Love Triangles
#1
Posted 25 May 2006 - 04:47 AM
Naruto------------loves/likes------------
------------loves/likes------------ Sakura
BUT
Hinata-----------------loves------------------Naruto
Naruto----------------starting to like------------ Hinata
OC character------------------likes----------------Naruto
Naruto--------------------------likes-----------------OC charater
the problem is -- sakura thinks the OC character LOVES naruto, but she doesn't. only likes him. so, sakura acts all wierd. naruto, being the dumbhead as he is, doesn't know why she acts all weird. OC character, doesn't know sakura thinks OC character loves naruto.
ON TOP OF ALL THIS
jiraiya and tsunade bet
jiraiya--------------- naruto ends up w/sakura
tsunade------------ naruto ends up w/hinata or OC character
SO
kiba/kakashi PULL STRINGS TO MAKE IT HAPPEN FOR JIRAIYA
kiba/shino/kurenei PULL STRINGS TO MAKE IT HAPPEN FOR TSUNADE
KIBA -- ON JIRAIYA'S SIDE -- DOUBLE AGENT
now, i need some ideas... and help for scenes when they try to force naruto with someone. complex, i know.
#2
Posted 25 May 2006 - 07:34 AM
The Kiba aspect is a nice touch. In fact, I think it could potentially be the most interesting part of the story if you play it right. Having him simultaneously provide Jiraiya's side with information while coming up with doomed plans for Tsunade's side would be great to watch. But you also have to make sure he doesn't do anything malicious. Since I'm assuming you've put him where he is because he wants to be with Hinata himself, you have to make sure none of his machinations will hurt her in any way. And he could also be the shoulder for her to cry on when plans go awry, so to speak.
This layout is a virtual goldmine for story ideas and character development. Resist the urge to write a lot of gags (one or two here and there never hurt anybody) and go for the serious approach and it could be fantastic.
#3
Posted 25 May 2006 - 05:23 PM
You could do something like kiba and naruto are walking, and kiba is leading naruto to where sakura is bathing, etc. That would be humorous.
Bunny: Sasuke, join me.
Sasuke: What will I receive if I join you?
Bunny: POWER! UNLIMITED POWER!
Sasuke: Sweet! what do I do?
Orochimaru: Sssssssssssssaaaaaaasssssssssukkkkkkeeeeeee-kkkuuuuuunnnn!
Sasuke: oh f***
Sono nantomo ienai sekushii na oshiri wo ore no kokan ni okittensukete rizumu ni awasete kosurinasai = Back that ass up.
#4
Posted 26 May 2006 - 02:48 AM
#5
Posted 26 May 2006 - 03:36 AM
The idea of Sakura being observed by Naruto taking a shower dosen't do anything for her . It is funny . The plan is to get the two together not have Naruto back panting after her like a lovesick puppy .
The ideas for scenes is the hardest thing, but they don't need to be complicated, simple will do just too. Describing an idea may be complex though.....
An example: Kiba tells Naruto that he's been training with Hinata, but she needs to train with someone who has a completely different fighting style and brain. Of course Naruto is like "Sure, I'll help Hinata." The idea is for them to spend the day together talking and getting close together with their bodies. Of course it never happens since Kiba tells Naruto the wrong day to come.
Kiba then gets Sakura to follow Akamaru into the training area Naruto is. Kakashi then puts a lock down on that area with the excuse of testing equipment making Naruto and Sakura....and Akamaru spend all day and night in the woods or wherever together. A lot of things could happen good and bad maybe even something as funny as Naruto walking up on Sakura bathing in the river. Making them have to cuddle for warmth and in their heads having some internal conflict esspecially with Sakura.
That was just an thought.
Simple in my head, not so much when describing it.
I only forgot to write sooner...but my memory is so very bad
Funny I should say that and still so very young...while my name may be Memories...all it means is "I'm sunk."
