinata and naruto kiss*
THE END

*Claps Claps Claps*

Your creativity has reached a whole new level!

I knew you could do it! 

 

How did you feel while writing it? 

 

Noooooooo  You started writing NH stories instead? I can't believe this 

Its my fault.. dont blame her.. 

I asked her do to it...

[starlitestarbrite]

i didn't start writing NH instead I just wanted to see if I could do a good NH paring omake.i felt calm while writing it lol. but, I made sure I included other ships since I'm exploring ships beyond narusaku lol. I liked how playful, and funny shikatema seemed here, and during the NH moments I just felt like they seem to see themselves in eachother


well, in my version atleast. I think they would have very good friendship but, seeing them as paring is strange but, I kept thinking. atleast naruto's not cold hearted like sasuke, at least hinata liked someone who deserved to be loved.

naruto was, and is, and will always be hinata's "one true choice for love". unlike sakura...I wish it was sakura. the buld up thread by slextrem that shows all the canon manga moments...now kishi screwed that up just as studio perriot decides to go NS lol.

was all that just platonic friendship, or is there a greater plan to canonize NS coming? the chapters are to short so it's hard to tell lol. but, I'm hoping sakura gets the wake up call of a lifetime, and realizing her "sasuke" was naruto all along.

Edited by starlitestarbrite, 29 September 2014 - 11:24 AM.

[*- ZerΩ -*]

i didn't start writing NH instead I just wanted to see if I could do a good NH paring omake.i felt calm while writing it lol. but, I made sure I included other ships since I'm exploring ships beyond narusaku lol. I liked how playful, and funny shikatema seemed here, and during the NH moments I just felt like they seem to see themselves in eachother


well, in my version atleast. I think they would have very good friendship but, seeing them as paring is strange but, I kept thinking. atleast naruto's not cold hearted like sasuke, at least hinata liked someone who deserved to be loved.

naruto was, and is, and will always be hinata's "one true choice for love". unlike sakura...I wish it was sakura. the buld up thread by slextrem that shows all the canon manga moments...now kishi screwed that up just as studio perriot decides to go NS lol.

was all that just platonic friendship, or is there a greater plan to canonize NS coming? the chapters are to short so it's hard to tell lol. but, I'm hoping sakura gets the wake up call of a lifetime, and realizing her "sasuke" was naruto all along.

 

I have a feeling that kishi prepares for one ship a huge surprise(i said that again in 662 while waiting for 663 and i was right, but without the ship thing)..

even though i dont know for which one.. hopefully NS

But.. at this point... if NS happens i feel so sorry for Hinata.I know she is irritating with her shyness and her Naruto-kuning.. but... she likes Naruto even before Naruto liked Sakura...

She doesnt deserve either to get hurt by Naruto,especially since she risked her life for him.

I dont know what to expect at this point.

 

On the other hand...if none of the main pairings was to happen.. we would all be upset, because we wouldnt get a closure for their life.I mean we have seen Naruto since a Baby and we expect to see him as a Hokage and a Father..(with whoever his wife is).

[starlitestarbrite]

yeah, I wanna see naruto be hokage!. what do you like better at this point? kishi's canon, or SP's fillers?

[narusaku256]

Noooooooooooo NH

[starlitestarbrite]

lol I hope I don't loose fans because of that one NH omake.atleast its not SS

Edited by starlitestarbrite, 29 September 2014 - 12:18 PM.

[ns.Believe.It]

i didn't start writing NH instead I just wanted to see if I could do a good NH paring omake.i felt calm while writing it lol. but, I made sure I included other ships since I'm exploring ships beyond narusaku lol. I liked how playful, and funny shikatema seemed here, and during the NH moments I just felt like they seem to see themselves in eachother


well, in my version atleast. I think they would have very good friendship but, seeing them as paring is strange but, I kept thinking. atleast naruto's not cold hearted like sasuke, at least hinata liked someone who deserved to be loved.

naruto was, and is, and will always be hinata's "one true choice for love". unlike sakura...I wish it was sakura. the buld up thread by slextrem that shows all the canon manga moments...now kishi screwed that up just as studio perriot decides to go NS lol.

was all that just platonic friendship, or is there a greater plan to canonize NS coming? the chapters are to short so it's hard to tell lol. but, I'm hoping sakura gets the wake up call of a lifetime, and realizing her "sasuke" was naruto all along.

