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[Dart Tension]

Well seeing as how I recently discovered the art of narusaku mushyness. After reading a bunch of fics for about a week now. (A week nonstop seriously) I've decided to write a fic of my own. A problem is it conflicts with a story I'm currently typing about a superhero. This story is nonstop so I'm not abandoning it it just means I'm spending less time on it.

Anyways the fic willbe narusaku obviusly. however for a year now I've had this crazy fantasy where I would miraculously arrive in the naruto universe and become friends with the ninja of konoha (or konohagure sp?) especially naruto and sakura. Now I actually plan on putting this fantasy in words.

I will not have my own name but the name of the super hero in my other story, Dart Tension! (copyrighted by me! ) Dart Tension is a teenaged boy that is based off me in both stories. He had powers such as strength, speed, ect. However in the fic, Dart Tension is me, just a different name. (hope I'm not confusing)

Anyways it will start off with me in my room and after a certain occurence of events I will find my self in the naruto world just after team seven gets back from the lands of waves arc with zabuza. After a while I discover I have powers and become a part of team 7. The story will be very humorous focusing some of the story on me but at the same time revolving around the relationship of Naruto and Sakura.
I soon realize that my presence in the naruto world makes things that were supposed to happen in the anime and manga can be changed by me. I also am trying to get naruto and sakura together like suggesting they go somewhere alone and stuff like that.


Some of you may realize that is somewhat similar to "Saotome Naruto". It's true I have read that fic and it's brilliant but I am not stealing any ideas besides the fact of a person arriving in a different universe thing.

Also like some naruto episodes before it starts or after it ends where they have a little bonus where a certain character talks about something. (Seen alot in naruto shippuden) This will occur alot too!


Any thoughts or ideas? I have a pretty solid idea on how to start it and am going to start it in a few minutes.
Wish me luck!!!!!!

(Also I would very much appreciate it if some explains honorifics sp? to me. Example naruto-kun, sakura-chan. I would like to have certain japanese phrases in there too. After watching subs I'm quite familiar with some of them but I feel I should have a couple common phrases like: sorry, hi, I love you and small stuff like that. I don't need them however but it would be cool since Dart is american and is trying to learn japanese byhimself.)


http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3568661/1/

Here is the story.

Edited by Dart Tension, 09 June 2007 - 07:52 PM.

[Dart Tension]

Well I ended the prologue. I'll post it here since it's short but just to give you a small glimpse of what's too come and a small idea what Dart's personality (or my personaility you could say) is like.

Spoiler! --Click here to view--

(Title in production)
By Dart Tension



Author’s Note: Hey everyone! Just letting you know this is my first fanfic and this is dedicated to Naruto and Sakura. I plan on making it multiple chapters and might get further depending on reviews. Right now it’s summer vacation so I’ have plenty of time for this story! Although it takes my time away from animating and another story I’m typing solely for my own amusement. Also this is sort of supposed to resemble the anime in a sense of the specials that happen in the beginning and such like the anime does from time to time. (Dart Tension is not my real name)

Disclaimer: Naruto and other character do not belong to me… so don’t sue. Dart Tension does belong to me, so I will sue if he is used. (However if asked nicely I may allow)


Prologue (a.k.a. Enter: Dart Tension!)
Before Episode Special!!!

*Sometime after time-skip*

Naruto- Hello special viewers! If you are just tuning in, last episode it was hinted that I was going to confess my love to the lovely, intelligent, beautiful, Sakura-chan!
*Naruto’s eyes sparkle*
Sakura- I can’t wait!
*Naruto becomes shocked*
Naruto- Ahh!!!!!! Sakura-chan! W-When did you get here!?
Sakura- At the start of the special! Baka! But anyways the suspense is killing me!
Naruto- Yes I know! In fact I feel like confessing my love to you now! *bonk!*
*Naruto gets head bashed by Sakura’s fist*
Sakura- Baka! Don’t get impatient!
Naruto- *whispers* Ouch Sakura-chan that hurt.

*Rest of rookie 9 and Gai’s team poof in cloud of smoke*

All- Yes Naruto-san we can’t wait either!
Neji- Everyone has waited for this for a while.
Ino- I was wondering when this was going to happen!
Shikamaru- Yeah… Me too.
Lee- This will be a fine moment in Konoha!
*Naruto and Sakura blush*
Naruto- *whispers* Hey Sakura-chan. Let’s start the show already so we can get away from everyone.
Sakura- *whispers back* Agreed.
???- Yeah I can’t wait either!
*The camera zooms out to find a young man standing facing them*
Everyone- *Gets scared from surprise*
Naruto- *Becoming angry from shock* Who the hell are you?!
Dart- My name is Dart Tension! *huge smile* Also I have some bad news!
Everyone- What?!
Dart- Yeah! Turns out the animators didn’t finish the episode so it won’t be aired. *smile drops* Sorry.
*Everyone falls to floor in shock*
*Sakura gets up dragging Naruto*
Sakura enraged- I WAS SUPPOSED TO GET NARUTO IN THIS EPISODE! DO YOU KNOW HOW LONG I’VE WAITED FOR THIS! I WAS SUPPOSED TO GET A HUG, A KISS, OR SOMETHING! *all while pointing at Naruto shaking him like a rag doll who is unconscious from said news*
*Sakura starts shaking Dart furiously by collar while lifted up three feet off ground*
Dart- Sa..Sakuu-ur-urr-aaa-chan! I…I…w-w-w-illlll…make…. It up y-you!!!
*Sakura stops shaking Dart*
Dart- I’ll make it up to you and Naruto-san!
Naruto- We still need an episode to air!
Dart- Don’t worry let’s just go to how we met! Tada!!! *holds up film* Roll please! *throws off screen*
*Naruto leans towards Sakura*
Naruto- Who is this guy?
Sakura- I don’t know but he better make up for us not being able to love!!!
Naruto- Aww… Sakura-chan I love you too.
Sakura- *blushes* Well at least one good thing came out of this. *hugs Naruto*

*screen fades*

It might have a few gramatical errors but I'm proud of it (I also didn't edit much since this was done within an hour). I'll be working on chapter one for the rest of the week. Thoughts?