Now I sit here...with a migraine in my head...instead of posting this signature...I've saved it instead.
and my banner says, "Sealed at birth...to hold Kyubi's wrath...only to be shun...abandoned...and laughed at...Dreaming of a future worth living...he wants to be Hokage,...the largest goal of any ninja...This is his journey... from beginning...to end...He's Naruto...a fighter among men.
#6
Posted 26 May 2006 - 04:06 AM
Bunny: Sasuke, join me.
Sasuke: What will I receive if I join you?
Bunny: POWER! UNLIMITED POWER!
Sasuke: Sweet! what do I do?
Orochimaru: Sssssssssssssaaaaaaasssssssssukkkkkkeeeeeee-kkkuuuuuunnnn!
Sasuke: oh f***
Sono nantomo ienai sekushii na oshiri wo ore no kokan ni okittensukete rizumu ni awasete kosurinasai = Back that ass up.
#7
Posted 26 May 2006 - 01:52 PM
I only forgot to write sooner...but my memory is so very bad
Funny I should say that and still so very young...while my name may be Memories...all it means is "I'm sunk."
Now I sit here...with a migraine in my head...instead of posting this signature...I've saved it instead.
and my banner says, "Sealed at birth...to hold Kyubi's wrath...only to be shun...abandoned...and laughed at...Dreaming of a future worth living...he wants to be Hokage,...the largest goal of any ninja...This is his journey... from beginning...to end...He's Naruto...a fighter among men.
#8
Posted 26 May 2006 - 10:43 PM
Kiba casually walked over to Naruto. "Heeeey Naruto," he started off, "So..whatcha doin?"
Naruto looked at Kiba with an eyebrow raised. "Uh....Kiba...I'm carrying firewood." he replied obviously holding a pile of firewood in his hands.
Kiba slightly panicked. "Thaat's great. So um....what do'ya think of Kira-chan?" he asked him slyly.
Naruto looked suprised. "Kira-chan? Oh she's great! I really like her!" he smiled.
Kiba panicked. "B...But what about Sakura?" he asked nervously.
"Eh? Sakura-chan? What about her?" he asked being oblivious as usual. Unfortunatly Naruto only focused on fighting, a little manners, and fighting(again) during the 2 and 1/2 year training. Although his habits slightly changed, he at least wasn't as loud as before. (Keyword: SLIGHTLY)
"Well don't you like Sakura?" Kiba asked hoping he'd say yes. His worries were not in vain.
"Of course I like Sakura-chan! I love her!" he smiled as hee thought about Sakura.
"Oh!" Kiba sighed in relief, "Then what bout Kira-chan?" he asked.
"I thought I already said that." Naruto said confused.
"Well...I mean..how do you see Kira. Do you...ya know...Like LIKE her?" he asked.
"What?! Kira-chan?! No of course not! I only think as Kira-chan as a good friend... and a great sparing partner too." he added.
"Oh! okay...Welll...umm...bye!" Kiba yelled as he ran off.
Naruto's eyebrows were raised. "oooookay." he muttered as he shook his head and headed off to the campsite.
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So whatcha think? Anyway hope ya update quicker and maybe I will too if I get the chance! See ya!
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#9
Posted 26 May 2006 - 10:48 PM
right, i see what you're saying. tsunade isn't that stupid... is she? well, i mean, she is the legendary sucker, or loser, or whatever... she has to dumb in gambling and betting for that, right? anyways, i'll fix the problem. well, i have some decent ideas now, so thank everyone! especially memories and narusaku fan for the chibi complement! yay!
#10
Posted 27 May 2006 - 02:23 AM
And your welcome MonkeysTotallyRock...also thank you for the compliment in another post on my signature (I'm putting it here b/c otherwise I'll forget :o ).
I only forgot to write sooner...but my memory is so very bad
Funny I should say that and still so very young...while my name may be Memories...all it means is "I'm sunk."