Completely agree with you. 

 

This is exactly what I said in the chapter thread. Hinata's love for Naruto is better written than Sakura's love for Sasuke. 

 

Hinata's love makes much more sense and it has actually had a positive influence on her character. Sakura's love for Sasuke makes her a pathetic mess. Its like a cancer to her character.

 

But there were a couple of members who assumed I was bashing Sakura   

 

Lets hope Sakura gets her head in the right place and then makes the right choice.

 

 

PS: You should write whatever stories come to your mind. Even if they aren't pro NS I'll still read them 

[starlitestarbrite]

*that old haruno magic*
[author note summary: another What Could've Been. my version of 693...what has sakura been holding back all this time?]
sasuke: in other words your going to die naruto there is no way around it
sakura: -gasps-
*flashback*
naruto: if we fight again sasuke, we'll both die
*end*
sakura: -eyes water-
sasuke: according to what the sage said i don't need the tailed beasts inside you to dispel the infinite tsukoyomi as long as i have the tailed beast i captured to use
naruto: i wont let you get away with this you realise that don't you?
sasuke: lets go elsewhere to fight then. guess i'll have to get rid of you first.
sakura: -fists ball up-
*flashback*
naruto: i don't like it when people lie to themselves!
*end*
kakashi: -holds eye- the after effects of using sharingan.
sakura: will you be okay sensei?
kakashi: yeah...just a headache
sakura: -turns back to naruto, and sasuke-
naruto: a long time ago i promised sakura-chan i would bring you back sasuke...no matter what i would bring you back home
sakura: -closes eyes-
*flashback warning-fanmade filler back during a time when jiraiya, and naruto were on their three year journey*
*the training grounds tsunade, and sakura train*
*kurenai walks up*
kurenai: lady tsunade has requested i train you in genjutsu today.
sakura: okay, sounds great!
kurenai: how good are you in it? what can you do so far?
sakura: well, i can snap others out of genjutsu, and end a genjutsu...thats about it. but i can see through deception but, i still need practase on that -scratches head- -thinks- oh god i'm turning into naruto-
kurenai: all genjutsu is the work of the mind. if you can tell your dreams from reality you can tell a genjutsu from the real thing...BUT,you have to be sure you don't accidently cast yourself into a genjutsu...the subconscious is like a bijuu in a way.because the subconscious has the power to create, and destroy
sakura: waw!
kurenai: BUT, everyone has their own genjutsu. like every genjutsu user has a denomic illusion jutsu...mine is the tree binding death. causing the person to "dream" they're binded by trees'
sakura: i haven't figured mine out yet
kurenai: then that's what we'll work on today
*end*
sakura: sasuke-kun? i'm sorry but, i can't let you hurt anyoneelse...and i enspecially WILL NOT let you kill naruto...demonic illusion jutsu
sasuke: -falls-
naruto: what...the? what just happened? kakashi-sensei did you put him in a genjutsu?
kakashi: no, i didn't...i don't have enough chakra at the moment
sakura: i did.-opens eyes- naruto you were right i was lying to myself
naruto: -hangs head-
sakura: i was lying when I thought I had feelings for sasuke-kun...I had fallen for YOU all along -blushes-
naruto: -eyes water- really?
sakura: of course
*they both hug*
kakashi: wait...i never got to teach you demonic illusion genjutsu
sakura: kurenai-sensei did...turns out demonic illusion is a matrix of your own dark thoughts.
kakashi: her's is binding tree death, mine is hell viewing jutsu...whats yours?
*sasuke's dream/nightmare*
*sasuke's clan still exists*
sasuke: am i in a genjutsu? who cares! i'm home! -runs inside, and theres a celebration-
mikito: congratulations itachi!
fugaku: i knew you would become an ANBU!
itachi: -smiles- and i owe it all to everyone who has helped me through the years
mikito/fugaku: AWWW -they hug him-
sasuke: -smiles- hey itachi-niisan. guess you made your dream came true after all hn?
itachi: hey, there. -pokes sasuke's forehead- guess you got alot of training to to to catch up eh dead last? -laughing-
sasuke: -sweatdrop- what was that?
itachi: try to be less annoying dobe kay? -pats his head-
*back to sakura*
sakura: mine is demonic illusion: rejection -winks-
*naruto, and sakura kiss*
THE END