Note: Chapters will be much longer than this! Much longer!!!!!!

[Dart Tension]

Ok now I'm having doubts about my title. I don't what the hell it should be called because it doesn't summarize what the story is mainly about. I'm so ashamed! :shamefulcry0js:

I was thinking something along the lines of "The Youth from another dimesion"


I need serious help here. Any suggestions given and a successful/decent title is made, then all credit for the title will go towards that person. I swear! :thumbs:




I would like to apologize for my three posts so far because all I've been doing is screaming for help.

[Dart Tension]

Ok I'm done with the first chapter. Pretty much. I need beta readers.

As for as a title, my mind is leaning towards "Match Maker"

Possibly with the word "foreign" or "alien"...maybe "dimensional".

[SakuNaruLover]

sorry, I don't have time to be a beta reader...don't have time My own stories are going so slow already.

But hope to see your story soon, can't wait.

[Dart Tension]

It's up!!!

http://www.fanfictio...v...1&chapter=1

Enjoy and please review!!!!

That's what keeps me going!!! I'll take criticism too since it's my first fic.

[SakuNaruLover]

It's up!!!

http://www.fanfictio...v...1&chapter=1

Enjoy and please review!!!!

That's what keeps me going!!! I'll take criticism too since it's my first fic.

I keep getting a error

[Dart Tension]

My bad I'm an idiot. That was link to the preview.

Here's the actual story posted.


http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3568661/1/

[Deidara Lover]

Ummmm....uh.......It's....GOOD!!!!!! I like how you put your ' OC '
character into the Naru-verse and all.

[SakuNaruLover]

great story. It was well worth the wait

but what does neechan mean? You called him Naruto-neechan. But I thought that it meant sister or something. Can anyone here help with this?

plz update soon

[Deidara Lover]

It can mean both sister and brother. I think the other spelling is ' ni-chan' . Konohamaru calls Naruot ' Naruto-nee/ni-chan " so I'm sure it's just fine.

[Vivi]

I've read this sort of story before, but I didn't really like it. But yours is wonderful! Keep up the good work!

[Dart Tension]

Thanks!!!!! I should have the second chapter soon.

As for the neechan thing, someone told me it was sister or something. But I could have sworn it could mean brother too.

Ok!!!!!! Time to type!!!!!!!! Get my game face on!!!!! Gotta finish chapter today!!!

[Dart Tension]

Done! Here it is! Enjoy!


http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3568661/2/

[SakuNaruLover]

great chapter, dart

[Dart Tension]

Hey. I'm working on chapter 3 right now, but I don't know if after when Dart becomes a genin I should move in to the chuunin exams or just after some random non-canon missions and some fluff.

If I go to chuunin exams, it will be more serious and a little combat heavy with little fluff until after forest of death. I also get one step closer to the time skip where the real action starts.

If I do random stuff, it will be fluffier than a dog after going to the groomer and Dart can aslo be introduced to all the other characters in Naruto.

Eitherway it's going to end up to the chuunin exams.

So I need opinions.

[SakuNaruLover]

I think that you should do one big mission, somewhat like the wave country. But think of your own mission. And then go to the chuunin exams. Throw in some nice NaruSaku moments, but I wouldn't let them get together too soon. You shouldn't get them together before the chuunin exams.

There is still Sasuke to worry about too, I don't think that she should be over him already. Take care of that too. Her feelings of Naruto keep getting bigger and those for Sasuke decreasing. She starts to see that Naruto is open and she can be herself around him, while she has to act like another person around sasuke. I would do it like that. But in the end it is your call:D I really like your story and I hope to see an update soon:D

btw...are you going to let sasuke leave the village or are you going to change that?

[Sakura~Kitsune]

This is a really good fic! Keep up the good work!
Can't wait for the next chapter

[Dart Tension]

Yeah I was thinking of doing a mission first. I have a good idea what it will be too. However I don't plan on Sakura and Naruto getting together until after the timeskip, but they realize they are in love after the Sasuke retrieval arc.

However during the time leading up to that Sakura is in a mental debate and in question of her love becuase she is going to start seeing the real side of Naruto and there's gonna be some love tension (lol pun) between them.

(Poor Sakura, she's gonna be really confused and stressed for some time)

[SakuNaruLover]

Yeah I was thinking of doing a mission first. I have a good idea what it will be too. However I don't plan on Sakura and Naruto getting together until after the timeskip, but they realize they are in love after the Sasuke retrieval arc.

However during the time leading up to that Sakura is in a mental debate and in question of her love becuase she is going to start seeing the real side of Naruto and there's gonna be some love tension (lol pun) between them.

(Poor Sakura, she's gonna be really confused and stressed for some time)

great idea :thumbs: I hope to see more of your fic soon