Now I sit here...with a migraine in my head...instead of posting this signature...I've saved it instead.
and my banner says, "Sealed at birth...to hold Kyubi's wrath...only to be shun...abandoned...and laughed at...Dreaming of a future worth living...he wants to be Hokage,...the largest goal of any ninja...This is his journey... from beginning...to end...He's Naruto...a fighter among men.
#11
Posted 27 May 2006 - 06:20 AM
Yeeah I never got that either. But man that bet is steep! -low whistle- But I think that Tsunade's bet is the worst. -shivers- Anyway the only time Tsunade ever wins, is when something bad will happen. oh btw Memories, I love your signiture.
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(゚、 。 7 ~Meow :3 (Hey there pretty little kitty.)
l、 ~ヽ
じしf_, )ノ
#12
Posted 28 May 2006 - 12:45 AM
Yea maybe that means she won't win this or if she does win Naruto will end up having to be nurse to health by Sakura falling back in love with her and she him. The Jiraiya will want his money back.
Thank you NaruSaku fan for the compliment. Ilike yours alot too(but don't tell anybody ....sshhhhh!!! )
I only forgot to write sooner...but my memory is so very bad
Funny I should say that and still so very young...while my name may be Memories...all it means is "I'm sunk."
Now I sit here...with a migraine in my head...instead of posting this signature...I've saved it instead.
and my banner says, "Sealed at birth...to hold Kyubi's wrath...only to be shun...abandoned...and laughed at...Dreaming of a future worth living...he wants to be Hokage,...the largest goal of any ninja...This is his journey... from beginning...to end...He's Naruto...a fighter among men.
#13
Posted 28 May 2006 - 01:09 AM
#14
Posted 28 May 2006 - 02:26 PM
The Jiaiya? Heh. I prefer Naruto's name for him. Ero-sennin! Anyway yeah he might want a refund.. But Jiraiya didn't bet money. Oh well! Anyway it would be funny if Sakura and Naruto accidently figure out about the bet... Sakura would kill them.
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(゚、 。 7 ~Meow :3 (Hey there pretty little kitty.)
l、 ~ヽ
じしf_, )ノ
#15
Posted 01 June 2006 - 07:23 PM
As for the winner.................it doesn't matter as long as getting there is twice the fun.
I only forgot to write sooner...but my memory is so very bad
Funny I should say that and still so very young...while my name may be Memories...all it means is "I'm sunk."
Now I sit here...with a migraine in my head...instead of posting this signature...I've saved it instead.
and my banner says, "Sealed at birth...to hold Kyubi's wrath...only to be shun...abandoned...and laughed at...Dreaming of a future worth living...he wants to be Hokage,...the largest goal of any ninja...This is his journey... from beginning...to end...He's Naruto...a fighter among men.
#16
Posted 01 June 2006 - 10:50 PM
#17
Posted 18 July 2006 - 05:43 PM
I think the story would rock but it a little to spread out
#18
Posted 18 July 2006 - 09:51 PM
Oh yeah, I have a little suggestion to make. I don't suggest making up stuff for the story as you write since that's where a lot of the chaos and confusion happens. Perhaps you should plan it all out completely and then continue writing. Unless you've already done that, then nevermind.
Anyway, I'm curious to see how this love triangle along with the bets will turn out. Good luck with your writer's block and your Jiraiya/Tsunade wins the bet scenario.
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#19
Posted 19 July 2006 - 12:34 AM
If I was working on this story I would do the following.
First, I would have the scenes only span a few days.
Two, while having Tsunade and Jiraiya bet, that isn't the point of the story. You need a theme. If Naruto is the main character of your story, then you need to give him something, something that he wants or a problem. Primal issues are usually the best. Ask yourself these questions: What does he want? What is standing in his way? How is he going to get it?
Three, you want to start your story as near to the climax as possible because this is a short story. You do not have a lot of time for exposition.
Four, limit your characters. The more characters you have the more deminsions your story has. List your characters and look to see if you truly need them.
#20
Posted 19 July 2006 - 01:36 AM
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