Edited by starlitestarbrite, 30 September 2014 - 06:29 AM.

[ns.Believe.It]

I love your version so much more than Kishimoto's! When fans are able to write a better sensible story than the creator of the story then....well...its safe to say it doesn't reflect well on Kishimoto. 

 

In your version, I like that Sakura has finally put her genjutsu potential to use! And Sasuke got one hit KO'd by Sakura which is enjoyable to read   The ending was sweet. But what's most important is your version doesn't make Sakura look like a dumb, immature girl.

[*- ZerΩ -*]

Really nice 

[starlitestarbrite]

*ask the anime characters'*
[author note summary: i was watching anime con. videos on youtube, some had where the audience can ask the anime characters' questions. the anime characters' picture' would bee on a screen, and the VA i guess behinde a curtain...well, i decided to do my own spin where the REAL characters' from various anime answer some of the weirdest questions in the game show "ask the anime characters"! i've never seen host club but, by some vids tamaki seems funny.]
*in the anime panel room*
announcer: here's your host Arashi takahashi!
*audience cheers*
arashi: -comes out- one at a time audience members' will get to ask one of five anime characters' one question at a time!
*audience cheers*
arashi: but, so, there wont be confusion, and everyone talking all at once just raise hands, i'll point to a member of the audience, you'll stand up, introduce yourself, and ask the question.
heckler: GET ON WITH THIS!
arashi: now,that is an example on what NOT to do. from ouran high school host club tamaki, from fairy tale natsu, from one piece luffy, from naruto naruto, and from fullmetal alchemist edward!
*they all come out and sit down, everyone cheers*
tamaki: wait!...have you all noticed half of us are blones? i mean the only ones who aren't are luffy, and...um...
natsu: natsu
tamaki: natsumi
*audience laughs*
natsu: NATSU!
naruto: your hair's pink like sakura-chan's
natsu: -sweatdrop- can i leave?
arashi: no. now who has a quest-
tamaki: waiiit wait wait! why do you -points to naruto- sound like a girl?
*audience laughs*
arashi: can i start the game?
tamaki: no! we're all talking
*some laugh*
*naruto transforms into a girl*
naruto: better?
*natsu, tamaki, , luffy, and ed nosebleed*
*audience laughs*
tamaki: I KNEW IT! YOUR A CUTE GIRL!
natsu: you look kinda like lucy
*audience laughs, squeals, and claps*
naruto: -transforms back- great a bunch of mini pervy sage-like guys
tamaki: you know...Haruhi was thought to be male when she entered our host club...you'd fit riiight in
*yaoi fans laugh and clap*
naruto: -sweatdrop- your really weird
arashi: we'll be right back after these message -sweatdrop-
*commercial*
*a trailer comes on*
annoucer: comming soon...in japanese theaters'!...the last: naruto movie!
twitter poster: -sneaks in- NS IS CANON!
announcer: HEY! NOONES SUPOSSED TO KNOW THAT!
*twitter poster runs off*
announcer: ignore what that poster says, and read what *a poster of the last: naruto movie ad comes on screen* THIS poster says!
*back to the show*
*audience cheers*
arashi: NOW who wants to ask a question?...-points to someone-
girl1: -stands up- hi, i'm gina this question's for edward...are you still short?
edward: -sweatdrop- no...i was never short.
naruto: i used to be teased for being the shortest on my team to!
edward: I WASN'T SHORT!
naruto: how tall are you? i'm 5.4
edward: okay, how tall is everyone here? if i have to share you ALL have to!
heckler: how short are you!?
edward: WHO YA CALLING A TINY LITTLE PIP SQUEAK!!!?
*audience laughter, and some say al's line "thats not what he said!"*
tamaki: anyone have a question for me -puppy dog eyes-
arashi: i'm the only one who can do that...over here
guy1: hi, this question is for edward...do you like twilight? that vampires names edward...its my name to only i'm called eddie.
edward: i've never heard of it...though i have heard mostly girls read it
tamaki: oh come on...guys can enjoy things like that to...besides we all get curious sometimes
naruto: [he's between tamaki, and luffy] luffy? trade seats with me
luffy: why?
naruto: i think the one piece is under my seat
*they trade seats*
luffy: -looks under there...nothing- HEEEY!
arashi: ok..you
girl2: hi i'm bethanie, and this question is for naruto
naruto: YAAAY! yes?
girl2: you kissed sasuke twice...did you enjoy both times
*yaoi fangirls cheer...yup sasunaru fangirls are there*
naruto: AAAH! NO! I DIDN'T!!!
tamaki: seems you two have a close bond
natsu: did you transform into a girl when you did it?
naruto: GRRR -points to ed- ed has a long braid, and you all didn't comment on that!
tamaki: your the only one with a female-like voice...are you sure your not a girl?
*some laugh*
naruto: -sweatdrop, face red from embarrassement-
luffy: it's okay...if it makes you feel better your not the only male character ever voiced by a girl.
tamaki: gender-benders...you never knooow
arashi: okay next one...
girl3: hi, i'm laura...this ones for luffy. do you like nami...as more than a friend?
luffy: of course i do...why wouldn't i?
heckler: he likes her "tsunade boobs"
*audience laughs, and so does naruto while the other four guys sweatdrop, and blush*
arashi: well, now we know why some only like the fanservace
*some laugh*
girl:4: hi, i'm whitnie...this question's for natsu...do you love lucy?
natsu: well...i do like her alot...-blush- and protect her
naruto: thats a yes
girl4: that was natsu's question
naruto: i know...some just only want short answers
tamaki: i'm starting to wonder if this audience even watches my show.
naruto: i'm sure many heard of it, and read the manga, or watch the anime. whoes your publisher? mine, luffy, and natsu's are sounen jump
edward:OH hey naruto? my author? SHE was female, and SHE wrote a shounen...so, see? even girls can do shounen!
naruto: whats her name?
ed: arakawa's her last name
naruto: you think we can all do a petition to habve HER finish my manga?
*audience squeal with laughter and claps*
tamaki: lala shojo magazine for our manga, anime network- funimation
edward: shounen monthly gangan, and viz media
naruto: hey, cool we're all from viz except tamaki
tamaki: no its viz media i thought yall were just discussing japanese publisher
naruto: or we can get studio perriot to finish our series for us...as long as i end up with sakura-chan
*audience narusakufans clap, and cheer*
arashi: okay, anyoneelse have a question? now four girls have asked a question, and only 1 guys so, why don't we even it out?...yes over here
guy2: hi, i'm chris, this questions for edward. do you like shrimp?
edward: the food?
luffy: mmm now i want some
naruto: i want some ramen
guy2: yeah the food...since now, if your called a shrimp you wont feel bad
*some go oooh*
edward: WHO YA CALLING SHRIMP TINY ENOUGH TO EAT!?
arashi: we'll be back after these messages*
*commercial*
*twilight zone music plays*
announcer: whats real, or not is unkmown...the last commercial you thought you saw a twitter poster, you thought they made a roumer comment...but, you were in the twilight zone
*back to the show*
arashi: next question?...you?
guy3: hey, my names gary, and this question is for tamaki
tamaki: YES!...i mean...yes?
guy3: do you worship Haruhi?
tamaki: yes -blush- i guess you can say i do...i love her -smiles-
natsu: see naruto? he wasn't flirting with you
naruto: -sweatdrop- wait...whoes your author?
arashi: shhh
*some laugh*
guy3: no i mean...i read that Haruhi actually does have followers...in our world some of her fans' created a religion calleed Haruhism
heckler: thats Haruhi Suzumiya...the one from host club is Haruhi Fujioka.
tamaki: naruto, our author is a girl named bisco hatori
naruto: -sweatdrop-...natsu?, luffy? are yours female to?
natsu: no, mashima's a guy
luffy: oda's a a guy
naruto: -sighs of relief-
arashi: okay, next question?
guy4: how can you stand hearing sakura telling sasuke she loves him?
naruto:well, not all love is romantic love. there are different kind...theres sibling love, friendship love, being IN love, and more...she didn't say she's in love with him just that she loved him...loves him
tamaki:everyone needs to be reminded someone out there still loves them sometimes
ed: yeah...i love my brother al, and i love my wife winry.
*ed/winry fans cheer, clap*
ed: by the way...our whole anime, and manga didn't show romance...untill the epilouge...so, guess what ship fandom we had
heckler: ELRIC-CEST FOR LIFE!
*some: EEEWWW*
ed: just because of our strong bond...the way siblings SHOULD be.
arashi: i agree. family should love eachother. next question?
guy5: hi, i'm steve...this question's for naruto. what would you do if you were hokage? and you have to say "all the girls have to wear short mini skirt
*some audience laugh*
naruto: well, if i were hokage i would protect the village, and our allie villages...and the girls have to wear -blushes- short mini skirts
*audience claps and laughs*
ed: i think naruto would look good in a miniskirt
*EVERYONE laughs*
ed: seriously he'd look better than mustang
*audience clap, and cheer*
luffy: enspecially if naruto transforms into a girl
*audience laughs*
naruto: -embarrassed, and sweatdrop- i...actually agree.
*some femnaruto[naruko] fans go "WHOOO!" and clap*
arashi: one more question?...next time we should do this with all girls...if this goes well, we may have THIS show once a week, or month or something.
luffy: theres alot of us out there! the anime world's huge enouth to do one every week...every day if you wanted to!
*audience cheered*
arashi: you...question?
girl5: yes, i'm samantha...this one's for edward?...every convention your english VA goes to, and i think winry's does this to... if they go to a Q and A panel if they're asked to do an impression or something they give this rude disclaimer to ruin the fun saying "the characters are not real" or something like that
*some go awww*
girl5: i think that's so rude, and degrading they're at an ANIME convention...anyway whats your reaction to that "not real" comment?
ed: are you sure their not just explaining they don't own the characters, or series
naruto: well, my response it i think they show they don't care about their fans when they act that way, and i bet they've lost MANY if thats how they act!
ed: i say it depends on what "real" means...i can be real, meaning honest, polite, express myself...yeah i'm pretty real...winry's real
naruto: yeah all real means is serious right? so, if something has an impact on others, and is apart of their lives in someway then are the ones who can relate to the characters, the stories not real either?
*some go: "AWWW", and some clap*
arashi: well, thats our show for tonight! so long everyone!
*audience claps*
*one more commercial*
jingle singer:
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a member from the cannon parings home thats hot
narusaku.com that is the spot
announcer: HEY! WHAT DID I TELL YOU ALL ABOUT SAYING ITS CANNON!?
jingle singer:
you want us to stop and forget thats true
but, naruto, and sakura are our forbidden fruit
announer: STOP THAT!
jingle singer:
we'll never stop. ya wanna know why?
cause its 2014. not 1945
announcer: thats it...yall are fired!
announcer2: yall are rehired!
announcer: GRRR NAAARRRUUUTTTOOO!
*shows naruto and sakura kissing*

THE END

Edited by starlitestarbrite, 30 September 2014 - 06:06 PM.